Spirited Justice
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Comment from karenina
I've been away for a bit and confess to having to go back and remind myself where we were in the story...
Lot's going on here! All I could think is if it were not for Eleanor things would be pure chaos.
I'm not liking this whole "video" plan ~ something tells me that can go sideways but quick!
I do love the idea of a cancer wing being built in Allie's honor...
On to the next chapter!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I've been away for a bit and confess to having to go back and remind myself where we were in the story...
Lot's going on here! All I could think is if it were not for Eleanor things would be pure chaos.
I'm not liking this whole "video" plan ~ something tells me that can go sideways but quick!
I do love the idea of a cancer wing being built in Allie's honor...
On to the next chapter!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Hi, Girlfriend! Nice to see you today! Thanks for trying to read the back chapters. You're going to love all the action that takes place in the last few chapters. Eleanor and Danni are at their best!
Love ya, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
I love that Beckett's money will build a cancer wing in honor of Allie, and Naomi and Angelo will have a new home. At the end, where the three are planning, you might add a dialogue tag so the reader knows which two of them are talking. Great chapter! Hugs! Carol
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I love that Beckett's money will build a cancer wing in honor of Allie, and Naomi and Angelo will have a new home. At the end, where the three are planning, you might add a dialogue tag so the reader knows which two of them are talking. Great chapter! Hugs! Carol
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Yes, I thought it was fitting that all the money went to something worthwhile...even if it's a gangster doing it (but a good ganster, right!). After all, he's Garth's friend so he can't be all bad.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Eleanor is working really hard to get Garth and Donatelli to work together. The two of them could solve the case and the cancer ward can begin using the information in the papers. The Ceo and crew only want to destroy the research so that they can keep selling cancer drugs. Sadly, this is a very believable plot.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Eleanor is working really hard to get Garth and Donatelli to work together. The two of them could solve the case and the cancer ward can begin using the information in the papers. The Ceo and crew only want to destroy the research so that they can keep selling cancer drugs. Sadly, this is a very believable plot.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Yes, unfortunately that's exactly what they want to do. They can make more money by offering their drugs then they cold by finding a cure. Evil people!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Well, it's moving rapidly towards a showdown. A video threatening her parents can go very wrong. There are indeed "too many" people involved now, and that's when it will collapse, as some will prefer to turn in order to save their own skins. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Well, it's moving rapidly towards a showdown. A video threatening her parents can go very wrong. There are indeed "too many" people involved now, and that's when it will collapse, as some will prefer to turn in order to save their own skins. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I think the next few chapters will be fun and help us to wrap up the story. I appreciate all your time and support throughout it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
It's good the Eleanor is there moderating and keeping emotional reactions in check. Hopefully, Hilda and Klaus won't be fooled by the video that the bad guys are planning.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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It's good the Eleanor is there moderating and keeping emotional reactions in check. Hopefully, Hilda and Klaus won't be fooled by the video that the bad guys are planning.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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We are getting close to wrapping things up but I guarantee you it doesn't go out with a simple arrest.... That just wouldn't be me now would it? LOL Eleanor will help me out though.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Two more characters enter the scene, William and a research Pharmaceutical CEO, who had a vested interest in the proceedings in the plot. The plot is much more far reaching and complex. But of course if and when there is a cure for that dread disease, it would be, well done Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Two more characters enter the scene, William and a research Pharmaceutical CEO, who had a vested interest in the proceedings in the plot. The plot is much more far reaching and complex. But of course if and when there is a cure for that dread disease, it would be, well done Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Way back in the beginning Jose met the pharmaceutical guys and Johan at the airport. Oh yeah, and the thug or the enforcer was there too. They've kept a low profile until they tried to kidnap Jose for messing thing up...but his father rescued him....Didn't deserve it though.
Smiles, Carol
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Bless you Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
The first half of the chapter is filled with niceties. Frank DiVito offers Angelo and Naomi his beach house in Mexico, and Garth's eyes fill with tears as he thinks of Allie and a possible cancer center being named after her. But then...the second half returns to the three evil partners. I feel the ending coming, but can't guess how you will do it. I look forward to the next chapter.
By the way, Patrick Bernardy recently reviewed a post of mine and suggested I use story breaks when the scene changes. I asked what a story break was. He explained. I see you use story breaks with every scene change. I just learned something.
The words not in your vocabulary, (word's)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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The first half of the chapter is filled with niceties. Frank DiVito offers Angelo and Naomi his beach house in Mexico, and Garth's eyes fill with tears as he thinks of Allie and a possible cancer center being named after her. But then...the second half returns to the three evil partners. I feel the ending coming, but can't guess how you will do it. I look forward to the next chapter.
By the way, Patrick Bernardy recently reviewed a post of mine and suggested I use story breaks when the scene changes. I asked what a story break was. He explained. I see you use story breaks with every scene change. I just learned something.
