Comment from Janice Canerdy

Exceptional

And the winner of the "Fractured Fairy Tale" contest is . . . .(drumroll) "Ashes to Ashes" by rosehill. I'd give a 7 if I could. This is so skillfully and imaginatively written! Looks like a challenging type of poem to me!

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

OH my, Janice. I haven't thought about them or the Way Back machine in years. Thanks for the read, the review, and the trip down memory lane.

Comment from mauial

Excellent

That was really well done considering how long it was to keep monorhymes in each stanza and the second and fourth line rhyme and tell a meaningful story. Love the new ending to this old tale :)

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thank you so much for taking the time to read the work and give a thoughtful review. I am glad you enjoyed Cinderella's trip to the dark side.--Wendy

Comment from Dodey

Excellent

Brilliant modern take on the Cinderella story..I never heard of this form before, but I love it.. I was hooked from start to finish..Wonderful choice words, great rhyme and flow and picture perfect imagery...The picture is perfect to content and the overall presentation is delightful...Bravo my friend..A pleasure to read such fine work..The very best in the contest to you..Kind Regards...Dee

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Dee for taking the time to read my words and write such a thoughtful review. I appreciate your good wishes and the stars too.

reply by Dodey on 07-Nov-2012

My pleasure my friend...Smiles Dee

Comment from Simple Reflection

Excellent

Interesting twist! The lento seems as though it would be a bit of a challenge so you have my highest regards for success with such along poem. It includes some nice alliteration, and the photograph is a wonderful compliment to your words. Good luck!

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thank you for taking the time to read my work and give a thoughtful review. The artwork sure jumped out at me from all the other Cinderella's I found in the image world. Thank you for the stars too.--Wendy

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

Delightful, how you take this tale
and build a legend better.
In the end, Dear Cindy's bend
makes evil sis' cheeks wetter

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thank you Norbanus for taking the time to read and review my words. I had a great deal of fun researching the different endings to this tale. I remembered the dance 'till they drop version, but was surprised to find the Crow ending and several similar tales in other cultures--all exacting revenge, not allowing forgiveness. Thank you for the stars too.

Comment from Silverlock

Excellent

Excellent Lento, rosehill!
Great choice of words for your monorhyme which is an added difficulty at the beginning of the line.
The poem told a great alternative story to the traditional Cinderella, and flowed very well.

Well done!
Regards, Barb

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Good Morning Barb, I had fun learning to work with and within the format. As to the story, it, as most fairytales, had several sources of origin and endings. Interesting that the Disney version is the only one that doesn't end in some terrible revenge exacted. I just took a visit to the Dark Side, I guess ;-)--Wendy

reply by Silverlock on 07-Nov-2012

LOL, well the visit paid off, Wendy!
I looked at that contest because it did look interesting, but it's a bit above my capabilities at the moment. Best of luck to you, though - :))

Barb

Comment from santapola

Excellent

hello there this not only kept me reading but gave me a giggle at the end of it. It is well write and and flows well and enjoyable . Well done.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thank you santapola for taking the time to read and review my words. Glad you got a giggle. --Wendy

Comment from phill doran

Exceptional

Hello there
What an excellent, excellent piece this is - and on many levels - tremendous pace and a lovely gathering of tongue-friendly words.
I have no nits to pick nor suggestions to make - regardless of how you do (or do not do) at the booth, it is a pleasure to read this work.
I wish you well

cheers

phill

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thank you Phil, I love this form and found it almost meditative as I searched for the front rhymes. I think this is going to be a very tough competition, so I thank you for the good wishes and the sixth star.

Comment from doris1022

Excellent

nice spin on the old one. well written and flow well. keep shaaring your witty writes with us. vengence is mine!!! bahahaaaa! lol glass slippers can become a good weapon. You have done a faabulosu job with the contest rhyme scheme.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. The different versions of this story have always fascinated me and I for one, want forgiveness, but enjoy revenge. Bwahahaaaaaaaaaa indeed.--Wendy

Comment from Liilia

Excellent

You certainly are a wizard at words. This poem flows so smoothly and is rich with images, ideas, and lots of action. It brings new depth to the Cinderella story and along with the haunting image, is quite a powerful presentation. Thanks for sharing it. Good luck with your ventures in Virginia.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012

Why thank you Liila, I love words and the thesaurus is one of my favorite reads. The English language is so full of incongruous words, so many multi-sounding and meaning mouthfuls it is hard to find uses for them all. But I'm trying. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.--Wendy

reply by Liilia on 07-Nov-2012

You are very, very welcome. Liilia