Veil of Secrets
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Veil of Secrets - Chap 7"Mystery/Crime and Ghosts
15 total reviews
Comment from royowen
You've thickened the plot and caused new characters into the story, but I'm aware of your incredible ability to hold your story with no appearance or schism. Athea is a great name, and some connection to ReBecca, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
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You've thickened the plot and caused new characters into the story, but I'm aware of your incredible ability to hold your story with no appearance or schism. Athea is a great name, and some connection to ReBecca, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
Comment from Carol Clark2
I appreciate the summary of each chapter so far. Even though I've read , them, it's easy to forget some of the details, as least for my brain. I like the sub-divided list of characters also. It's helpful that way. Well, Eleanor is always on the job and looking for information. Another good chapter. Blessings. Carol
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I appreciate the summary of each chapter so far. Even though I've read , them, it's easy to forget some of the details, as least for my brain. I like the sub-divided list of characters also. It's helpful that way. Well, Eleanor is always on the job and looking for information. Another good chapter. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
Comment from Pearl Edwards
More trouble indeed it seems is waiting to envelop Eleanor and her friends.
Another great chapter, Carol, full of drama and intriguing questions. Well written,
cheers,
valda
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More trouble indeed it seems is waiting to envelop Eleanor and her friends.
Another great chapter, Carol, full of drama and intriguing questions. Well written,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
Comment from Jacob1395
That was a tense moment between Eleanor and Philip. I thought you did the scene between him and Jenna really well at the beginning and I could feel the emotion she was going through really well. Another excellent chapter, Carol. I can't wait for the next one.
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That was a tense moment between Eleanor and Philip. I thought you did the scene between him and Jenna really well at the beginning and I could feel the emotion she was going through really well. Another excellent chapter, Carol. I can't wait for the next one.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Another very thoughtful and cleverly crafted chapter with mystery and intrigue peaking my interest.
The storyline flowed freely and cohesively with a clever mix of emotion, suspense and intrigue.
Another fine chapter, and as always a pleasure to read.
Blessings
Shirley
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Another very thoughtful and cleverly crafted chapter with mystery and intrigue peaking my interest.
The storyline flowed freely and cohesively with a clever mix of emotion, suspense and intrigue.
Another fine chapter, and as always a pleasure to read.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
Comment from karenina
I can't figure this Althea of the faked birth certificate out. Have I lost the thread? If she is Rebecca's half sister why the forged documents? Oh, if you don't tell me I'm sure Eleanor will dig in and get to the truth!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I can't figure this Althea of the faked birth certificate out. Have I lost the thread? If she is Rebecca's half sister why the forged documents? Oh, if you don't tell me I'm sure Eleanor will dig in and get to the truth!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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pulling out the forged will and her birth certificate...... I meant this to show the will was forged and not her birth certificate. I'm not sure how to write it so the reader isn't confused. Suggestions?
Smiles, Carol
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Pulled my out her genuine birth certificate, and with some trepidation, the forged will...
Maybe?
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I'm not sure why Althea needs a faked birth certificate if she is half-sister to Jenna. I can understand the will might be a fake, unless her relationship to Jenna has nothing to do with the Vineyard part of the family. If her son is a prisoner, she has to be strong to go through with this.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I'm not sure why Althea needs a faked birth certificate if she is half-sister to Jenna. I can understand the will might be a fake, unless her relationship to Jenna has nothing to do with the Vineyard part of the family. If her son is a prisoner, she has to be strong to go through with this.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Her birth certificate is not forged only the will which the mob produced......pulling out the forged will and her birth certificate...Suggestions on how to say it so the reader isn't confused? And Althea is Rebecca's half sister not Jenna's.
Smiles, Carol
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I certainly didn't get my brain around it correctly. So sorry. Put birth certificate first and then forged will?
Comment from Wendy G
The complexity increases - but you seem to be holding all the strands together as you deftly weave them all into a compelling story. We haven't seen Garth etc for a while - I hope they are still working hard on the Doyle component. Well written, as always.
Wendy
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The complexity increases - but you seem to be holding all the strands together as you deftly weave them all into a compelling story. We haven't seen Garth etc for a while - I hope they are still working hard on the Doyle component. Well written, as always.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! A lot happened in this chapter. There are so many avenues and characters crisscrossing each other it's as though you're creating a combustible product that you keep adding fire to until it explodes.
This is your most dramatic and complex novel yet. Your summary of chapters was genius. It refreshes your reader's memory. Your separation of main characters was also helpful.
This novel must also be published.
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Wow! A lot happened in this chapter. There are so many avenues and characters crisscrossing each other it's as though you're creating a combustible product that you keep adding fire to until it explodes.
This is your most dramatic and complex novel yet. Your summary of chapters was genius. It refreshes your reader's memory. Your separation of main characters was also helpful.
This novel must also be published.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow Whee, the _ _ _ _ is about to hit the fan for sure. I'm just glad I'm going to be there to see it coming. And I'm even more glad that I won't be standing so close to get it all over me. :-) Thanks for sharing.
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Wow Whee, the _ _ _ _ is about to hit the fan for sure. I'm just glad I'm going to be there to see it coming. And I'm even more glad that I won't be standing so close to get it all over me. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
