Silent Voices
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Resilience"Verses of personification
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Comment from tempeste
Ciao ! you have 4 votes now.
For many years I collected smooth pebbles and glass. I always wondered how long these gem-looking objects were in the water to become so precious.
I love the metaphor: a jagged piece of glass ( a young person) tossed about in numerous storms (life trials) will be shaped and its rough edges smoothed out in time. ( trials help us refine our character and become stronger )
Best of luck in the contest!
Every trial ( every storm) we become
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Ciao ! you have 4 votes now.
For many years I collected smooth pebbles and glass. I always wondered how long these gem-looking objects were in the water to become so precious.
I love the metaphor: a jagged piece of glass ( a young person) tossed about in numerous storms (life trials) will be shaped and its rough edges smoothed out in time. ( trials help us refine our character and become stronger )
Best of luck in the contest!
Every trial ( every storm) we become
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Thank you so much, this means a lot to me!!
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You are welcome! 😐
Keep safe !🍀
Comment from BermyBye50
Jessica,
This is a excellent entry worthy of being considered in the
Poem of the Month contest. I wish I had another 6 stars to give you.
You've created a exceptional well written poem that is rich with metaphor and personification. I especially like the following stanzas:
Cradled by the tides,
stroked by fingers
of the frothy sea,
erasing jagged edges.
And I...
have been made patient;
made resilient.
A fragment,
not forgotten,
but softened
by the brine.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Jessica,
This is a excellent entry worthy of being considered in the
Poem of the Month contest. I wish I had another 6 stars to give you.
You've created a exceptional well written poem that is rich with metaphor and personification. I especially like the following stanzas:
Cradled by the tides,
stroked by fingers
of the frothy sea,
erasing jagged edges.
And I...
have been made patient;
made resilient.
A fragment,
not forgotten,
but softened
by the brine.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Eugene, thank you so much. Truly appreciate you.
Xo
Jess
Comment from estory
I liked how you handled the free verse form here, I liked the rhythm of the language, kind of wavering, like the waves in the sea. And the images of the rocks breaking into shards, pieces, is an image that captures the brittle nature of the self, along with the fragility of it. In the end, the timeless waves wear the sharp jagged pieces smoothe, just as time wears the jagged edges of broken relationships into softer forms. Well imagined and well executed. estory
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I liked how you handled the free verse form here, I liked the rhythm of the language, kind of wavering, like the waves in the sea. And the images of the rocks breaking into shards, pieces, is an image that captures the brittle nature of the self, along with the fragility of it. In the end, the timeless waves wear the sharp jagged pieces smoothe, just as time wears the jagged edges of broken relationships into softer forms. Well imagined and well executed. estory
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I truly appreciate this. Thank you so much, estory! Xo
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is really a wonderful metaphor for life, the troubles that toss and turn us, shaping us into beings that are less jagged around the edges. It is as if you write with a paintbrush. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This is really a wonderful metaphor for life, the troubles that toss and turn us, shaping us into beings that are less jagged around the edges. It is as if you write with a paintbrush. Beautiful!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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:) Ginda, you brighten my day! Thank you! Xo
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very nice, indeed. The glass shard theme that you maintained throughout was fantastic.
You are a magical unicorn, Jessica with your ability to produce such beauty.
Awesome.
D
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Very nice, indeed. The glass shard theme that you maintained throughout was fantastic.
You are a magical unicorn, Jessica with your ability to produce such beauty.
Awesome.
D
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
Comment from Barry Penfold
A lovely poem. Had me in from the first line. You have an enchanting style and I particularly love you last stanza and the finality "And I endure".
Thanks for sharing. Have a good day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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A lovely poem. Had me in from the first line. You have an enchanting style and I particularly love you last stanza and the finality "And I endure".
Thanks for sharing. Have a good day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Barry! Xo
Comment from karenina
I love sea glass and have quite a collection! Your poem beautifully portrays that we are never really broken...
We may tumble and toss in this sea of life, but we will be born anew!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I love sea glass and have quite a collection! Your poem beautifully portrays that we are never really broken...
We may tumble and toss in this sea of life, but we will be born anew!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Karenina, that is so beautifully said. Thank you!!
Xo
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You are welcome!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
So true, each storm teaches us a lesson. And like the seaglass smoothed by the rough and tumble of the waves we too can get through the tough times. A lovely addition to your 'silent voices' poems Jessica.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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So true, each storm teaches us a lesson. And like the seaglass smoothed by the rough and tumble of the waves we too can get through the tough times. A lovely addition to your 'silent voices' poems Jessica.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Valda!
Comment from jim vecchio
A very beautiful choice of words. Your poetry flows so smoothly. Before I lost my mobility, I used to haunt the shores for shell treasures and ran into other collectors, some of sea rocks, some of glass. If the sea glass could talk, they'd do it in your words.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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A very beautiful choice of words. Your poetry flows so smoothly. Before I lost my mobility, I used to haunt the shores for shell treasures and ran into other collectors, some of sea rocks, some of glass. If the sea glass could talk, they'd do it in your words.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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I'm honored, Jim, thank you so much!
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It was my pleasure to read it.
Comment from QC Poet
Six stars for walking in my shoes if my bio is posted on my FS page
Like rocks rolling down a hill get chipped ss they roll. Thank you for sharing your excellent poetic story poem Blessings and Great Posting
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Six stars for walking in my shoes if my bio is posted on my FS page
Like rocks rolling down a hill get chipped ss they roll. Thank you for sharing your excellent poetic story poem Blessings and Great Posting
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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You honor me! Thank you!