Silent Voices
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Unfinished"Verses of personification
12 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Wow, I wish I had a six or even a seven for this one, so filled with imagery and feeling. Your descriptions and attention to details pulls us into this space so completely. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Wow, I wish I had a six or even a seven for this one, so filled with imagery and feeling. Your descriptions and attention to details pulls us into this space so completely. Beautiful!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Ginda, I appreciate that so much. Thank you xoxoxo
Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad to think of a "life unfinished." I love the way you created this collage of impressions that gives the poem a dreamlike feel. Great use of sight and sounds with the onomatopoeia (click) and personification (weeping walls.)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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That's so sad to think of a "life unfinished." I love the way you created this collage of impressions that gives the poem a dreamlike feel. Great use of sight and sounds with the onomatopoeia (click) and personification (weeping walls.)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Helen! Xoxo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You've painted a wonderful picture with words. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. I feel blessed to be able to read this poem. I could see the scene as I read.
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You've painted a wonderful picture with words. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. I feel blessed to be able to read this poem. I could see the scene as I read.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully written poem. It flows very well when it is read aloud the structure the presentation and everything about it is just wonderful. Have a good day and may God bless you. Patric.
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This is a beautifully written poem. It flows very well when it is read aloud the structure the presentation and everything about it is just wonderful. Have a good day and may God bless you. Patric.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Magical, Jess! Once again, you capture such beauty and intrigue in the most unlikely subjects. Love the "cucumber melon" essence and the walls weeping to wear the "half-painted canvas." There's lots more and I could go on. But well done once more! Take care Debbie xo
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Magical, Jess! Once again, you capture such beauty and intrigue in the most unlikely subjects. Love the "cucumber melon" essence and the walls weeping to wear the "half-painted canvas." There's lots more and I could go on. But well done once more! Take care Debbie xo
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from Natureschild
This piece effectively captures a moment of quiet contemplation while the imagery creates a vivid atmosphere and sensory details which bring depth to the scene. It leaves me with a sense of a life which passed prematurely.
The poetry has a lyrical flow. It is enjoyable to read. Nicely done - Terry
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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This piece effectively captures a moment of quiet contemplation while the imagery creates a vivid atmosphere and sensory details which bring depth to the scene. It leaves me with a sense of a life which passed prematurely.
The poetry has a lyrical flow. It is enjoyable to read. Nicely done - Terry
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Terry!
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You're welcome
Comment from Mark Jackson
That is fantastic. I love it. I don't know where the inspiration comes from but it feels so well observed that it has to be real a memory rather than a creation. This is my favourite stanza: A thick silence/swallows the sound,
/and the purple-walled room/smells of cucumber melon. It has so much in it, alliteration I love, and then a smell. I think the smell is what makes it come alive for me. It has to be a six.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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That is fantastic. I love it. I don't know where the inspiration comes from but it feels so well observed that it has to be real a memory rather than a creation. This is my favourite stanza: A thick silence/swallows the sound,
/and the purple-walled room/smells of cucumber melon. It has so much in it, alliteration I love, and then a smell. I think the smell is what makes it come alive for me. It has to be a six.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Mark, I'm so sorry for the late reply on this. Thank you so much!! Xoxo
Comment from Douglas Goff
I have not seen your works in a while, Jessica, and quickly realized I missed your magnetic musings.
You do have a way with words! Almost like an alphabet dance that results in beauty. Nice work here
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I have not seen your works in a while, Jessica, and quickly realized I missed your magnetic musings.
You do have a way with words! Almost like an alphabet dance that results in beauty. Nice work here
D
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from June Sargent
A room in mourning with weeping walls missing the artist of the unfinished painting. This is a tender, yet powerful piece that epitomizes grief. A wonderful addition to your book.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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A room in mourning with weeping walls missing the artist of the unfinished painting. This is a tender, yet powerful piece that epitomizes grief. A wonderful addition to your book.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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June, thank-you so much! Xo
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written Jessica, I think we all have some regrets that our lives could've been better, but the best laid plans of men and mice suggest it might be an epidemic, I love it, a great observation, with a humble conclusion, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Beautifully written Jessica, I think we all have some regrets that our lives could've been better, but the best laid plans of men and mice suggest it might be an epidemic, I love it, a great observation, with a humble conclusion, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024