Trying to remember Ma
On Mother's Day23 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I remember your stories of Christmas that your mom would put on for all of you. So heartbreaking to think of such a young woman dying at 36 and leaving her children. Perhaps the Lord prepared a Victorian style house for her in Heaven. I found it touching that you remember her words. Visual memory varies from person to person, but you remember words because you're a writer. That she was thinking you shouldn't be there when the ambulance came shows how much she wanted to protect you. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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I remember your stories of Christmas that your mom would put on for all of you. So heartbreaking to think of such a young woman dying at 36 and leaving her children. Perhaps the Lord prepared a Victorian style house for her in Heaven. I found it touching that you remember her words. Visual memory varies from person to person, but you remember words because you're a writer. That she was thinking you shouldn't be there when the ambulance came shows how much she wanted to protect you. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your very thoughtful and kind words. I truly appreciate it.
Mary
Comment from jessizero
I am sorry that you have such a rough Mother's Day. It must be really hard to have this lack of memories about someone so important in a child's life. I am sorry for your loss, even though it has been so long. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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I am sorry that you have such a rough Mother's Day. It must be really hard to have this lack of memories about someone so important in a child's life. I am sorry for your loss, even though it has been so long. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 14-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you Jessi, I appreciate your kindness and review.
Best wishes to you.
Mary
Comment from GWHARGIS
Oh my gosh. Your mother was just a baby herself when she passed away. This was well written and I'm sure very hard to write. As a mother it saddens me to think your memories are void of her. I'm so sorry for this feeling of emptiness today. Gretchen
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Oh my gosh. Your mother was just a baby herself when she passed away. This was well written and I'm sure very hard to write. As a mother it saddens me to think your memories are void of her. I'm so sorry for this feeling of emptiness today. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you Gretchen for your very kind words and review. I appreciate it.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
What a poignant story to share on this mother's day - different from what you normally see, which is one reason why I enjoyed it.
It's interesting that you remember the what of your childhood, but you don't recall the who - in this case your mother. I wonder if her loss was so painful that your mind has erased her. I'm so sorry for your loss at such a young age, when you needed her most.
I have one suggestion to make the presentation better. You spaced the first few paragraphs, then you don't place a space between the next couple. I would add spaces to help the presentation as this is for a contest.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Pam
reply by the author on 15-May-2023
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What a poignant story to share on this mother's day - different from what you normally see, which is one reason why I enjoyed it.
It's interesting that you remember the what of your childhood, but you don't recall the who - in this case your mother. I wonder if her loss was so painful that your mind has erased her. I'm so sorry for your loss at such a young age, when you needed her most.
I have one suggestion to make the presentation better. You spaced the first few paragraphs, then you don't place a space between the next couple. I would add spaces to help the presentation as this is for a contest.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Pam
Comment Written 14-May-2023
reply by the author on 15-May-2023
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Thank you Pam I appreciate your review and helpful suggestion. I also appreciate your kindness.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so sad. My niece lost her mother when she was 6 and she is a mother herself now. She tells us the same things said. She doesn't remember her at all. My brother has photos of her everywhere. So sad. It is especially poignant on Mother's Day. I lost mine when I was 66, and miss her terribly. At least I have the lovely memories. I'm so very sorry for your early loss of your mother. ~Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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That is so sad. My niece lost her mother when she was 6 and she is a mother herself now. She tells us the same things said. She doesn't remember her at all. My brother has photos of her everywhere. So sad. It is especially poignant on Mother's Day. I lost mine when I was 66, and miss her terribly. At least I have the lovely memories. I'm so very sorry for your early loss of your mother. ~Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-May-2023
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Thank you Sandra for your very kind words and review. I truly appreciate it.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from Wendy G
It is sad that although you remember some significant events you cannot picture your mother with you. Maybe the shock of her death when you were very young was the cause. Nevertheless you poem us very meaningful. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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It is sad that although you remember some significant events you cannot picture your mother with you. Maybe the shock of her death when you were very young was the cause. Nevertheless you poem us very meaningful. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-May-2023
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Thank you Wendy for your review. It is appreciated.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from Jan Hope
A very touching story. You have described the feelings of a child who cannot quite remember their mother's presence in their life. It is kind of a sad tale, but true to life. The image remind me of my own childhood, and my mum would be dressed very similar to the lady in the picture (being a 1950's person).
