A Penny For Your Thoughts
Evening with Albert16 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
I just love hearing you read your stories! Ah, that Zee is such a stinker sometimes, huh? Ya just can't help but love her, though. I just love that she left him at the curb!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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I just love hearing you read your stories! Ah, that Zee is such a stinker sometimes, huh? Ya just can't help but love her, though. I just love that she left him at the curb!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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LOL.. Zee gets left at the curb more often than she does the leaving, bless her rotten little heart. Thanks for listening. I am pleased you enjoy my voice. ZeeZee
Comment from maxer
Very erotic. I too find that food can be quite sensual. The act of cooking and eating has many ways of tantalizing the sexual spirit.
This line made me cringe: You're a cougar, I'm a stud. Let's blow out of here and do some serious blowing
But then you followed up with: leaving him at the curb, so I guess your intention was to make him a bit "cheesy" pardon the pun. Which is good, 'cause I have a feeling even the most open minded of women would find that funny... but I guess you gotta deal with the heat if you want to play in the kitchen.
Anyway, nicely done and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Very erotic. I too find that food can be quite sensual. The act of cooking and eating has many ways of tantalizing the sexual spirit.
This line made me cringe: You're a cougar, I'm a stud. Let's blow out of here and do some serious blowing
But then you followed up with: leaving him at the curb, so I guess your intention was to make him a bit "cheesy" pardon the pun. Which is good, 'cause I have a feeling even the most open minded of women would find that funny... but I guess you gotta deal with the heat if you want to play in the kitchen.
Anyway, nicely done and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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This was my fun write for the week. I need to lighten it up, I was depressing myself. Ha Ha.. Thanks much Maxer. ZeeZee
Comment from Sandollar
I thought this was a great short story. Very tastefully done.
I liked the ending very much. I wasn't expecting that- I kind of expected the erotica to go on a little longer. But I like where you left it.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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I thought this was a great short story. Very tastefully done.
I liked the ending very much. I wasn't expecting that- I kind of expected the erotica to go on a little longer. But I like where you left it.
I found no errors.
Sandollar
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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Hi Sandollar. My character of ZeeZee is off the wall. She never does what is expected, hopefully. LOL I want to thank you so much for reading and leaving such a generous review. ZeeZee
Comment from wierdgrace
A wonderful story and the characters with the dialogue got my attentions to read on. this is awesome, and the photo is wonderful. Thank you so much.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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A wonderful story and the characters with the dialogue got my attentions to read on. this is awesome, and the photo is wonderful. Thank you so much.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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Right now the photo is making me hungry. I think I am off for some pasta. Thanks so much for reading and commenting. ZeeZee
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u r so welcome
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I do like your style. Your writing flows naturally,
descriptive and down-to-earth, interesting and so easy to
follow, holding the interest throughout.
I wish I had a six.
sauce, with it's exotic meaty taste, is it veal?" I'd be inclined to put a period after taste. What do you think?
sauce, with it's exotic meaty taste. Is it veal?"
Regards,
Margaret.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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I do like your style. Your writing flows naturally,
descriptive and down-to-earth, interesting and so easy to
follow, holding the interest throughout.
I wish I had a six.
sauce, with it's exotic meaty taste, is it veal?" I'd be inclined to put a period after taste. What do you think?
sauce, with it's exotic meaty taste. Is it veal?"
Regards,
Margaret.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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Yes, Margaret. I like the period. It works. Thanks for the tip. I will change it. And, thank you for your most generous review. I appreciate your kind words. ZeeZee
Comment from wirenut
zeezeewriter,
damn! you can make drinking a martini sexy... it takes a special talent for doing that, i beleive they call it horny. LOL
how's the mayas doing? did'ya get what you wanted form the videos?
well done
be back when I see your name up in lights again
c ya
r
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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zeezeewriter,
damn! you can make drinking a martini sexy... it takes a special talent for doing that, i beleive they call it horny. LOL
how's the mayas doing? did'ya get what you wanted form the videos?
well done
be back when I see your name up in lights again
c ya
r
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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I almost spit my coke across the room when I read this.. your sense of humor cracks me up. Dang, I love you. I loved the videos and had the link posted to another website I administer. 2012.... I need to get my act together, time's a wastin. Thanks much. Later. ZeeZee
Comment from Donovan
If you had a heart at all, it would be colder than my mother- in-law's kiss. But I love the story and your absolute cavalier attitude.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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If you had a heart at all, it would be colder than my mother- in-law's kiss. But I love the story and your absolute cavalier attitude.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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Ahhh Donovan, I have a heart, ask my daughter-in-law. But ZeeZee, now she is a different matter all together. I have created her to be a bit of a stinker. She is shallow and narsistic, and sometimes very foolish. In most instances she gets the losing end of her situations. But I am always true to the character I have created on paper, as you might understand. Thanks for the read and the review. ZeeZee
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..I do understand...
Comment from Broken Fingers
Ah ZeeZee
Now would this be a "men are from Mars..." type thing. For a long while i thought this was just going to be two people misunderstanding each other. Like you were getting the Food/Sex thing and he wasn't, with the end I'm not so sure. But I am a man so I may be all wrong. By the way, you have a very expressive voice and read this brilliantly.
Gavin
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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Ah ZeeZee
Now would this be a "men are from Mars..." type thing. For a long while i thought this was just going to be two people misunderstanding each other. Like you were getting the Food/Sex thing and he wasn't, with the end I'm not so sure. But I am a man so I may be all wrong. By the way, you have a very expressive voice and read this brilliantly.
Gavin
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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Gavin, my character (ZeeZee) is excentric. I have created a character ... I am not her. She is silly and foolish and sometimes awful. Not to be confused with the writer. There is no ZeeZee, she is ficticious. But she is starting to be real to many people.. ha ha.. too crazy. Thanks.
Comment from Judian James
"My thoughts are worth far more than a Chef, working in a mediocre Italian restaurant, can afford. I wondered what he would think if I told him my only thought at the moment was to mount his face and yell, "Giddy Up." "Good one" she said before her blushing caused her to pass out!!!
Excellent and crazy as a loon, you are!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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"My thoughts are worth far more than a Chef, working in a mediocre Italian restaurant, can afford. I wondered what he would think if I told him my only thought at the moment was to mount his face and yell, "Giddy Up." "Good one" she said before her blushing caused her to pass out!!!
Excellent and crazy as a loon, you are!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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yes.. donovan thinks I have no heart.. lol. ZeeZee was a bit of a stinker in this one. She must redeem herself with the men... eventually. Thanks honey for the read and the review. ZeeZee
Comment from jeslaf
ZeeZee, you surprise me with your ending! Surely the cougar didn't denounce the challenge?! Say it ain't so! Funny, descriptive and well-written. I get it, you were doing research, weren't in it for the sex. Was it the unibrow you couldn't do?! :)
Love hearing the real you, and the dinner music and ba-da-bing cymbal crash at the punch line. You're good!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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ZeeZee, you surprise me with your ending! Surely the cougar didn't denounce the challenge?! Say it ain't so! Funny, descriptive and well-written. I get it, you were doing research, weren't in it for the sex. Was it the unibrow you couldn't do?! :)
Love hearing the real you, and the dinner music and ba-da-bing cymbal crash at the punch line. You're good!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2008
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I had fun with this one. I needed a bit of fun. Thanks for the encouragement.. Unibrow.. hmmmmm maybe not. Great red sauce... yes. Thanks. ZeeZee