Song of the Whippoorwills
a two line poetic form16 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
I love the pic and the wee poem you wrote to showcase it.
Great rhyme and I learned several new words.
Glad to see you are post more now !
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2025
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Ciao!
I love the pic and the wee poem you wrote to showcase it.
Great rhyme and I learned several new words.
Glad to see you are post more now !
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2025
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Hello sweet Franca! Thank you so much!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
I am giving this two line poem a six star rating because I dearly love the word play. Just like your whippoorwills, your words trill with assonance and rhyme. I read them aloud and had trouble saying them. But that is cool.
You take the contest to a different level. Your internal rhymes are in the first syllables of words--whip and rip. I like that. Makes the poem more interesting.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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I am giving this two line poem a six star rating because I dearly love the word play. Just like your whippoorwills, your words trill with assonance and rhyme. I read them aloud and had trouble saying them. But that is cool.
You take the contest to a different level. Your internal rhymes are in the first syllables of words--whip and rip. I like that. Makes the poem more interesting.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hi Debbie. Thanks!! I had fun writing this one. It was a challenge to me, but I dearly love birds and the song of the whippoorwill is unique and i like to hear it. I so appreciate you and your encouragement, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Melissa,
This is a wonderful two line poem. I am a big nature lover and grew up with whippoorwills and I loved listening to them. I haven't heard them since I left Upstate NY.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Melissa,
This is a wonderful two line poem. I am a big nature lover and grew up with whippoorwills and I loved listening to them. I haven't heard them since I left Upstate NY.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hello Cecilia. Thank you for your lovely review about the whippoorwills. They are on the decline, but let's hope that their numbers make a resurgence soon. Thanks again!!
Melissa
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You are welcome.
That's sad they are declining.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
You managed 3 similar rhymes in this one... "whippoorwills/trills/rills".
You nailed the inner rhymes... "whip" from "whippoorwills" and "rip" from "rippling". Also the ending rhymes... "wills/rills". And there are 6 syllables per line.
You have some nice alliteration there as well. I especially like "rippling rills", and I can almost hear the little brook gurgling through the woods. I used to love fishing pan-size speckled trout in a rippling rill when I was a kid. Takes me back. Just now, I think of that old hymn, "This is my Father's World"...
"This is my Father's world
And to my listening ears
All nature sings, and round me rings
The music of the spheres"
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hi Melissa,
You managed 3 similar rhymes in this one... "whippoorwills/trills/rills".
You nailed the inner rhymes... "whip" from "whippoorwills" and "rip" from "rippling". Also the ending rhymes... "wills/rills". And there are 6 syllables per line.
You have some nice alliteration there as well. I especially like "rippling rills", and I can almost hear the little brook gurgling through the woods. I used to love fishing pan-size speckled trout in a rippling rill when I was a kid. Takes me back. Just now, I think of that old hymn, "This is my Father's World"...
"This is my Father's world
And to my listening ears
All nature sings, and round me rings
The music of the spheres"
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Oh, KB. I love the song 'This is My Father's World". I love nature too and like to write about it. It is as if I am writing about the Lord, since He made all of it. Your review and comments made me smile. Thank you sweet friend.
Melissa
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Good Morning, Melissa
You might appreciate this old hymn, revived by Brian Doerksen. Have a listen... https://youtu.be/YDTwFF-idTo
Comment from Begin Again
Living in the country and enjoying the sunrise on the river is my blessing and hearing the birds as they greet the day with their song is a blessing. I should learn more about each one but for now I just enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Living in the country and enjoying the sunrise on the river is my blessing and hearing the birds as they greet the day with their song is a blessing. I should learn more about each one but for now I just enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hello Carol. Thank you for your lovely review about the whippoorwills. They are on the decline, but let's hope that their numbers make a resurgence soon. Thanks again!!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Songs of the night create by our feathered friends here Melissa and evidently these birds are in decline so you would be privileged to hear one, I enjoyed your fine two liner, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Songs of the night create by our feathered friends here Melissa and evidently these birds are in decline so you would be privileged to hear one, I enjoyed your fine two liner, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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thanks so much Dolly. So appreciate you!
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This two-line poem, Whippoorwills, has the proper formatting and places the singing bird in the darkness with the local waterway providing inspiration for its call.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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This two-line poem, Whippoorwills, has the proper formatting and places the singing bird in the darkness with the local waterway providing inspiration for its call.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hello Bill. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I have never seen a whippoorwill, but
hear them all the time when they are around.
-You describe the bird well, especially
in the last line as it croons trills."
-A good entry. Good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I have never seen a whippoorwill, but
hear them all the time when they are around.
-You describe the bird well, especially
in the last line as it croons trills."
-A good entry. Good luck!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hello Pam. Thank you for your lovely review about the whippoorwills. They are on the decline, but let's hope that their numbers make a resurgence soon. Thanks again!!
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa. I hope the numbers change, too. I didn't know they were on the decline.
Comment from June Sargent
Whippoorwills do enjoy crooning at night. Trilling by a rilling brook would be thrilling to hear! Love the play on words here. Nice entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Whippoorwills do enjoy crooning at night. Trilling by a rilling brook would be thrilling to hear! Love the play on words here. Nice entry for the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hello June. Thank you for your lovely review about the whippoorwills. They are on the decline, but let's hope that their numbers make a resurgence soon. Thanks again!!
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, this poem has a great use of rhyme and also of alliteration. It is nicely constructed, and contains such a musical sound to the words. Nice picture. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Wow, this poem has a great use of rhyme and also of alliteration. It is nicely constructed, and contains such a musical sound to the words. Nice picture. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Hello Carol. Thank you for your lovely review about the whippoorwills. They are on the decline, but let's hope that their numbers make a resurgence soon. Thanks again!!
Melissa
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You're welcome. I enjoyed reading it. Have a blessed weekend. Carol