Painful Memories
My hot mess of a life22 total reviews
Comment from Rick Gardner
Your autobiography is difficult to read as the difficult life you had to experience. You became the person you were meant to be, hate to say but time cures many wounds. I entered this into the contests for this reason. I am heart felt you spoke of your life experiences. Thanks
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Your autobiography is difficult to read as the difficult life you had to experience. You became the person you were meant to be, hate to say but time cures many wounds. I entered this into the contests for this reason. I am heart felt you spoke of your life experiences. Thanks
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Rick,
Thank you for the wonderful review. My life was tough, but I didn't let it define me. It made me a survivor and a warrior. The past is gone and I have today and I will continue to grow.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Wow, what a heartfelt story. The story was well written and descriptive. Your story almost sounds like my childhood. There are some differences, but it was pretty bad. I understand your pain. I had years of counseling that has helped me. I am so glad your life turned around.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2025
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Wow, what a heartfelt story. The story was well written and descriptive. Your story almost sounds like my childhood. There are some differences, but it was pretty bad. I understand your pain. I had years of counseling that has helped me. I am so glad your life turned around.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2025
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Brenda,
Thank you for the wonderful review. Yes, my youth was a crap show , but it made me a warrior and survivor.
I've had conversation with other who had a crappy childhood. It must of been a generational thing..
I'm sorry your childhood was similar. We survived and became tougher for it.
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I thinking was. My husband had a bad childhood too. I'm glad we are survivors.
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We have two choses: To wallow in our bad childhood or to chose to be survivors and warriors.
Comment from Angel Debbie
I give you praise for realizing you had a problem that followed after your parents and found God to help lead you out of those problems. Many do not find the Lord for help praise God you did. Great write, good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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I give you praise for realizing you had a problem that followed after your parents and found God to help lead you out of those problems. Many do not find the Lord for help praise God you did. Great write, good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Debbie,
Thank you for the great review. I would be dead without God.
Cecilia
Comment from cupa tea
That's a hard life. I thrilled for you that things finally got better!
Oft(often) times we get into a fight and I throw that in his face. I never stepped outside the marriage. When I said I do I meant it.
Review how many times you've used the word "well," and think about how to change it. I do that, often, with the word and.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2024
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That's a hard life. I thrilled for you that things finally got better!
Oft(often) times we get into a fight and I throw that in his face. I never stepped outside the marriage. When I said I do I meant it.
Review how many times you've used the word "well," and think about how to change it. I do that, often, with the word and.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate it. I will see what I can do to change the repeating word.
Comment from RFL
Wonderful story so simply and masterfully told! I am so glad you turned your life around and are now living in a happy place. Best of luck to you!
RFL
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Wonderful story so simply and masterfully told! I am so glad you turned your life around and are now living in a happy place. Best of luck to you!
RFL
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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RFL,
Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I appreciate it.
Cecilia
Comment from Natureschild
Your autobiography is an honest and powerful portrayal of resilience and growth. You confront painful truths with courage, making the story both relatable and heartfelt. Ending on a hopeful note highlights your endurance and progress beautifully.
However, some areas could benefit from refinement to fully engage your audience.
Focus on key events. Streamlining the narrative around pivotal moments would strengthen its impact. Avoid repetitive incidents to maintain momentum. Less is more.
Reduce redundancy by varying expressions to add interest and prevent monotony. Phrases like "finally had enough" appear multiple times.
Polish grammar and simplify long, comma-heavy sentences for clarity and smoother readability.
Enhance descriptions. Replace direct narration with evocative and sensory descriptions to draw readers emotionally into your journey.
Trim unnecessary words and details. For example, condensing sentences like the Navy enlistment passage ensure the message is clear yet concise.
Your story has immense potential to inspire. I hope you find this review helpful.
Best wishes, Terry
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Your autobiography is an honest and powerful portrayal of resilience and growth. You confront painful truths with courage, making the story both relatable and heartfelt. Ending on a hopeful note highlights your endurance and progress beautifully.
However, some areas could benefit from refinement to fully engage your audience.
Focus on key events. Streamlining the narrative around pivotal moments would strengthen its impact. Avoid repetitive incidents to maintain momentum. Less is more.
