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The Devil Fights Back

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Challenges in the pharmaceutical field

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Comment from Neonewman
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Fran was a little upset with Dana, but not as much as I feared. The first half was rather intense; I felt my muscles relaxed when we got to Marie. Jim, it's your fault I like Marie so much, lol. Brilliant Chapter, my friend.
One more to go, then I'm caught up.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2025

Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I can see problems ahead for Fran, can't I? Young children do love the wrapping paper, like most of us, they are my favourite Christmas photos. A good read Jim,
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2025
    Thanks very much, Valda. Fran does have her work cut out for her in getting that wiretap warrant. Hopefully the judge she chooses will have more sympathy for the intended victim than the perpetrator.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
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Jim,

What a great addition to your book it's coming along nicely. Hopefully Fran can use the information Dana has obtained. Good old Marie is coming right along.

Your story is well organized and flows nicely.

Cecilia

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
    Thanks so much, Cecilia. Fran will certainly wrestle with the idea of using Dana's info. We'll see if she decides to in the end. I'm looking forward to your thoughts on Marie after the next couple of chapters.
reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 19-Jan-2025
    You're welcome and looking forward to the next few chapters.
Comment from Wendy G
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Very well-written chapter. I thought Fran would be distressed by what Dana had done, and Dana needs to be very careful in the future. It was a relief to get to Marie's part and be able to relax!
Wendy

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
    Thanks very much, Wendy. Oh, good. I've got you primed for the next chapter with Marie! We'll be with her for a couple more chapters before we switch it up and get back to the Dipraxa plan.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This was a really interesting chapter with plans going forward to convict Dana's boss of something in a rather unethical way. Marie has almost totally changed her personality, although I doubt she'll ever love bluegrass.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks so much, Carol. You'll see in the next couple of chapters how Marie still has a ways to go and some mea culpas to get out there. You're right, though; she probably never will like bluegrass.
Comment from LJbutterfly
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I enjoyed the mild complexity of the discussion between Dana and Fran. I was glad Fran carefully considered all the possibilities before agreeing to contact a judge with illegally obtained information. I'm also glad she referred Dana to a YouTube video for the sound of Brian's voice.

I enjoy novels where surprising technicalities occur, but where the author has already worked out the details of how to move forward.

Marie is a work in progress. She is trying hard to be more agreeable. Fortunately, her major grievance was with the airline.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    I appreciate your analysis here, Lorraine. Dana has definitely put Fran in an ethical dilemma here about what she should do with the information illegally obtained. Having possible violence brought against a family member, seemed to be the thing that persuaded her to try to get that warrant in the end. At least she admits what she's doing and doesn't try to rationalize it away.

    I've really enjoyed developing Marie's character throughout the novel. We'll see a lot more of her in the next two chapters.
Comment from royowen
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I hope the story doesn't become too complex with many characters involved. But I like the differing directions of the stories, and how the progress of the drug is the base of the narrative. Marie throws a bit of a digression, but the part that interests me a lot. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks so much, Roy. Marie's part in the story has become one of the most enjoyable aspects of writing this story. The next couple of chapters will deal exclusively with her. How she fits into the other plots remains to be seen, but she will eventually.
reply by royowen on 18-Jan-2025
    Yes, as an observer of human behaviour she is most interesting.
Comment from eliz100
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I usually read my messages from the top down but skipped four to start my reading. I enjoy reading your stories. I will do my best to catch up with this one. This was an interesting piece that flowed. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks so much, Lee. I appreciate the kind words.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I wonder if Fran has forgiven Dana a little prematurely. She'll need to be watched. But Fran is definitely getting her ducks in a row and is the brain behind this mission, able to see different perspectives. And then we have Marie, always a pleasure. Sarcastic and always with a bone to pick regarding someone on her travels. A great gift for Brian with the sweatshirt but I can just imagine a stray reporter snapping a picture of him wearing this, which might not go down too well. All in all, another excellent chapter with good pace and entertaining content. Purely grammatically, I would only suggest the following:
"I'm going to have to carefully choose the judge (from whom to obtain the warrant) - sorry, just to avoid a preposition at the end:)
"This is just so that(,) if Merra ever hears Brian speak,..."

Warm wishes, Debbie

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks so much, Debbie. Hopefully, Fran's words had an impact on Dana, and she will cool it in the future. As we will see, Fran is right not to totally squelch Dana's moxie, which may become quite useful later on.

    Hopefully, at least for now, Brian will only wear that sweatshirt at home!

    Thanks for your grammatical suggestions too.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I have a skylight which my boys send me family photos to the address it's attached to, almost weekly, so I can keep up on the doings of my grandkids. Thank you for sharing this wonderfully written addition. I'm not really surprised with Fran's response to Dana. Dana is a loose cannon in all of this.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks so much, Barbara. Yes, Dana is definitely a loose cannon, and if Fran is smart, she will use Dana's enthusiasm and moxie to her advantage.
reply by barbara.wilkey on 18-Jan-2025
    I have a feeling Fran is very smart.