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a reverse haiku4 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Loved the picture and the picture painted by the words. I don't know about "reverse haiku" but I know regular haiku don't rhyme. Yours fit the contest requirements perfectly!
To make that purple shade pop our more, you might want to change from the Default "Grey" color to a contrasting one like a light yellow.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Loved the picture and the picture painted by the words. I don't know about "reverse haiku" but I know regular haiku don't rhyme. Yours fit the contest requirements perfectly!
To make that purple shade pop our more, you might want to change from the Default "Grey" color to a contrasting one like a light yellow.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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That was definitely an interesting set of requirements, and I don't think haiku was the appropriate term. That was a blind entry contest, and while I do like to play with background colors, I try to keep those submissions as simple as possible. Many times, I can correctly guess who submitted because of their preferred font or how they put it together. But I do like that idea. Thanks for taking the time to go into my portfolio.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
So many wonderful entries.
Your poem uses great imagery and has the natural flow of a haiku in reverse, including the 'aha' line coming first (which, I know is allowed in a normal haiku, but it seemed more fitting here in your reverse). You did not write choppy sentences.
A wonderful, creative reverse haiku in my humble opinion.
Gale
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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So many wonderful entries.
Your poem uses great imagery and has the natural flow of a haiku in reverse, including the 'aha' line coming first (which, I know is allowed in a normal haiku, but it seemed more fitting here in your reverse). You did not write choppy sentences.
A wonderful, creative reverse haiku in my humble opinion.
Gale
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words. So glad you liked it.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
The photo compliments your words quite well.
Smooth and beautiful.
"lavender blushed skies" Nice description.
A phrase I might need to borrow some day!
Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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The photo compliments your words quite well.
Smooth and beautiful.
"lavender blushed skies" Nice description.
A phrase I might need to borrow some day!
Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This sure reads well. I thought it had a great sense of sound to it. I would only say to spell 'lavender' with 'er' at the end instead of 'ar.' Excellent combination of photo and poem. I have never tried a reverse haiku, but this is intriguing.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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This sure reads well. I thought it had a great sense of sound to it. I would only say to spell 'lavender' with 'er' at the end instead of 'ar.' Excellent combination of photo and poem. I have never tried a reverse haiku, but this is intriguing.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I have made the spelling correction--thanks for pointing it out. I had never written a reverse haiku before either. The parameters of the contest were definitely interesting. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.