Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

TERRIFIC! FUN! CHILLING! ENTERTAINING! And, by the way, I liked it too. Yes, I've been to a graveyard at night, on a ghost tour in Galveston, TX. The ghosts were a no show, but it was fun. With Halloween just around the corner, I'm wondering what you do to celebrate? Do you decorate your yard? Have you ever put together your own haunted house? A good one, Dean. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thanks very much, Louise. I've included a video of our yard haunt so you can see first hand what it is I do on Halloween. I am the evil clown carny in the haunt. It's all done for charity, with the proceeds and food donated going to the food banks and homeless shelters in our area.

Thanks so much again!

reply by Louise Michelle on 28-Sep-2013

Oh, what fun - wish I had been there. Once did haunted house at kids school. Decorations weren't all that scary, but I had written a little horror skit which I told as I brought the kids through. A couple girls ran out screaming, hee hee.

Comment from pipersfancy

Excellent

Oh gosh! Spine tingling tale with perfect accompaniment music (I fall in on the side of your fans who are ardent admirers of your combination of words/music). Good Lord - is there no end to the literary heights you aim for (and achieve!)? Halloween, Fall, Samhain, the time of year when the veil thins to allow us, mere mortals, a closer glimpse into the world of spirit and beyond... I think, my talented friend, you see through that veil clearly at all times...

PF

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks for that wonderful compliment and sterling review, pipe! I certainly appreciate it...

Comment from J. Dark

Exceptional

I love this, Dean. It reads like a poetic Stephen King. As usual your wonderful graphic and audio trickery truly complete the piece and adds to the atmosphere. This was particularly atmospheric for me as I spent 18 months living in Londonderry. I am delighted to give you my last six star rating for this one.

Kindest of regards,

Julie :0)

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Ah, then you've probably heard of poor Robert Payne. He nor his three companions were ever found. Scary! One can only speculate what evil befell hem all...

Thanks so much for this outstanding rating and review, Julie!

Comment from justmarly

Excellent

This is prefect. The music and all. Love it. You couldn't have done a better job. The guy sure scared them about going to that graveyard. I love it and thank you for sharing. JM

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks, justmarly. I'm very pleased that you liked this...

reply by justmarly on 30-Sep-2013

you are most welcome. JM

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Your work is always delightfully entertaining in content and it's composition. This story about Jack and his bones make a great Halloween tale combining legend and poetic imagery written in abab rhymed verse that deftly carrier to that cemetery in Ireland. Your extensive notes add further to the background of the piece. Well written and done.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks very much, Mr. 'T'. I sincerely appreciate it!

Comment from DR DIP

Exceptional

Another brilliant Kuch production..the master never lays idle! your choice of background music only enhances and compliments the perfect story. I love the moral ending, I love the flow, you set a benchmark for everyone else to lift their game. for a non poet you are the best..and i'm gradually getting into reading your stories now..you are converting me from the classic illiterate to someone who appreciates the written word more so.
thank you for the education. It was you that drew me back to Fanstory. it was you that divulged little imagery tricks and background music addition which I must confess I haven't use to my advantage as I don't want to be seen plagiarising your brilliance in any way

as always dip

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Hah, thanks, my friend, however, you are more than welcome to use to your heart's content! Perhaps we could start a musical poetic revolution here at FS, whaddaya think?

reply by DR DIP on 29-Sep-2013

for sure! i would be keen!

as always..and forever dip

Comment from cheyennewy

Exceptional

Hi Dean,

Your presentation is superb and serves to highlight the theme. I enjoyed your author's notes and the poem. You have penned an effective rhyme, good alliteration and enjambments. The music is chilling and I doubt I will visit any graveyards at night. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks very much, chey, for your gracious comments and well-wishes...

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

love the alliteration and imagery in 'quiet quilted valley'

Love the dark humour in the concluding line of the last stanza.


As always, you masterfully maneuver facts to create a magical, macabre tale, Dean.

The formatting is fabulous - you've mastered that too.

Pity the font can't be a bit larger ... I didn't realize my eyes were beginning to age...!

So very well done, sir ... again! :)

couldn't tally ... did you mean 'dally' .. or he couldn't count??

soceress' (not sorceresses)

in moon(')s (missed the apostrophe)

witches(') potion (missed the apostrophe)

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks so much, Reach, for your wonderful comments and for pointing out those errors. I will have to address those, ASAP!

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is an interesting piece, and an interesting story. I think you put them all together brilliantly. I only wish your picture was a little narrower so that it would fit on my screen without scrolling.
Barbara

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

OH, I hadn't figured that into the equation, allborn66. Oft times, I will use my zoom feature on Windows to decrease in size a photo, or PDF file, that is too large to view without scrolling. Perhaps that would help? Unfortunately, if you make the picture too small, the font becomes almost unreadable, so I'm kind of stuck with what I get sometimes. In this format, you must tailor the font around the photo...

Comment from S.Yocom

Excellent

I enjoyed your spooky poem very much, Dean. Thanks for alerting me to it. I especially like your inner rhymes, as well as the outer ones. Very nicely done. (I couldn't read the last part of verse 4, where it is over the waving grass of the illustration.) Best of luck in the contest.
Sally

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks for reading, Sally, as well as the kind comments. Very much appreciated!