An Acrostic Poem (sobriety)
It is a hard Task11 total reviews
Comment from Fleedleflump
That last line is both telling and devastating, especially straight after turning a corner. There is so much denial in the human mind, we can create whole realities to support our protective reality, even should that mean nobody else understands, and suddenly we are enabled. This was a great piece.
Mike
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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That last line is both telling and devastating, especially straight after turning a corner. There is so much denial in the human mind, we can create whole realities to support our protective reality, even should that mean nobody else understands, and suddenly we are enabled. This was a great piece.
Mike
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Wow, what a great description of what I can only imagine someone who is "hooked" must go through, every day of their lives. Needing all the help they can garner from around them as well. You did a great job on delivering a message that delves into the psyche of an addicted individual without shaming or belittling them. What's more, I could understand everything in your verse even though you were forced into the acrostic minimal limitations.
Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Wow, what a great description of what I can only imagine someone who is "hooked" must go through, every day of their lives. Needing all the help they can garner from around them as well. You did a great job on delivering a message that delves into the psyche of an addicted individual without shaming or belittling them. What's more, I could understand everything in your verse even though you were forced into the acrostic minimal limitations.
Good job.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much, yes sobriety is a lifelong task
Comment from lyenochka
An excellent rhyming acrostic poem and it makes me appreciate the "hard task of sobriety" for those who may have addiction issues. It certainly helps to realize that one is "out of lies" and to reach out for help from "traveled peers." Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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An excellent rhyming acrostic poem and it makes me appreciate the "hard task of sobriety" for those who may have addiction issues. It certainly helps to realize that one is "out of lies" and to reach out for help from "traveled peers." Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
You my friend are brave and so awesome! Everything you wrote in your poem is identical to what my life and many others once were and it isn't easy! But the through the Grace of God, one day at a time makes it possible! Unfortunately having that disease only takes you to a different one, as my substitute is here with all of these wonderful people. A healthy one yes, but an addiction for me none the less. Hurray for you and God bless you my friend!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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You my friend are brave and so awesome! Everything you wrote in your poem is identical to what my life and many others once were and it isn't easy! But the through the Grace of God, one day at a time makes it possible! Unfortunately having that disease only takes you to a different one, as my substitute is here with all of these wonderful people. A healthy one yes, but an addiction for me none the less. Hurray for you and God bless you my friend!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Wow! Thank you so very much, unfortunately addictions are with us for life
Comment from Rbrendaartwork18
I think you words here say it all. The fog before sobriety is not a fog then but afterwards the clarity highlights the fog. I know so many people on that journey and understanding. This is so well written, unusual words, meaningfullness in poetry.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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I think you words here say it all. The fog before sobriety is not a fog then but afterwards the clarity highlights the fog. I know so many people on that journey and understanding. This is so well written, unusual words, meaningfullness in poetry.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much
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You are welcome
Comment from Gloria ....
A fine acrostic on sobriety. Your rhymes work in seamlessly so as to be noticeable. I think you also well captured the traveled peers of addiction that are often excused with eyes.
Wishing you much good luck in the voting booth. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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A fine acrostic on sobriety. Your rhymes work in seamlessly so as to be noticeable. I think you also well captured the traveled peers of addiction that are often excused with eyes.
Wishing you much good luck in the voting booth. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from KatchooLedeux
Wow... this is an amazing, heartfelt, eloquent writing... very powerful!
I think you nailed this and have only one nit: suggest removing the comma after "years"... I think it reads smoother without.
I hope you have a good support network, as this is the type of work that is never done, even though it does get much easier with time. I'm here if you want to chat!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Wow... this is an amazing, heartfelt, eloquent writing... very powerful!
I think you nailed this and have only one nit: suggest removing the comma after "years"... I think it reads smoother without.
I hope you have a good support network, as this is the type of work that is never done, even though it does get much easier with time. I'm here if you want to chat!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much for your very encouraging comments
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good poem. The rhyme scheme is well done and doesn't appear forced. The poem's font is large enough to be read easily. I like that it is on a black background with white font. It's stark and sharp! The visual is unusual but fits the poem. Well-written, well-presented so Well-done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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This is a good poem. The rhyme scheme is well done and doesn't appear forced. The poem's font is large enough to be read easily. I like that it is on a black background with white font. It's stark and sharp! The visual is unusual but fits the poem. Well-written, well-presented so Well-done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you so very much
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You are welcome!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Yes, it does come to your last line. All attempts at sobriety fail because you continue to lie to yourself that you can handle it. But in the end, you run out of lies. Very good acrostic with a lot of truth.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Yes, it does come to your last line. All attempts at sobriety fail because you continue to lie to yourself that you can handle it. But in the end, you run out of lies. Very good acrostic with a lot of truth.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from royowen
I was a drunk, but stopped 38 years ago, and have never gone back to those days, the quality of life not only improves but one's family benefits from it, as do relationships, which change with environment, well done, beautifully written rhyming acrostic good luck, blessings Roy blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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I was a drunk, but stopped 38 years ago, and have never gone back to those days, the quality of life not only improves but one's family benefits from it, as do relationships, which change with environment, well done, beautifully written rhyming acrostic good luck, blessings Roy blessings Roy
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Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much
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welcome