Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from lindafisher
The people who most need to confess are those who see no wrong in what they do and therefor don't confess. This is a really complicated form of poetry which you have executed so well.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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The people who most need to confess are those who see no wrong in what they do and therefor don't confess. This is a really complicated form of poetry which you have executed so well.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this difficult formulaic poetry submission.
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
This is definitely on fire!!! In a good way, of course.
For, you display this powerful, and emotional piece,
that let's you wear your heart on your sleeve, while
simultaneously, and cleverly moving through this
Shakesperean Soliloquy, to atone one's sins. And
you can believe i was touched. Nice Job. Keep Writing.
And don't forget to stop by to talk to me. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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This is definitely on fire!!! In a good way, of course.
For, you display this powerful, and emotional piece,
that let's you wear your heart on your sleeve, while
simultaneously, and cleverly moving through this
Shakesperean Soliloquy, to atone one's sins. And
you can believe i was touched. Nice Job. Keep Writing.
And don't forget to stop by to talk to me. Stay Connected
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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I am extremely excitedabout yoursix-star valdidation on this poetic offering.
Comment from Wanderlust53
I enjoyed your poem, even more after I read about the poetry format you used which is very strict.
I challenge you to take the same poem and use free verse with a bit of editing and she if it fits that style as well. I always read poetry out loud to judge cadence and flow. For me that's much more important than formats and rhyme. Unless it's for a contest that requires the strictness of style. You are a good writer. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed your poem, even more after I read about the poetry format you used which is very strict.
I challenge you to take the same poem and use free verse with a bit of editing and she if it fits that style as well. I always read poetry out loud to judge cadence and flow. For me that's much more important than formats and rhyme. Unless it's for a contest that requires the strictness of style. You are a good writer. Keep it up.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you, I tend to agree Since Free Verseis far more within my wheel house ...stay tuned ... :)
Comment from harmony13
Wow this was beautiful! The author's words were engaging, heartfelt,
meaningful and creative. I pondered, as I read these words how much
we need to have God in our lives. I liked how the author led up to the last
line of this poem. The artwork is lovely and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Wow this was beautiful! The author's words were engaging, heartfelt,
meaningful and creative. I pondered, as I read these words how much
we need to have God in our lives. I liked how the author led up to the last
line of this poem. The artwork is lovely and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello JLR, a fantastic Friday to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed reading your faith Poetry Contest entry, you took a complex style and executed it well. Good job and good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Hello JLR, a fantastic Friday to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed reading your faith Poetry Contest entry, you took a complex style and executed it well. Good job and good luck!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks, have a spelndid weekend!
Comment from dragonpoet
This is an extremelywell done sestina about the sacrament of Reconciliation. It shows how it clears your heart and soul of grief and guilt.
This shows a religious experience that gave you light and understanding.
Keep writnig and stay healthy
Just a question. I am a sponsor to a woman whos is going through RCIA to get comfirmed and in a class of others receiving the sacrament for the first time next month, can I make a copy of this poem and give it to them? Of course noting it is your poem.
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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This is an extremelywell done sestina about the sacrament of Reconciliation. It shows how it clears your heart and soul of grief and guilt.
This shows a religious experience that gave you light and understanding.
Keep writnig and stay healthy
Just a question. I am a sponsor to a woman whos is going through RCIA to get comfirmed and in a class of others receiving the sacrament for the first time next month, can I make a copy of this poem and give it to them? Of course noting it is your poem.
Joan
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Joan yes, I would be honored if you shared this, and thank you for the six star validation
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You're welcome, JLR. And thanks for your permission to use the poem.
The rating is well deserved.
Joan
Comment from Hannah Baham
Beautifully written, I love the depiction of Our Lady as both Mother and Mediatrix of Grace. You captured so acutely how reconciliation feels, down to the transition from grief at the thought of the cross to the embrace of it.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Beautifully written, I love the depiction of Our Lady as both Mother and Mediatrix of Grace. You captured so acutely how reconciliation feels, down to the transition from grief at the thought of the cross to the embrace of it.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Hannah thank you for your supportive review and comments.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a very interesting, but complicated style of poetry, JLR. You've used it well to write this story of asking for redemption and how to achieve it, through confession. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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This is a very interesting, but complicated style of poetry, JLR. You've used it well to write this story of asking for redemption and how to achieve it, through confession. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Hi Judy, thank you!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
If you confess, God is merciful. The problem with humans is that we do not want to confess and bow down to God. But once we come to Him, we know that God is forgiveness. Thanks for sharing and wishing you the very best in the contest, Kit
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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If you confess, God is merciful. The problem with humans is that we do not want to confess and bow down to God. But once we come to Him, we know that God is forgiveness. Thanks for sharing and wishing you the very best in the contest, Kit
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Thanks much Kit for taking time out on this satrical short writing.
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You are welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An epic faithful write here about the power of forgiveness and letting go of anxiety that tends to weigh us down in life. There is much sadness in these words and we all at some time have to navigate grief in life, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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An epic faithful write here about the power of forgiveness and letting go of anxiety that tends to weigh us down in life. There is much sadness in these words and we all at some time have to navigate grief in life, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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thanks much, I found this old-world poetic format on Shadow Poetry, quite a unique format, perhaps it would not be found favored by today's writers.