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Two very real women in not so real situation.

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Comment from marilyn quillen
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hey, late or not you made a helluvan entrance, is a NJ cat fight anything like a PA hillbilly hick fight? Next time I goota join one of these party and see just how much fun I can get myself into! i drink tequila and listen to bonjovi as the song goes, lol. anyhow, I really enjoyed your story and your writing, great job

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    lol! Thank you so much!! Xo
Comment from patcelaw
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Another very well written version of the story story convention in New Jersey and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It was a fun read and I wish you the very best for the weekend. I also wish you a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    Thank you, Patricia! Xo
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    Thank you, Patricia! Xo
Comment from Bill Schott
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You seem to have had an intersting time at the convention, once you got there. The noise and chaos truly was extraordinary, along with the excessive beard pulling and passes from drunk chicks. The ducklings had gotten into the hard cider as well.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Haha, thanks, Bill!
Comment from Michele Harber
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This is very funny, Jessica. I think one of the funniest things about it is how casually you throw out outlandish, humorous lines as though they were the most normal thing in the world. You make "Gretchen Hargis popped up from under a table," "I dodged a meatball," and "Pam, Karenina, and Sally made an effort to shield them with serving trays" sound as though they happen every day. You could definitely challenge the late, great Bob Newhart for deadpan delivery. Your knockdown, dragout wrestling match was certainly the Coup de grĂ¢ce. Thank you for a well-needed laugh.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2024

Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was so fun. I love that everyone had a different take on the chaos at the convention. You had me laughing with your breadstick microphone. That would be quite a scene to see. Poor Jim, getting ladled in the nose. Ouch. Great entry. Gretchen

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
    Thank you, Gretchen! This was so much fun, and I'm sad to see it end! Xoxo
Comment from Begin Again
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Another fantastic version of what went on at the Fanstory convention...quite the rowdy group when they get away from that computer.... not just boisterous either...physical, it seems. I had so much fun writing and I hope we do this again sometime. Thanks for sharing your version. It was a hoot!
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    Lol! Thank you so much, Carol. This was a lot of fun to cook up.
    Xoxo
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    Lol! Thank you so much, Carol. This was a lot of fun to cook up.
    Xoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a fun contribution to the chaos at the Fanstory Convention Jessica and I enjoyed your version and it is a pity you arrived too late to see how well behaved everyone was at the beginning! Ha ha ha, what a fun post, I loved your version, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    lol thank you so much, Dolly! That's what I get for being chronically tardy!
    Xoxo
    Jess
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    lol thank you so much, Dolly! That's what I get for being chronically tardy!
    Xoxo
    Jess
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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The reader will lean forward to find out more of what's going on here: "I opened the door to an unexpected scene. Chaos. Complete chaos.
People were shouting, dishes were breaking, and food was flying. I stood there, blinking rapidly in disbelief. Was this some kind of weird performance art? This was a fun line: "I dodged a meatball and looked around the room" A great job

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    Liz, thank you so much!!! I really appreciate this review!
    Xoxo
    Jess
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    Liz, thank you so much!!! I really appreciate this review!
    Xoxo
    Jess
reply by Liz O'Neill on 02-Nov-2024
    my pleasure
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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YAAAAY!! Jane got hers, and you were the hero for the day - DEFINITELY not late to that party!! It seems to me your fight scene was timed exactly right. Lucky for Jim and everyone else in attendance!!

Good rollicking contribution to the book, Jess; thank you very much for participating! xoxox

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    lol this was so much fun. Thank you for the opportunity! I'm sad to see it end!
    Xoxox
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    lol this was so much fun. Thank you for the opportunity! I'm sad to see it end!
    Xoxox
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Hah!
Jessica!
Absolutely delightful!
And I am the "Napkin Queen!"
I absolutely would be attempting to clean up with a wide assortment of napkins!
What a fun romp!
And thank goodness for your "best friend" to the rescue! That Jim surely is a good guy!

Much enjoyed, Jess!
fondly,
diane

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    diane, thank you so much! Honestly, you were the first to pop into my mind when I wrote that part. I'm glad to hear it wasn't far off! Lol!

    What a fun idea this was.
    Thank you again, diane!
    And I hope jury duty went smoothly!!
    xoxox
    Jess
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
    diane, thank you so much! Honestly, you were the first to pop into my mind when I wrote that part. I'm glad to hear it wasn't far off! Lol!

    What a fun idea this was.
    Thank you again, diane!
    And I hope jury duty went smoothly!!
    xoxox
    Jess