Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "When I was young"Musings of an old man - 2022
13 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
So glad I have a 6 left for this lovely poem that made me smile and reminisce. Your well-chosen details resonate with me. I too remember
when life was less complicated and people felt safer.
Note: I MEANT to give a 6. When I realized I hadn't done so, I came back and tried to change the rating to a 6--wasn't allowed to!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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So glad I have a 6 left for this lovely poem that made me smile and reminisce. Your well-chosen details resonate with me. I too remember
when life was less complicated and people felt safer.
Note: I MEANT to give a 6. When I realized I hadn't done so, I came back and tried to change the rating to a 6--wasn't allowed to!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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Janice,thank you for this virtual six. I value your support always.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
It made me feel nostalgic for simpler times, when everybody knew what was what, and routine and respect were paramount.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
It made me feel nostalgic for simpler times, when everybody knew what was what, and routine and respect were paramount.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Hi Debra, thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from SimianSavant
Good use of rhymes (first time I had seen the word *noshed*). Your cadence works in its loose structure, almost reading as prose but with adhering to the structure you laid out, guiding the reader through your story. It is the story that drives this, and it works very well. The only recommendation I might make is ending on a period and not an exclamation mark. Better to understate things especially at the end, and let reverse psychology amplify it for you.
Really nice work,
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Good use of rhymes (first time I had seen the word *noshed*). Your cadence works in its loose structure, almost reading as prose but with adhering to the structure you laid out, guiding the reader through your story. It is the story that drives this, and it works very well. The only recommendation I might make is ending on a period and not an exclamation mark. Better to understate things especially at the end, and let reverse psychology amplify it for you.
Really nice work,
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your very thorough review. Your input is what I always look for to improive.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Yes, those days are gone forever. Things happened, however, not like today. Kids could play and come home safe. People grew their own food.
Canned it in fruit jars. Every one shared a dipper from a bucket of water.
No one spread the virus. Those were the good old days.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Yes, those days are gone forever. Things happened, however, not like today. Kids could play and come home safe. People grew their own food.
Canned it in fruit jars. Every one shared a dipper from a bucket of water.
No one spread the virus. Those were the good old days.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thanks Carolyn
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You are welcome.
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this lovely, nostalgic poem. Such great imagery. I thought I was there. I loved the last line.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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I really enjoyed reading this lovely, nostalgic poem. Such great imagery. I thought I was there. I loved the last line.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Jen, thank you!
Comment from jessizero
I liked your poem for the competition. You brought the prompt to life. Thank you for sharing this poem with the rest of the community. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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I liked your poem for the competition. You brought the prompt to life. Thank you for sharing this poem with the rest of the community. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Jessi, I appreciate your review.
Comment from Wendy G
This is a lovely nostalgic poem filled with good memories - and a nice ending with the suggestion that you may have found some-one very special. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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This is a lovely nostalgic poem filled with good memories - and a nice ending with the suggestion that you may have found some-one very special. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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Wendy, thanks,enjoy the weekend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
As you reminisce the past when you were young and enjoyed life and thought how much slower life was back then. I think when we get older we tend to favour our childhood to how children are being brought up in the present as we have such fond memories, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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As you reminisce the past when you were young and enjoyed life and thought how much slower life was back then. I think when we get older we tend to favour our childhood to how children are being brought up in the present as we have such fond memories, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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Yes, life now comes with far more unseen challenges and obstacles to navigate.
Comment from joann r romei
This was a very sweet poem, I enjoyed the quaintness and the way you described the simpler way life used to be, I feel it was much better, families are very busy and on different schedules now of days
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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This was a very sweet poem, I enjoyed the quaintness and the way you described the simpler way life used to be, I feel it was much better, families are very busy and on different schedules now of days
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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Joann, thank you for your comments.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Things sure are different nowadays. Life did seem simpler back when. It was safer too. There is so much evil in the world. This piece takes the reader back to childhood and the times they learned what was really important.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Things sure are different nowadays. Life did seem simpler back when. It was safer too. There is so much evil in the world. This piece takes the reader back to childhood and the times they learned what was really important.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Hi Mia, thank you.