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Wedlock Prisoner

a 100 word story

10 total reviews 
Comment from Begin Again
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One is never free until they reconcile their thoughts with their heart... only then can life and the truth set you free. Papers saying it's over but it's not over until your heart sets you free. Great job!

Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
    Thank you very much, Carol, for sharing and praising this shortie. Rod
Comment from Terry Broxson
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This is where the old prospector's claim that there was gold in that river first started. Okay, maybe not. But for only a hundred words this is a good story. Good luck in the contest. The ending is a nice twist and a bit ominous. Good job.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
    Thank you very much, Terry, for sharing and praising my story. Yes, sadly the ending is ominous as Milly, a working class girl, has little to look forward to. Rod
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Excellent entry for the The Prisoner writing prompt contest. You followed the rules well. The flash fiction has a clear plot that though short it conveyed effective ideas.

I did the same thing, I threw my ring in a lake.

Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
    I have heard Reno?s custom is not unique. Many thanks for sharing and praising my story, Gypsy.
Comment from victor 66
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I can't imagine having that kind of a feeling where you go through so much to separate yourself from another and still do not feel free. On a lighter side, I'd think about diving under that bridge and finding all those golden wedding rings. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
    Thank you very much, victor, for sharing my story. The Truckee during summer back then was barely a trickle. As a youth I went looking for rings and found two.
reply by victor 66 on 11-Feb-2022
    You are most welcome. Just out of curiosity, did you keep the rings or did you sell them?
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
    I took them to a local pawn shop and sold them.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This one-hundred-word short story, Wedlock Prisoner, has the required word limitations and leaves the readers hanging as the end of the story is not the end -- apparently.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
    Many thanks, Bill, for sharing my story.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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I am sure it was devastating to go and throw a ring off a bridge into troubled waters. But we never know what life will bring. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
    I grew up in Reno and witnessed some women throw their rings off the bridge. I remember one woman laughing afterwards. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Thatguypk
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Nice story, and a good interpretation of the 'prisoner' theme. I'm prepared to bet that the lawyer pays nightly visits to the Truckee in his wetsuit, and makes most of his living by retrieving discarded jewellery!!! :-)
PK

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
    I am very pleased you liked my interpretation of the "prisoner" theme. The lawyer may not have paid visits to the Truckee, but I did when I was a boy. I found two rings I took to local pawnbrokers.
reply by Thatguypk on 10-Feb-2022
    ;-) Clever you!
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi tghere,

My word but she got married young, didn't she?

Freedom, in this case, would be a state of mind. Until the mind moves on, the paper means nothing.

Well-written little piece and best of luck come the judging.
GMG

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
    I based this story on what I observed when I lived in Reno way back then. Many girls married very young in California (often arranged marriages because of their culture). They often came to Reno to get married and came back to get divorced. Many thanks for your praise of the story.
Comment from AdaJulie
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Greetings my friend, what a story of interest-based on freedom. I enjoyed your talent and style. Your 100 words are well done and spin a great story. Good luck!

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
    I am delighted you enjoyed my story and my style. Thank you for sharing and your praise.
Comment from Jay Squires
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Yes! I didn't bother to count the words but assuming they are a hundred, you pulled off a coup. You had a fluent, believable plot, a character (in Milly) whose satisfying, if not happy, life I invested co-misery with. When she threw her ring off the bridge and realized she was a prisoner still, you left the story deliciously open-ended. I won't be surprised to see you standing at the podium!
Jay

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
    Jay, I really appreciate your praise of my open ending. Thank you for your encouraging review.