The Shadow and the Fairies
In The Attic - 511 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really good story, one that kids will love, especially girls as Jordan is so brave, and Quinn isn't so brave. Quinn always does come through, but you need to make him the hero in a few of the episodes. You are missing an "s" . . . raised her eyebrow(s). Also, some of your paragraphs are lacking the spaces between them.
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This is a really good story, one that kids will love, especially girls as Jordan is so brave, and Quinn isn't so brave. Quinn always does come through, but you need to make him the hero in a few of the episodes. You are missing an "s" . . . raised her eyebrow(s). Also, some of your paragraphs are lacking the spaces between them.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
Young children would be delighted with this captivating chapter. The twins have a beautiful relationship with their loving grandma. They also like adventure. Jordon is brave and Quinn is funny. But together, they rescued the fairies, boxed the books as Grandma asked, and was ready for pizza.
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Young children would be delighted with this captivating chapter. The twins have a beautiful relationship with their loving grandma. They also like adventure. Jordon is brave and Quinn is funny. But together, they rescued the fairies, boxed the books as Grandma asked, and was ready for pizza.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Carol Clark2
Good chapter, with lots of courage needed to find and release the fairies. Suggestion: You might introduce the enchanted lantern somewhere earlier. Suddenly Jordan's holding it. And perhaps its light could play a role in the distracting of the bramble creature. Kids will love this adventure. Blessings. Carol
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Good chapter, with lots of courage needed to find and release the fairies. Suggestion: You might introduce the enchanted lantern somewhere earlier. Suddenly Jordan's holding it. And perhaps its light could play a role in the distracting of the bramble creature. Kids will love this adventure. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another wonderful adventure for the twins, and the bramble creature is no more. Just a harmless bramble. And they managed to save the fairies and restore the light. All in time to finish boxing up the books before Grandmother came home with pizza! Another happy ending and another fabulous adventure. Well done, my friend. I hope you are resting now. Love you lots. Sandra xxx
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Another wonderful adventure for the twins, and the bramble creature is no more. Just a harmless bramble. And they managed to save the fairies and restore the light. All in time to finish boxing up the books before Grandmother came home with pizza! Another happy ending and another fabulous adventure. Well done, my friend. I hope you are resting now. Love you lots. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Gayla putnam
Your fantasy writing is colorful and descriptive. I feel like walking right through the mirror with the kids to the Forest of Wonder. You do an excellent job of setting the scene and creating an atmosphere. Starting and ending the story at Grandma's house is both a nice lead in and ending. gayla
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Your fantasy writing is colorful and descriptive. I feel like walking right through the mirror with the kids to the Forest of Wonder. You do an excellent job of setting the scene and creating an atmosphere. Starting and ending the story at Grandma's house is both a nice lead in and ending. gayla
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is another great adventure these two siblings went on. I have a feeling Grandma is very much aware of what these two are doing. Great job.
Jordan tightened her grip on the pendant as she spoke. "Someone has taken the fairies." (spoke,)
The Guardian continued, his tone heavy with warning. "The Deep Thicket (warning,)
Ignoring him, the fox continued. "Thorny traps and illusions protect the (continued,)
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This is another great adventure these two siblings went on. I have a feeling Grandma is very much aware of what these two are doing. Great job.
Jordan tightened her grip on the pendant as she spoke. "Someone has taken the fairies." (spoke,)
The Guardian continued, his tone heavy with warning. "The Deep Thicket (warning,)
Ignoring him, the fox continued. "Thorny traps and illusions protect the (continued,)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You deserve a six******. I don't have one, so I will tell you, your story is absolutely brilliant, charming, delightful, effervescent, fantastical, glorious, healing, interesting, joyful, kind,loving, mystical,naturally open, pleasing, quite readable, sensational, tender, unusually vibrant and wonderous, eXcessively youthful and zany. Karen
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You deserve a six******. I don't have one, so I will tell you, your story is absolutely brilliant, charming, delightful, effervescent, fantastical, glorious, healing, interesting, joyful, kind,loving, mystical,naturally open, pleasing, quite readable, sensational, tender, unusually vibrant and wonderous, eXcessively youthful and zany. Karen
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from patcelaw
The adventures of Jordan and Quinn and attic is very interesting and I am enjoying so much reading the story. Your imagination is absolutely wonderful and I appreciate that in a good writer. Patricia.
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The adventures of Jordan and Quinn and attic is very interesting and I am enjoying so much reading the story. Your imagination is absolutely wonderful and I appreciate that in a good writer. Patricia.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
I do love this growing collection of stories beyond the mirror, Carol.
I also really enjoy the fact that the lead isn't the old trope of the brother surging ahead, but rather the sister being the one full of bravery and the desire for adventure.
Good stuff
Tim x
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I do love this growing collection of stories beyond the mirror, Carol.
I also really enjoy the fact that the lead isn't the old trope of the brother surging ahead, but rather the sister being the one full of bravery and the desire for adventure.
Good stuff
Tim x
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from Ric Myworld
Slipping off to the magical forest sounds like the perfect getaway for children. Heck, what am I talking about, it would be the perfect getaway for old people too. :-) Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Slipping off to the magical forest sounds like the perfect getaway for children. Heck, what am I talking about, it would be the perfect getaway for old people too. :-) Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I'd like to get lost in one right about now...but no ogres please...I deal with enough of those in real time life. Thanks for taking the time to read this silly story. I appreciate your time and YOU!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
