Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Wonderful entry for the japanese poetry club.
Good word count and connection between lines.

I love the imagery and presentation.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

I admire your use of words that fit this picture so perfectly. I like your last line, a true line. Despite dark waters, the sun still shines. You say much in few words and this is a poem that makes the reader feel good.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Thank you very much, I enjoyed this challenge, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell

Excellent

The truth of your ekphrastic poem is one we need to remind ourselves of when things tend to go sideways in our lives.This illustrates the picture well. Count your syllables again. I think you have one too many.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Thank you very much, I shall count again, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Hello again, for this form it is word based (15 or less) not syllables, much appreciated****kapot

reply by Verna Cole Mitchell on 02-Jan-2023

oops, Thanks for reminding me. I'm wrong too often!

Comment from Mario PIERRE

Excellent

The poem masterfully describes the picture. We can feel the raging waves on the water. It's hard to do an ekphrasis in 15 syllables, but you nailed it here!!
Well done

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

nicely done mediative poem inspired by the photo. I like how you tie it all to dark waters rising over the world covering everything with despair and darkness at time but you can still see the light to get through the dark moments

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you very much, yes we must continue to see the sun, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A beautiful and layered poem, an encouragement to all. There are certain stable things, despite the fragility of life and the tumultuous experiences we may go through. We can be assured by their consistency. Well said.
Wendy

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you so very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a super job with your club response, Kahpot.
Your syllable count was correct per line. Your words
were well-chosen and meaningful. This reminded me
of the saying life goes on. Great use of alliteration of
s & w.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you very much Jan, as always very much appreciated, have a wonderful New Year****kahpot

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This poem works well at describing the picture for the club. It gives hope that one can get through any trial.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy New Year.
Joan

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated, have a wonderful New Year****kahpot

reply by dragonpoet on 01-Jan-2023

Don't mention it, Kym.
Joan

Comment from JT traveller

Good

Nice work. Well constructed and your composition is well arranged. Some more emotive language may have earned you a higher ranking. Thankyou for sharing your thoughts.

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 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you****kahpot

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hi Kahpot,
Very literal, and I suppose it can be real for some, not so much for others. It reminds me of a Tsunami. The earth shakes, bringing the waters rising, it brings darkness, destruction.
Having nothing to do with the weather, the sun can be shining, it can be a beautiful day. On the other hand, the sun can shine it's light on a family who finds a loved one has been spared from the wreckage. The sun, still shining on a family that survived together, while others were not so lucky.
I liked this Ekphrastic Poem. It put me in a solid place.
Susan :)

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you very much, I am glad you enjoyed this short piece, as always very much appreciated****kahpot