Wonder Lust
A poem in abab quatrains65 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, this is a beautiful rhyming poem with wonderful rhythm and imagery. Your words and imagination take flight giving you inspiration to write this thought-provoking poem. It's a joy to read. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Hi Tony, this is a beautiful rhyming poem with wonderful rhythm and imagery. Your words and imagination take flight giving you inspiration to write this thought-provoking poem. It's a joy to read. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Ulla, for your review and kind words. Much appreciated, as always. Tony
Comment from Tim Noble
Lovely idea of words taking wing, with excellent rhymes and meter. Very imaginative and thought-provoking. Should it not be "wander lust" in the second line ? Wanderlust is of course the German word for the urge to explore.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Lovely idea of words taking wing, with excellent rhymes and meter. Very imaginative and thought-provoking. Should it not be "wander lust" in the second line ? Wanderlust is of course the German word for the urge to explore.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review, Tim. 'Wonder lust' is an intentional pun. As explained in the following line, it is an invention meaning to suggest a poet's yearning - the lust to convert wonder to words.
Comment from Pantygynt
This should have been entered in the 'Rhyming Poem' contest. It seems a great improvement on the entries that I read. This is proper poetry not a collection of jingles for a TV ad. Six stars that were not thrown away lightly.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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This should have been entered in the 'Rhyming Poem' contest. It seems a great improvement on the entries that I read. This is proper poetry not a collection of jingles for a TV ad. Six stars that were not thrown away lightly.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Jim. I always seem to be out of synch with the contests. So many of them are banal that I sometimes miss the ones that are worthwhile. I'm glad you enjoyed this offering and thought it good enough for a sixth star. Most affirming.
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Out of touch with the contests! I am glad I hadn't started to drink my coffee or I would have done the nose trick!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Tfawcus,
It's a nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Hello Tfawcus,
It's a nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your generous comments, RP. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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Tony, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is such a poignant write as every creature on earth takes their chance at survival Tony and in the end we all die. Your well written words and rhymes made me think how lucky we are to be sharing this life and able to see such sights as you describe here, even though we feel sorry for the fish, the bird has to eat and so the cycle continues. Fine words and a well deserved six, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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This is such a poignant write as every creature on earth takes their chance at survival Tony and in the end we all die. Your well written words and rhymes made me think how lucky we are to be sharing this life and able to see such sights as you describe here, even though we feel sorry for the fish, the bird has to eat and so the cycle continues. Fine words and a well deserved six, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your lovely review, Dolly. I'm delighted you enjoyed this and thought it worth a sixth star. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Alchera
I have really enjoyed your "planting on the page a ream of random words" throughout its seed bed and bird theft of your two precious flown away and bird lost growing prisoner jewel. The metaphorical winding throughout the five perfectly written rhymed structural stanzas is amazing. Yes. Many times the chosen seed-words don't grow or bloom nor fit in the flower bed neither in a rhymed obliged verse if the soil of the flower bed hasn't been tilled as it should have been and the selected words haven't been chosen due to their colours and colours speak and sometime neither a painter can explain the reason of his, so they die just as words do. A great work indeed!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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I have really enjoyed your "planting on the page a ream of random words" throughout its seed bed and bird theft of your two precious flown away and bird lost growing prisoner jewel. The metaphorical winding throughout the five perfectly written rhymed structural stanzas is amazing. Yes. Many times the chosen seed-words don't grow or bloom nor fit in the flower bed neither in a rhymed obliged verse if the soil of the flower bed hasn't been tilled as it should have been and the selected words haven't been chosen due to their colours and colours speak and sometime neither a painter can explain the reason of his, so they die just as words do. A great work indeed!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for your detailed response to my poem and your very kind words. I'm delighted you thought it worth a sixth star. All good wishes, Tony
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You are Always welcomed , dear Tony above all in this particular part of our life time. Thank you for our friendship cultural being. Blessings from Italy and above all from Alchera
Comment from Ogden
Your random words arranged themselves, fortunately, in a most pleasing order, freeing you from expending your creative energy, to be used, perhaps, for something more challenging. I'd try it myself, if I had access to that caliber of random words.
Kudos!
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Your random words arranged themselves, fortunately, in a most pleasing order, freeing you from expending your creative energy, to be used, perhaps, for something more challenging. I'd try it myself, if I had access to that caliber of random words.
Kudos!
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Many thanks, Don. I appreciate your encouraging words. Thank you, too, for the sixth star. Most generous. All good wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony.
Changing the subject,
Keep safe!
Don
Comment from humpwhistle
Tony, this is stunning. My heart and imagination soared with the two escaping birds. Bright, flashing word-images.
Then you orchestrated my crash with equally vivid images of loss and anger, and even spite. You cannot recapture what you let escape.
A very powerful piece, Tony.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Tony, this is stunning. My heart and imagination soared with the two escaping birds. Bright, flashing word-images.
Then you orchestrated my crash with equally vivid images of loss and anger, and even spite. You cannot recapture what you let escape.
A very powerful piece, Tony.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for reading and reviewing this, Lee. I'm delighted that it struck a chord with you and that you thought it worth a sixth star. All good wishes, Tony
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My pleasure. Lee
Comment from smileycloud
I like very much
the form the rhyme the cadence the flow....all that stuff
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the imagination the frustration the regret the profound helplessness and the tolerance of the garden being eaten bare and still the hopeful faith in bringing them home
but dead is dead and still they died
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still the beautiful verse survived and flourished
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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I like very much
the form the rhyme the cadence the flow....all that stuff
but
the imagination the frustration the regret the profound helplessness and the tolerance of the garden being eaten bare and still the hopeful faith in bringing them home
but dead is dead and still they died
but
still the beautiful verse survived and flourished
have a smiley day
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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I love this poetic and smiley response to my poem. I'm delighted you enjoyed it and thought it worth a sixth star. Thank you very much. All good wishes, Tony
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U R very welcome and your work is deserving
Comment from Treischel
Your imagery is profound using the seeds and egret metaphors for your fleeting muse. The rhymes were creative as the abab quatrains flowed with. The action to capture them flowed with vibrant verve. Loved that very first line the captured me, enthralled:
"I planted on the page a ream of random words"
The two alliterations that rolled into the triple "r" consonance was delightful. As was you other alliterations and images. Bravo!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Your imagery is profound using the seeds and egret metaphors for your fleeting muse. The rhymes were creative as the abab quatrains flowed with. The action to capture them flowed with vibrant verve. Loved that very first line the captured me, enthralled:
"I planted on the page a ream of random words"
The two alliterations that rolled into the triple "r" consonance was delightful. As was you other alliterations and images. Bravo!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Tom. I value your critique and am honoured that you think this worth a sixth star. I hope you're keeping well. All good wishes, Tony