The Meat Purveyor's Son
A Sestina17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your fine story here Shirley and I was thoroughly entertained by your rhymes and well thought out lines. I especially liked the mention of (meat) and shortly after, (curried favour), very clever. Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed your fine story here Shirley and I was thoroughly entertained by your rhymes and well thought out lines. I especially liked the mention of (meat) and shortly after, (curried favour), very clever. Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Dolly x
Comment from EeanBlack
Cross-eyed baby? Shirley! Even in America, we have boundaries. We just never seem to honor them. Sometimes your British phrases make me scratch my head. This time, you took it easy on us. Good genes are something to think about. Me, I have great Jeans, they just don't fit.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Cross-eyed baby? Shirley! Even in America, we have boundaries. We just never seem to honor them. Sometimes your British phrases make me scratch my head. This time, you took it easy on us. Good genes are something to think about. Me, I have great Jeans, they just don't fit.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Think positively. If he's busy making babies with his short, dumpy, cross-eyed wife, he's not out gambling. It's a good thing :)
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I busted a gut girl!
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What is making babies? Is that English?
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'Making babies' - Eean - do you seriously need a talk on the birds and bees at your age!!!!
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How can a bird and a bee procreate? It's just not possible, Shirley. Anyway, what does that have to do with this making baby thing?
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Google :):)
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Ewwwww. I just Googled making babies. You're mean, Shirley!
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I'm a witch. But don't tell anyone.
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Maybe, just maybe, they already know.
Comment from karenina
Kudos to you! I've written one of these. Just one. It is as difficult as it seems to produce a moving and cohesive poem while following the set pattern of the chosen words! Yours is moving and holds my attention from the first line to the last. I'd like to know ~~ How did you come upon your word choices? (Heir, shot, eyes, man, son rose)--
Did your theme proceed the words or did the words inspire the theme?
I've heard the author's answer both ways!
Congratulations!
Impressive in every way!
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Kudos to you! I've written one of these. Just one. It is as difficult as it seems to produce a moving and cohesive poem while following the set pattern of the chosen words! Yours is moving and holds my attention from the first line to the last. I'd like to know ~~ How did you come upon your word choices? (Heir, shot, eyes, man, son rose)--
Did your theme proceed the words or did the words inspire the theme?
I've heard the author's answer both ways!
Congratulations!
Impressive in every way!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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To be honest, Karenina, I wrote it a long time ago and can't remember. I do remember it took me quite a while though!
Thank you for your constant support. I appreciate it xx
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Oh my. Likewise. It's somewhere here, I think...but from long ago.
In my case I selected the words and went from there.
(And survived, I think?)
Nice work1
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I'd love to read it K x
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Too bad about the 'eye-contortedness'. Hope the heir was strong enough to overcome.
I won't begin to understand (or comment) on the rules or compliance thereof of the Sestina. That you passed muster of the contest cops is sufficient.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Too bad about the 'eye-contortedness'. Hope the heir was strong enough to overcome.
I won't begin to understand (or comment) on the rules or compliance thereof of the Sestina. That you passed muster of the contest cops is sufficient.
Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Given their apparent lack of physical attributes, the eye impediment was probably a good thing!
Thank you, Wayne :)
Comment from royowen
I love form poetry, they are a challenge to the writer, but the skilful wordsmith still accepts the challenge and write, I have written many an uncomfortable form, but they take time, so I'll fall back on more forgiving forms when my muse won't let me rest, beautifully written blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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I love form poetry, they are a challenge to the writer, but the skilful wordsmith still accepts the challenge and write, I have written many an uncomfortable form, but they take time, so I'll fall back on more forgiving forms when my muse won't let me rest, beautifully written blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I so appreciate your kind words.
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Most welcome
Comment from Aussie
Welcome back to fanstory. I've been here for 13 yrs! Most that leave do come back eventually. I love England and do miss HRH Queen Elizabeth. This Friday we have King Charlie and his wife arriving for another tour! For me, there will only be Elizabeth. Now, your story poem.
Loved the humour. When like meets like and they see eye to eye! The poor kid born, cross-eyed? Good luck with your contest entry. Aussie.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Welcome back to fanstory. I've been here for 13 yrs! Most that leave do come back eventually. I love England and do miss HRH Queen Elizabeth. This Friday we have King Charlie and his wife arriving for another tour! For me, there will only be Elizabeth. Now, your story poem.
Loved the humour. When like meets like and they see eye to eye! The poor kid born, cross-eyed? Good luck with your contest entry. Aussie.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Aussie. I hope you've got a nice cuppa tea ready for Charles! x
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I haven't forgiven him for what he chose to do to Diana. She was a beautiful lady. The Queen shouldn't have made them marry. What think ye?
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I think he was forced into a marriage he didn't want as time was ticking by. It was never going to work. Poor Diana was only a brood mare. The monarchy is a lot bigger than any of its individuals. Yet how on earth they allowed the Markle woman in I'll never understand. Oh well, we're just the peasants after all :) :)
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Markle has done so much damage to the rules and regulations of the monarchy. She is all about herself, happy that she had an heir to the throne. Yes, the Queen TOLD Charlie to marry Diana (she was a real blue blood.) Personally, I think she was murdered; The Firm couldn't possibly have Dodi as part of the family. Charlie was jealous of her popularity, cause he didn't get a look in. He and his Mrs land in Oz tonite. Many people, heads of state etc. refused the Royal invitation to attend his so-called BBQ. Camilla is a nice person, at least she rolls her sleeves up and does some 'work'. Off my soapbox now. Cheers, Kace.
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Hm, I think the monarchy days are numbered in Aussie anyway. The new generations are just not interested. In a lot of ways, who can blame them. Cheers for the good wishes, Kace.
Comment from DonandVicki
I can tell that you put a lot of work, research and time into this well constructed sestina. The line that caught my attention was: "He wasn't awful fussed if she was short, as long as she was desperate for a man." Sounds like desperation all around.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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I can tell that you put a lot of work, research and time into this well constructed sestina. The line that caught my attention was: "He wasn't awful fussed if she was short, as long as she was desperate for a man." Sounds like desperation all around.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Haha, Donald, yes, a well matched pair, I think! Thank you :)
Comment from Nicki.B
Wow there's a lot of technicality in this poem, thanks for taking us through that in your notes. Well done, very unique I haven't seen a poem in this style before. I really enjoyed the story Ll about how they met, I thought it had great humuor also. Good luck with contest a great contender!
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Wow there's a lot of technicality in this poem, thanks for taking us through that in your notes. Well done, very unique I haven't seen a poem in this style before. I really enjoyed the story Ll about how they met, I thought it had great humuor also. Good luck with contest a great contender!
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Nicki. The sestina is a bit tricky but great fun. I appreciate your kind words.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Shirley
This is a well done sestina that tells a story of an arranged marriage to attach two unmarriageable offspring, according to the parents. It seemed they both have close set eyes that were thought to be their downfall.
It seems a good match that my become a love match.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Enjoy the rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Hi Shirley
This is a well done sestina that tells a story of an arranged marriage to attach two unmarriageable offspring, according to the parents. It seemed they both have close set eyes that were thought to be their downfall.
It seems a good match that my become a love match.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Enjoy the rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Joan.
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You're welcome, Shirley.
Joan
Comment from Kahlani
Hi Shirley, I've never heard of the sestina form. I enjoyed the narrative and had to read it to the end. Now I am wondering about their future. There needs to be a part two!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Hi Shirley, I've never heard of the sestina form. I enjoyed the narrative and had to read it to the end. Now I am wondering about their future. There needs to be a part two!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thank Kahlani - but you would put me through that AGAIN! haha :)