A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "~Bones of Robert Payne~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
102 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
A horror story with a funny punch line. Gotta admit cliches come in handy. So Bobby's soul craves bones. I followed him into the cemetery and pointed out the graves he should dug up--all the fans who blocked me. LOL.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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A horror story with a funny punch line. Gotta admit cliches come in handy. So Bobby's soul craves bones. I followed him into the cemetery and pointed out the graves he should dug up--all the fans who blocked me. LOL.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Hah, thanks, Spit. I loved your hilarious, but kind, comments, heh-heh...
Comment from adewpearl
Halloween poetry and Dean - now there is the ideal marriage :-)
excellent use of internal rhyme and enjambment to create good flow from line to line
good touches of alliteration throughout
moon's light - add apostrophe for possessive
I am laughing at loud with the play on words with bone to pick that ends your wonderful Halloween tale - what great fun this is :-) and as I would expect, a terrific multi-media presentation. Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Halloween poetry and Dean - now there is the ideal marriage :-)
excellent use of internal rhyme and enjambment to create good flow from line to line
good touches of alliteration throughout
moon's light - add apostrophe for possessive
I am laughing at loud with the play on words with bone to pick that ends your wonderful Halloween tale - what great fun this is :-) and as I would expect, a terrific multi-media presentation. Brooke
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, Brooke. I am very pleased that you liked it!
Comment from gramalot8
Dean, this is fantastic. From the music, to the picture in the background, to your descriptive poem. Loved it all. And such an interesing story you tell. Great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Dean, this is fantastic. From the music, to the picture in the background, to your descriptive poem. Loved it all. And such an interesing story you tell. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks, gramalot8! Loved your comments...
Comment from GracieAnn
Dean , this write is so full of pure and near rhymes and the layers of intrigue are penned masterfully. The humorous note at the end ties the write together in a ironic way. Nice wording. Nice. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Dean , this write is so full of pure and near rhymes and the layers of intrigue are penned masterfully. The humorous note at the end ties the write together in a ironic way. Nice wording. Nice. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much, GracieAnn!
Comment from Cindy Warren
You've given me some stiff competition. This is a very spooky tale with wonderful rhyme and rythm. The picture and music are the perfect compliments for it.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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You've given me some stiff competition. This is a very spooky tale with wonderful rhyme and rythm. The picture and music are the perfect compliments for it.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Wendy, I really appreciate you having a look at it, as well as your awesome review. I traditionally don't do very well in contests voted on by the Fanstory Committee, having won only one out of countless entries. But, it is for Halloween, and I simply couldn't make myself pass it up. I do wish you the very best in the contest, sincerely!
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I need to figure out who this Wendy is. I get that a lot, and Christy, too. LOL I don't win contests, either. Maybe this time.
Cindy
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Heh, oops! My apologies, Cindy. I guess I need to always keep my reading glasses handy when I review and reply. How and the heck did I get "Wendy" from "Cindy?" Oh, have mercy!...
Comment from SteveY
Great, great, great! I don't have a six but it sure deserves one. Wonderful job in coming up with this perfect masterpiece of haunting story telling in poetic form.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Great, great, great! I don't have a six but it sure deserves one. Wonderful job in coming up with this perfect masterpiece of haunting story telling in poetic form.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much, Steve!
Comment from ravenblack
I give up. You win. Great story but really enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme of the piece. Some people really go to great lengths for the best costume. A bone to pick with this town- the humor in that line cements this as a legend or tale, drawing the reader back from the horror to see it as such. So many excellent word choices, my favorite- quiet, quilted valley. Out of sixes or you would have one.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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I give up. You win. Great story but really enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme of the piece. Some people really go to great lengths for the best costume. A bone to pick with this town- the humor in that line cements this as a legend or tale, drawing the reader back from the horror to see it as such. So many excellent word choices, my favorite- quiet, quilted valley. Out of sixes or you would have one.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks, RB. Six or no, I certainly appreciate your generous rating and fantastic review, my friend!
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
When in my twenties, I had to cut through a graveyard one late evening because I missed the bus - it wasn't that dark
and the stones looked more white than grey -- but I have to
admit I shot through pretty quick.
This is an amazing story in a poem, Dean - but you never disappoint - you should be making a fortune through your
writing --
I'd give you a six every time - here's my last one this week.
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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When in my twenties, I had to cut through a graveyard one late evening because I missed the bus - it wasn't that dark
and the stones looked more white than grey -- but I have to
admit I shot through pretty quick.
This is an amazing story in a poem, Dean - but you never disappoint - you should be making a fortune through your
writing --
I'd give you a six every time - here's my last one this week.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Whoa, hah, I'll bet you did, Margaret!
Thanks for the comments and the wonderful review...
Comment from patsypats
First of all, your selection of music really set the mood for such a creative write. Your unique style and descriptive word choices captures the readers attention and holds it through from beginning to end. I have no corrections or suggestions.Good work. Rhyming scheme is very well presented and adds even more personality to your work:)
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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First of all, your selection of music really set the mood for such a creative write. Your unique style and descriptive word choices captures the readers attention and holds it through from beginning to end. I have no corrections or suggestions.Good work. Rhyming scheme is very well presented and adds even more personality to your work:)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much, patsypats!
Comment from emjaihammond
Your work is just beyond compare! I always find such originality both in the poem, which was brilliant by the way, and in its presentation. This art work is a thing of beauty and the music is perfect too. Where did you come up with that gorgeous picture? It is just beautiful. Phenomenal entry. I loved the experience.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Your work is just beyond compare! I always find such originality both in the poem, which was brilliant by the way, and in its presentation. This art work is a thing of beauty and the music is perfect too. Where did you come up with that gorgeous picture? It is just beautiful. Phenomenal entry. I loved the experience.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks, emjaihammond, and an "experience" is precisely what I try so hard to create for my readers. Rather than just reading my poetry, I want them to be able to live it!
Thanks so much again...