Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 92 "Snow Bound"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I think, though the days 'peel off way to fast' your brain, with pen in hand, still has much to share. I've been watching a lot of winter wonderland Christmas movies, the snow looks beautiful but I 'm glad I don't live with it. Nice one, JLR
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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I think, though the days 'peel off way to fast' your brain, with pen in hand, still has much to share. I've been watching a lot of winter wonderland Christmas movies, the snow looks beautiful but I 'm glad I don't live with it. Nice one, JLR
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Smiles and hugs, Valda, 😉😉🙏🙏🙏
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely done heroic rispetto for the potlatch, Jim. That surely is deep snow and just looking at it makes my back hurt. Speaking of that I don't think you need aches after you have used aching in that line.
We do remember the squeals of sledding but too bad we can no longer partake in the fun.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Nicely done heroic rispetto for the potlatch, Jim. That surely is deep snow and just looking at it makes my back hurt. Speaking of that I don't think you need aches after you have used aching in that line.
We do remember the squeals of sledding but too bad we can no longer partake in the fun.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Smiling!
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Me too.
You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from Bill Schott
This rispetto, Snowbound, has the proper formatting and sings of the pain of needing things which require snow removal, traveling, and getting cold and tired. Fun.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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This rispetto, Snowbound, has the proper formatting and sings of the pain of needing things which require snow removal, traveling, and getting cold and tired. Fun.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Thanks Bill, I hope you stay toasty warm throughout the Holidays, Merry Christmas! Jim
Comment from zanya
A Striking opening line here to start and the evocative line three- akin to a poetic and spontaneous stream of consciousness - and a lovely visual to complement
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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A Striking opening line here to start and the evocative line three- akin to a poetic and spontaneous stream of consciousness - and a lovely visual to complement
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your thoughtful comments.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Indeed, the need for a snowblower is real too, especially as we grow older. Your fun poem will undoubtedly resonate with many. I live in an apartment building, so snow removal is done for me, but I remember, and yes, the pep is lacking. (lol)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Indeed, the need for a snowblower is real too, especially as we grow older. Your fun poem will undoubtedly resonate with many. I live in an apartment building, so snow removal is done for me, but I remember, and yes, the pep is lacking. (lol)
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Dawn, bud smiles back, stay warm. 🙏
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It's funny you should mention that... (lol)... I have to go out today!!!!!! (Yikes.)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-That is quite a picture and makes me cold!!!
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like your first line about the days peeling off.
-You do a good job showing what has changed
as the days of youth are gone, now replaced
with an older age and frame of mind.
-The aches go along with it, too.
-I like the transition as you "look with hope."
-Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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-That is quite a picture and makes me cold!!!
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like your first line about the days peeling off.
-You do a good job showing what has changed
as the days of youth are gone, now replaced
with an older age and frame of mind.
-The aches go along with it, too.
-I like the transition as you "look with hope."
-Well done.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thany you Pam!
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You are welcome, Jim.
Comment from Sally Law
Oh my-! Winter hasn't officially begun and many are under the snow drifts. I do hope you're warm and have a hearty stew! You simply must has something good simmering on the stove! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge. Merry Christmas!
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Oh my-! Winter hasn't officially begun and many are under the snow drifts. I do hope you're warm and have a hearty stew! You simply must has something good simmering on the stove! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge. Merry Christmas!
Sal XOs
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Sal, dear soul, May you Joys overflow and Peace surround you at all times, Merry Chrsitmas to you!🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶🎶
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this verse with all of the whimsy peppered throughout.
I appreciate your creative use of the prompt, this is a terrific club entry.
The rhyming pattern flows easily and creates a sing sing quality.
I also appreciate the overall presentation, a perfect picture selection:)
Happy holidays!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I enjoyed this verse with all of the whimsy peppered throughout.
I appreciate your creative use of the prompt, this is a terrific club entry.
The rhyming pattern flows easily and creates a sing sing quality.
I also appreciate the overall presentation, a perfect picture selection:)
Happy holidays!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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K.L. thank you for this validation. May you Joys overflow and Peace surround you at all times, Happy Holidays to you!🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶🎶
Comment from Celyn
I like this poem and it reads well apart from the second line where you say ' my aching back aches is real'. This seems a mistake to me as surely it should be either 'my acing back is real' or 'my back aches, it's real'. Also in line 6 I think that it would read better if you said 'pray for the snow to melt' or 'pray the snow will melt'. Apart from that this is a good poem so well done.
Celyn
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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I like this poem and it reads well apart from the second line where you say ' my aching back aches is real'. This seems a mistake to me as surely it should be either 'my acing back is real' or 'my back aches, it's real'. Also in line 6 I think that it would read better if you said 'pray for the snow to melt' or 'pray the snow will melt'. Apart from that this is a good poem so well done.
Celyn
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Celyn thank you for your comments.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Snow is only pleasant when viewed through a window. It is less delightful, as this poem shows when you have to clear it up. This is a difficult form to
manage successfully!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Snow is only pleasant when viewed through a window. It is less delightful, as this poem shows when you have to clear it up. This is a difficult form to
manage successfully!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Sarah, thanks for your validation.