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You Had No Right!

prompt entry for the inner child

22 total reviews 
Comment from litroc1700
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Your poem brought out such longing and despair.. you painted a picture... for the things that are taken for granted the most, life tops it off

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
    Thank you for the great review. Hugs, Teri
Comment from Mischief's Momma
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Wow, a very moving poem Teri!

I am so sorry your father did these things to you, and I suspect that it is by God's grace that you cannot remember all of it. Some things He just protects us from. The sin is not yours, it is your father's.

Take care, good luck in the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
    Thank you Sharon. Hugs, Teri
Comment from kristikim
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Hi Teri!
I was sorry to read this poem about your pain as a young adult/child. I wrote this contest thinking it would be about the joys of childhood, or perhaps the pain, but only if it would be cathartic. I just feel now that I wish I never made the contest. Only three people followed the rules, (and I feel that is because I made the contest rules too strict, to come from a child's voice.) It seemed to only lend a way to bring back bad memories, mostly.
I thank you for your heartful memory, which you expressed so well. I appologize if I caused you to relive undue pain. Myself, when I tried to write for this and closed my eyes, all I got was flashes of different ages, and anger and pain. I didn't know where to begin, and I was unable to start, given the strict criteria I had laid out.
Thank you for your noble effort,
kristi

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
    Please don't feel bad. I am ok. Love you, Teri
Comment from nora arjuna
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Hi Teri. I remember reading a poem you wrote before. Still now I'm feeling so bad for you, a little girl who had to go through all this. This must have been another difficult write. You'll be blessed for forgiving him.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    I just did what I was supposed to do. God can't forgive me if I can't forgive others. Thank you my friend. Love, Teri
Comment from Gypsymooncat
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Fantastic entry Teri. The meter was a bit long here and there, but the gist of the story, the emotion with which it was told balanced that out beautifully. A really tremendous effort which gets my vote. You go girl!! xoxoxoxo

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you my friend. I am trying very hard to get back into the mode of writing. I have had writers and reviewers block for what seems ages. Love, Teri
Comment from becky7777
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oh sweetheart i feel so bad for you. that just not right at all. Im so sorry. but your poem is written well following all the rules. good luck in it. sorry this contest brought back so many bad images. feel so bad for you.
love
becky

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you my friend
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
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Wowee Teri, this is some of most moving narrative I have read on fanstory. The forgiveness part so moving. "And when you stand praying, forgive any you have ought against, so I may forgive you. How important that is!
And it is meant to set us free and bring a more abudant life. Thank you for sharing that great testimony.

Dave

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you Dave. You made my night
Comment from IndianaIrish
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Hello Teri! A very painful poem to read when a friend is a victim of abuse. I hope it does well in the contest for you and thank you for sharing your heart.
Indy :>)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thanks my sweet friend
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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This is so sad. I'm sorry your dad did things to you as a child. I was feeling a little alone tonight in this area of my life. I'm sorry this happened to you but I'm glad I'm not the only one...Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you my friend. If someone is abusing you, no matter how much they mean to you, please let someone know that can help you. Hugs, Teri
Comment from tteach
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I finally knelt down and forgave you of this sin.
I was glad you could never hurt me again.
I don't know the plans God has for me.
I hope you made peace in heaven, so the new you I will see.

I am so sorry that this happened to you! Your words touched many today, I am sure. Many walk with the same burden. You have been able to forgive, and perhaps through sharing, you offer many others the ability to forgive as well.

You are very brave!
terry

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Thank you my friend. Hugs, Teri