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reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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A very touching story. You have described the feelings of a child who cannot quite remember their mother's presence in their life. It is kind of a sad tale, but true to life. The image remind me of my own childhood, and my mum would be dressed very similar to the lady in the picture (being a 1950's person).
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-May-2023
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Thank you Jan for your review. To help me out please advise what I need to fix as indicated by the four stars.
Mary
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your mom was so very young. I bet you felt hurt during this time; you needed comfort, was someone there for you? Evidently your mom was not feeling good for reasons unknown. God Bless You.
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Your mom was so very young. I bet you felt hurt during this time; you needed comfort, was someone there for you? Evidently your mom was not feeling good for reasons unknown. God Bless You.
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Thank you for your review. My dad just pretended to be alive. The four kids became nearly strangers to each other, all going our separate ways. In February, on the death of my sister-in-law, I gave my brother a hug and told him I loved him. It was the first time I hugged him or told him I loved him. He is 80 years old.
So her death had a huge impact on the family dynamics.
I appreciate your review and kindness.
Comment from Zoe Webb
Memory is a strange thing. I'm so sorry for your loss, and sorry that it's tainted Mother's day for you. Not everyone's experiences are the same, and this is a reminder of that.
This was well-written and I think you explained your grief and feelings towards the day perfectly. Wish I had six stars to give.
Best,
Zoe
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Memory is a strange thing. I'm so sorry for your loss, and sorry that it's tainted Mother's day for you. Not everyone's experiences are the same, and this is a reminder of that.
This was well-written and I think you explained your grief and feelings towards the day perfectly. Wish I had six stars to give.
Best,
Zoe
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Thank you Zoe. Your kind words and review are a six star for me.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Author,
whoa... the absence of visual memory of your mother!
That cuts an even deeper scar to the memories you try to retrieve in remembering the woman who gave life to you... and that's so sad, not only for you, but all your siblings as well. Remembering all the things surrounding and in concern to your mother and not being able to hold her image within you mind... that just keeps replaying in my thoughts after reading this now for the second time.
Growing up in poverty, she was determined to spoil her kids...(or children *at* Christmas, or on Christmas *day/eve*?
No matter, you got me, pulled me in with this sad-real story... and I love the photo... it added volumes to the authenticity of your story. Thank you so much for sharing this story. Bless you!
All the very best wishes in this Mother's day writing prompt contest.
You showed the other side of what Mother's day may conjure up for someone.
With our thoughts we create...
a faded image.
Kindest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Hi Author,
whoa... the absence of visual memory of your mother!
That cuts an even deeper scar to the memories you try to retrieve in remembering the woman who gave life to you... and that's so sad, not only for you, but all your siblings as well. Remembering all the things surrounding and in concern to your mother and not being able to hold her image within you mind... that just keeps replaying in my thoughts after reading this now for the second time.
Growing up in poverty, she was determined to spoil her kids...(or children *at* Christmas, or on Christmas *day/eve*?
No matter, you got me, pulled me in with this sad-real story... and I love the photo... it added volumes to the authenticity of your story. Thank you so much for sharing this story. Bless you!
All the very best wishes in this Mother's day writing prompt contest.
You showed the other side of what Mother's day may conjure up for someone.
With our thoughts we create...
a faded image.
Kindest regards,
James.
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Thank you, James, for your review and for your kindness and understanding. I am truly appreciative.
I am honored that you gave it six stars.
Best wishes and regards,