Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 94 "Too many spirits"Musings of an old man - 2022
25 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your oddlines do tell their own story, ending with a cheeky question to the vicar. A good message in your notes JLR about drinking and not driving. Well done in this Raccontino challenge. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Your oddlines do tell their own story, ending with a cheeky question to the vicar. A good message in your notes JLR about drinking and not driving. Well done in this Raccontino challenge. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks Pearl, Happy New year!
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Extremely funny and enjoyable to read. The raccontino is perfectly executed with the rhymes right on. Lovely story and surprisingly funny ending
Mario
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Extremely funny and enjoyable to read. The raccontino is perfectly executed with the rhymes right on. Lovely story and surprisingly funny ending
Mario
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Mario, thank you! Merry Christmas
Comment from jake cosmos aller
masterfully done you really nailed the form my friend. Loved it. I like the wry snarky humor in the story narrative particuarly in the last few lines well done
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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masterfully done you really nailed the form my friend. Loved it. I like the wry snarky humor in the story narrative particuarly in the last few lines well done
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Jake, thank you my friend! Merry Ho ho!
Comment from Ulla
It's never a good idea to have too much to drink. I love a glass of wine or two with my meal, I live in Spain after all. But I know when to stop. Having said that, I think most of us have been in the situation you're so vividly describing here. Lol. Merry Christmas. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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It's never a good idea to have too much to drink. I love a glass of wine or two with my meal, I live in Spain after all. But I know when to stop. Having said that, I think most of us have been in the situation you're so vividly describing here. Lol. Merry Christmas. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Merry Christmas Ulla, May your 2023 be the brighest and most joy-filled year.
Comment from karenina
This poem is deceptively complicated! Once I breathed a sigh of relief knowing you didn't create the concrete "wine glass" post AND this Raccontino I...
Nope, I was still in awe!
It's two-two! Two poems in one!!!
Great job!!!
(Also appreciated your warning to not over indulge in the alcoholic form of Christmas Spirits!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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This poem is deceptively complicated! Once I breathed a sigh of relief knowing you didn't create the concrete "wine glass" post AND this Raccontino I...
Nope, I was still in awe!
It's two-two! Two poems in one!!!
Great job!!!
(Also appreciated your warning to not over indulge in the alcoholic form of Christmas Spirits!)
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Karenina, Thanks so much, I had a bit of fun with this one! I do hope and pray for you that your Christmas is one of merriment and joyful celebration and that 2023 brings with it a new Journal for planning your great writing contributions throughout the coming year.
Comment from Dr. Von
Congratulations! This poem is full of intelligent words that create a strong flow. I am not a poet, but I am a story writer, and the story is clear in this well-written poem. Well-done you.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Congratulations! This poem is full of intelligent words that create a strong flow. I am not a poet, but I am a story writer, and the story is clear in this well-written poem. Well-done you.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the validation! Merry Holidays!!!
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You are very welcome. Merry Christmas to you as well.
Comment from June Sargent
I agree that there is danger and a measure of irresponsibility in drinking too much. We all would like to enjoy the company of family and friends- but wisely and with self control. Thank you for the reminder.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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I agree that there is danger and a measure of irresponsibility in drinking too much. We all would like to enjoy the company of family and friends- but wisely and with self control. Thank you for the reminder.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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June, thanks so much for your validation, Very Merry Christmas and may your profilic writing carry you Joyfully throughout 2023!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your club poem and
its valuable message, JLR. I enjoyed reading it.
I liked the way you formatted the lines. I read the
lines in bold type-great and true story. The other
lines fit well with those, too. The image was perfect.
When read a complete poem, all the lines flowed
smoothly, told a great story, and offered the message
in the notes based on the words in your poem which
were well-chosen.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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You did a great job with your club poem and
its valuable message, JLR. I enjoyed reading it.
I liked the way you formatted the lines. I read the
lines in bold type-great and true story. The other
lines fit well with those, too. The image was perfect.
When read a complete poem, all the lines flowed
smoothly, told a great story, and offered the message
in the notes based on the words in your poem which
were well-chosen.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Hi Jan, thank you!
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is my first encounter with the Raccontino form. It looks to be quite a challenge, and you have done a really good job with it. Good luck in the contest and have a merry Christmas.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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This is my first encounter with the Raccontino form. It looks to be quite a challenge, and you have done a really good job with it. Good luck in the contest and have a merry Christmas.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thank you Paul and Merry Christmas as well!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
There are spirits that make you sick, and then there are those you find in church. Your poem of seasonal parties and over-indulgence is a good one - I enjoyed it. Asking the Vicar about his liquor supply was a great twist.
I love the image you used - the cocktail glass with the wording down the middle making up the stem.
Well done all the way around. Happy holidays!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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There are spirits that make you sick, and then there are those you find in church. Your poem of seasonal parties and over-indulgence is a good one - I enjoyed it. Asking the Vicar about his liquor supply was a great twist.
I love the image you used - the cocktail glass with the wording down the middle making up the stem.
Well done all the way around. Happy holidays!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much Pam! Merry, Ho, Ho, ho! 🎅🎅🎅