The words not in your vocabulary, (word's)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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I think you are going to love the last few chapters if I can pull them off properly. Of course, Eleanor will help me. LOL
i've always used scene breaks but I imagine it's whatever suits yur style of writing. I jump around a lot from different places so I thought it gave warning to the reader.
Thanks as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
He doesn't know what he's doing, because Garth is on it. LOL I really like this story.
Angelo joined the conversation. "I know my (conversation,)
The gangster made an evil eye at his friend and then continued. "I think you (continued,)
he looked at Naomi, his words barely a whisper. "Thank you." (whisper,)
I am sure they got a good look at it." (dialogue sounds more natural with contractions, 'I'm')
enforcer spoke, directing his thoughts to William. "I understand (William,)
and the enforcer pounced. "Of course, I'm on to something. (not 100% sure here, but think 'pounded,)
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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He doesn't know what he's doing, because Garth is on it. LOL I really like this story.
Angelo joined the conversation. "I know my (conversation,)
The gangster made an evil eye at his friend and then continued. "I think you (continued,)
he looked at Naomi, his words barely a whisper. "Thank you." (whisper,)
I am sure they got a good look at it." (dialogue sounds more natural with contractions, 'I'm')
enforcer spoke, directing his thoughts to William. "I understand (William,)
and the enforcer pounced. "Of course, I'm on to something. (not 100% sure here, but think 'pounded,)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Sorry I am so far behind but I didn't want to answer until I had the time to make the corrections. Otherwise I would forget what they were. Thank you as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Everybody has secrets, or so it seems. I just read that mealy-mouthed Garth Brooks isn't the good-ole-boy goody-two-shoes he professes to be.
But you've described the situation best in that, "Too many people are getting involved now. This was supposed to be a walk in the park." :-)
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Everybody has secrets, or so it seems. I just read that mealy-mouthed Garth Brooks isn't the good-ole-boy goody-two-shoes he professes to be.
But you've described the situation best in that, "Too many people are getting involved now. This was supposed to be a walk in the park." :-)
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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YOU ARE HAUNTING ME! LOL I just wrote you a lovely response to your review...well, maybe a little snarky, but that's to be expected, right? I sent it off to you and here you are with the same response (you could have been a little original the second time around) and I am writing again.
Don't ask me how this happened, but I am thrilled to say hello to you again. Thank you so much for always stopping by.
Smiles, Carol
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I see you didn't get the first response...It went something like this.... Are you taking the side of the bad guys? Of course you are. And leave the poor Cowboy alone. He is suffering from a broken heart. As for the story... humor needs to take its spot as we wrap it up so I think Eleanor wil have to entertain us with these crooks. that's not exactly what I wrote before...but it will have to do.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Some of us like the crooks best. Well, not who they are and what they do. But bad guys make the most entertaining characters; well, unless they are maybe a ghost. :-) Smiles and hugs back at you! Ric
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Well, you responded twice. So, I guess I'll have to reply a second time too. Have a wonderful weekend . . . before winter sets in!
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Don't eve mention winter! Do you want me to freeze? LOL
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Eleanor is the best!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really nice of the Frank DiVito to do that. He's really not a wicked man, not in his heart. I loved the light-hearted way the first half of this chapter ended; that was really nice. Dear Allie isn't far from everyone's mind. Then we move on to the second half--a bit different atmosphere there! I think Henry is right to worry. I don't trust the enforcer. I will wait impatiently for the next chapter!! Well done, my dear friend. :)) Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
I've just seen the finished cover... Perfection!! I really like it. xxxx
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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That was really nice of the Frank DiVito to do that. He's really not a wicked man, not in his heart. I loved the light-hearted way the first half of this chapter ended; that was really nice. Dear Allie isn't far from everyone's mind. Then we move on to the second half--a bit different atmosphere there! I think Henry is right to worry. I don't trust the enforcer. I will wait impatiently for the next chapter!! Well done, my dear friend. :)) Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
I've just seen the finished cover... Perfection!! I really like it. xxxx
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Good morning, Sandra.
Hope you are feeling okay. Thank you for your thoughts on the cover. I'm happy with it as well.
As I begin to wrap up this story, I have to consider what needs to carry over into the third of the series... for those who will hopefully be reading. I need Garth to come to terms with Allie's death, find resolution for this case, and hint at a budding relationship between Jenna and Matthew. I just finished writing out a rough outline to see how much more we had to go and it's actually coming together faster than I expected. so you know me, I have to throw a little curve into it now and then. LOL I think Eleanor and Danni will enjoy it! Thanks as always.
Smiles, hugs and love, Carol
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Are you going to write the third one for the November 'write a novel in a month? That would be awesome. :))
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Yes, I think so! If it comes out the way I hope, I think it will be the best one yet, but you know how that goes.