Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 95 "If only ..."Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
What you've written here, some readers my agree with your expressed cautionary tale. I spent the afternoon & evening with a couple ypimg kids and many young adults. It was quite hopeful to see them visiting and visiting. The only phones I saw were for taking pictures. A great surprise to me.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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What you've written here, some readers my agree with your expressed cautionary tale. I spent the afternoon & evening with a couple ypimg kids and many young adults. It was quite hopeful to see them visiting and visiting. The only phones I saw were for taking pictures. A great surprise to me.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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What a treasure this memory will for years to come, so happy for you! Happy New Year, Liz
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***smile***
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from poetwatch
I know what you write is true, JLR. Everyone grows up and moves away. They have a life of their own as well as children. Yet, that's life. In a way, this Christmas Zoom is the way to go. You can't fly and not even drive with the weather as it is. Still, it would be wonderful to see our children. Merry Christmas, my friend, and a Happy New year.
Jose
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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I know what you write is true, JLR. Everyone grows up and moves away. They have a life of their own as well as children. Yet, that's life. In a way, this Christmas Zoom is the way to go. You can't fly and not even drive with the weather as it is. Still, it would be wonderful to see our children. Merry Christmas, my friend, and a Happy New year.
Jose
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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Jose! Merry Christmas?
Comment from Paul McFarland
That is a good one, Jim. A rare six stars - especially since it doesn't rhyme. I guess a lot of it has to do with the fact that you are hitting pretty close to home. Thankfully, our family has not moved very far away, but Christmas's are not what they use to be. Thank God, I still have my pickup truck.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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That is a good one, Jim. A rare six stars - especially since it doesn't rhyme. I guess a lot of it has to do with the fact that you are hitting pretty close to home. Thankfully, our family has not moved very far away, but Christmas's are not what they use to be. Thank God, I still have my pickup truck.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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Paul man what a great Christmas present! Very Merry Christmas, Sir!
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, If Only, leans nostalgic to when family was the center of the universe and Christmas provided an opportunity to return and recharge for another year of expanding.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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This free verse, If Only, leans nostalgic to when family was the center of the universe and Christmas provided an opportunity to return and recharge for another year of expanding.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
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You nailed it🎶🎶. Merry Christmas Bill!!
Comment from nomi338
Oh if only. Unlike you, I have family that never seems to go away. Oh they will leave for a time, but then hard luck seems to be the only kind they know, and before you know it, they are back again. It is no longer a surprise, that they show up just before we pull the trigger on selling our four bedroom home and moving to a one bedroom senior apartment. As I said earlier, "Oh if only."
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Oh if only. Unlike you, I have family that never seems to go away. Oh they will leave for a time, but then hard luck seems to be the only kind they know, and before you know it, they are back again. It is no longer a surprise, that they show up just before we pull the trigger on selling our four bedroom home and moving to a one bedroom senior apartment. As I said earlier, "Oh if only."
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Nomi, I feel your remorse, even if tongue in cheek. I wish you Sir, a vey very Christmas! It has been a pleasure to exchange words with you throughout this year! be very blest, friend!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
When a family spreads out it is difficult to travel long distances at Christmas and so we are connected to our loved ones through computers. It has become a common thing, but spending time with our loved owners in person is truly magical and cements memories. Phone calls and zoom calls are not as memorable. A poignant free-write, your words touch hearts here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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When a family spreads out it is difficult to travel long distances at Christmas and so we are connected to our loved ones through computers. It has become a common thing, but spending time with our loved owners in person is truly magical and cements memories. Phone calls and zoom calls are not as memorable. A poignant free-write, your words touch hearts here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Thank you dear, dear Dolly! You have made made my 2022 writings better In so many ways with your wisdom and persistent support that I will never be able to fully and properly reward you for! Be very blest this holiday!
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Hoe sweet you are and I loved your kind comments here, I wish you and your family lots of love at Christmas, love Dolly x
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem and presentation for the picture this club event. It made me think about some of my children and grand children.
I wont get to see them all. Im lucky to live with my youngest daughter, son in law, and granson. My granddaughter will come too. You grasped the form well. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery.
Gypsy Sensei
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Excellent poem and presentation for the picture this club event. It made me think about some of my children and grand children.
I wont get to see them all. Im lucky to live with my youngest daughter, son in law, and granson. My granddaughter will come too. You grasped the form well. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery.
Gypsy Sensei
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Goodadvicechan
We all miss " the laughter and hugs and great job in the house when the kids are young."
Those were the days of joy and no worries but hopes for better.
Now it is different. They are grown up and might live far away. Zooming is a way to show joy.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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We all miss " the laughter and hugs and great job in the house when the kids are young."
Those were the days of joy and no worries but hopes for better.
Now it is different. They are grown up and might live far away. Zooming is a way to show joy.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
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Thank Chan, Be very well this holiday season!
Comment from Thesis
You've portrayed the cycle of life and family evolution from when families were much closer and able to see each other for the holiday. Sadly, with better travel options and electronics, distance has replaced in person visits to impersonal zoom calls, no warm, tight, hugs and kisses. The ending was unexpected with family taking away the car.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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You've portrayed the cycle of life and family evolution from when families were much closer and able to see each other for the holiday. Sadly, with better travel options and electronics, distance has replaced in person visits to impersonal zoom calls, no warm, tight, hugs and kisses. The ending was unexpected with family taking away the car.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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Thesis, we wrap ourselves around fond memories as we ripen into old age.
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Very True.