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Heart Crafted Poems - 2022

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Musings of an old man - 2022

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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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The line that really tugs at me is your last two lines
Woe to the looker with no heart
and your refrain line is a beauty.

Well done with your double refrain Kyrielle, JLR.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Valda, my sincere thank you! 🙏🙏🎶🎶
Comment from Wendy G
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A well written double-refrain Kyrielle - the emphasis is important and links well with your theme. Your author's notes are insightful and personally challenging to all of us. I am sure a smile, and a bit of help would make the world of difference.
Wendy

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Wendy, thank you
Comment from WalkerMan
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Yes, Jim, you are right that a smile can make a significant difference in the spirit of someone in distress, even if you cannot do more, as it at least shows that person is neither shunned nor invisible. Beyond that, "more" need not be much in these times when we all are at risk.

For instance, last December, when the Salvation Army bell-ringer was at the grocery store I can walk to, besides what I put in the kettle, with a smile I handed her a couple of dollars to offset her fuel to drive there. With tears in her eyes, she smiled back and thanked me, as her tank was low and she was worried about getting home safely. I would have given her more, but I was short of funds for my groceries. My Social Security was going up by a hundred dollars per month, but the big corporate landlord who bought the entire complex I am living in raised my rent by $125 per month, leaving me with less than nothing to cover the rising inflation in the cost of food and everything else. Only God knows what other stresses that bell-ringer woman was suffering.

Your well-written Double Refrain Kyrielle is a public service.

Superb, and aptly illustrated. -- Mike

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Mike, thank you for your comments and validation - we must carry hope and prayer in our hearts for all people seen and unseen who suffer worldwide - a always have a smile to give away it costs us nothing.
reply by WalkerMan on 01-Aug-2022
    You are most welcome, Jim. Yes, I agree. -- Mike
Comment from June Sargent
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I thank you for writing such an empathetic and insightful piece. The economy is getting worse and homelessness is a reality - wth many more at risk. It costs nothing to share the milk of human kindness. Just a smile can make the difference to someone on the edge of desperation and despair. We needed this reminder.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    June, thank you for your supportive comments.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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Very well done. I don't think I ever read a double Kyrielle, and you really did credit to the form.

I see these people often, some stand on the edge of the roads, some are in the midst of the busy highway. The signs some wear break one's heart. Especially after the Pandemic, many people ended up in that situation, many lost their jobs and their entire savings, and many are still unemployed. There is a lot of trouble in the world. Let's pray for all the homeless in the world that they find homes and source of support.

A great social commentary.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Eternal Muse - we must carry hope and prayer in our hearts for all people seen and unseen who suffer worldwide - a always have a smile to give away it costs us nothing. thank you!
Comment from Sally Law
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Woe to the looker indeed! A soul stirring poem of the homeless crisis we have worldwide. My father was homeless by choice long before this term exsisted. A travesty of our day.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :))

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
    Thank you so much for the supportive comments.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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I would have to say, yes, a smile could change a soul's heartache! This is a tender plea to humanity to take a second look at the homeless and give them a smile or a meal or sit down and listen, really listen to their story.
They all have one, the reason why they are so down and out. Remember that we could be one of them so easily with just one calamity or tragedy that might bestow upon us.
So, hurray for your poem and the reaching out to give a smile to a stranger.
It could open up the heart and make the world seem like a possible place to grow.
We all need continual growth in our lives.
Thanks for hearing me sing the praises to the homeless heart in all of us.
Jesse


 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
    Jesse ... Wow! My sincere thank you for your strong validation of this poem and more importantly the message.
reply by Jesse James Doty on 31-Jul-2022
    It was you who posted it. I am proud of your bravery!
    Jesse
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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It is getting worse. I've never seen so many homeless people before, it is a crime the governments must sort out. It's mainly there fault that it is happening. They don't go short of a good meal, a bed to lie on, and a roof over their heads. They need to experience it to know what they are doing to their people. Well done, this really hits home. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
    Sandra, thank you for hearing me out through my words ...My sincere thank for your strong validation of this poem and more importantly the message. You politicians are a huge contributor to this growing problem.
Comment from Ulla
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It's such a heartfelt poem. Yes it does break your heart seeing what sufferance is really liked. Your poem is so lovingly written. It's a wonderful entry for the Potlatch. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
    ULLA, thank you for your validation on this poem and its message.
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are clear, have a message, are descriptive and creative. After reading these words, I feel a smile can do wonders for anyone especially those who are hurting. Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect!

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
    y sincere thank you for your strong validation of this poem and more importantly the message.