Reduce redundancy by varying expressions to add interest and prevent monotony. Phrases like "finally had enough" appear multiple times.
Polish grammar and simplify long, comma-heavy sentences for clarity and smoother readability.
Enhance descriptions. Replace direct narration with evocative and sensory descriptions to draw readers emotionally into your journey.
Trim unnecessary words and details. For example, condensing sentences like the Navy enlistment passage ensure the message is clear yet concise.
Your story has immense potential to inspire. I hope you find this review helpful.
Best wishes, Terry
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review. I will take your advice and see where I can cut the fat.
Cecilia
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You're welcome.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a horrible childhood you had, Cecilia! I can't understand parents like you had, and there are so many of them! I'm sorry you suffered so much, and continued to do so as you grew up. But at the end of your journey, you and your husband found God. You can't go wrong now, not with Him in your life. He will watch over you both. Well done for having the courage to write it all down. I'm sure it helped you as well. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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What a horrible childhood you had, Cecilia! I can't understand parents like you had, and there are so many of them! I'm sorry you suffered so much, and continued to do so as you grew up. But at the end of your journey, you and your husband found God. You can't go wrong now, not with Him in your life. He will watch over you both. Well done for having the courage to write it all down. I'm sure it helped you as well. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Sandra,
Thank you for the kind review. It was a tough life, but it made me a strong woman. Took lots of therapy to get there. I am a warrior and I don't back down to anybody. God is good.
Cecilia
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That's good to hear. Abusive parents ruin so many childrens lives. It's not right. Good for you for coming through it so well. 😊xx
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Yes, the cycle has to stop some where.
Comment from bob cullen
Three times I stopped reading this. It was so depressing, and I knew how it would end. Badly. But I persevered and I'm glad I did. It turned into a really good story, with a most satisfactory outcome. I'm delighted to read your comment about achieving peace in your life. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Three times I stopped reading this. It was so depressing, and I knew how it would end. Badly. But I persevered and I'm glad I did. It turned into a really good story, with a most satisfactory outcome. I'm delighted to read your comment about achieving peace in your life. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Hi Bob,
Thank you for your kind review. There is so much more I could have added, but it would have been a novel by the time I was done. It was a rough go, but I survived. God was my savior.
Cecilia
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You did have a tough life. It isn't what kids should have. That's why my husband and I adopted seven children, ages 10, 9, 8, 5, 4, 3 and 18 months, the last one coming when I was 55. My childhood was also uncomfortable, but not nearly as bad as yours. All of the kids came from really rough lives. We have learned to believe the future is what we look to, but it has been very hard since our 33-year-old killed himself in April, and we had no idea he thought he was going insane. You do a good job of writing, and I hope all your future days are sunshine and smiles.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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You did have a tough life. It isn't what kids should have. That's why my husband and I adopted seven children, ages 10, 9, 8, 5, 4, 3 and 18 months, the last one coming when I was 55. My childhood was also uncomfortable, but not nearly as bad as yours. All of the kids came from really rough lives. We have learned to believe the future is what we look to, but it has been very hard since our 33-year-old killed himself in April, and we had no idea he thought he was going insane. You do a good job of writing, and I hope all your future days are sunshine and smiles.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Carol,
First of I'm sorry for you loss. Losing a child is the worst. I know you never get over it. Bless you for adopting all those children. You will have a special place in heaven.
Thank you for the kind review. It was tough, but it made me a stronger person. I am a warrior.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This could be a very healing chapter for others who have had similar childhoods. It's nice that you are sharing your vulnerability with us. My autobiography was quite popular as it had a lot of my childhood darknesses.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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This could be a very healing chapter for others who have had similar childhoods. It's nice that you are sharing your vulnerability with us. My autobiography was quite popular as it had a lot of my childhood darknesses.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Liz,
Thank you very much for your review. I hope others can get inspired and know life can only beat you down if you let it. I am a warrior.
Cecilia
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You go girl
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Thank you
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certainly, it was courageous
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It was. I had two choices move on, or let it define who I am.
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So true and I have moved on i think writing my books has helped me move on.
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my pleasute
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Yes, writing always helps. My saving grace was finding Jesus. It has helped me move on.
