A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "~There is a Place~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
59 total reviews
Comment from JM daSilva
Great poem and saw it first on fb. It's a good idea to spread your great brainchildren around. Good job on this one as the other ones. You are a poet, my friend.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Great poem and saw it first on fb. It's a good idea to spread your great brainchildren around. Good job on this one as the other ones. You are a poet, my friend.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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I'm a story teller first, though. Right?
Thanks for that wonderful review, JM...
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No doubt, your poems are stories.
Comment from madhatter1977
Love it Dean, image, music and especially the rhymes go so well together! You're very talented and that imagination you go to is rather special! Kind regards, Hatter :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Love it Dean, image, music and especially the rhymes go so well together! You're very talented and that imagination you go to is rather special! Kind regards, Hatter :)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thanks, 'Hat. You're imagination takes us all on some pretty cool rides, too.
I appreciate the read & review...
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Cheers Dean, just written a satire called Losing my Head. Bit of a gory scene in it, might be up your street LOL! Don't think it's too good a write but it is surreal! See what you think when you get a chance. Be grateful for any thoughts on improving it. Pete
Comment from barkingdog
I enjoyed this with the picture behind it. I can see some of the characters in your poem.
It was interesting to have a peek at your imagination.
Your couplets rhyme nicely and I see several alliterations and use of consonance that add tonal quality.
-'l' consonance: through out the first stanza
- alliteration:
waters blue wash/rats that run/ banes bloom/ haunted house
-'s' consonance: first line of fifth stanza
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I enjoyed this with the picture behind it. I can see some of the characters in your poem.
It was interesting to have a peek at your imagination.
Your couplets rhyme nicely and I see several alliterations and use of consonance that add tonal quality.
-'l' consonance: through out the first stanza
- alliteration:
waters blue wash/rats that run/ banes bloom/ haunted house
-'s' consonance: first line of fifth stanza
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much for such a detailed analysis, Ellen. I sure do appreciate it!
Comment from Treischel
This is a fabulous poem in rhyming couplets that are placed over the picture image - the Pictapoem. I love the idea, but don't know how you got the FS editor to do it. Did you use the alternate editor or something? I'd certainly like to try, if I knew how.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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This is a fabulous poem in rhyming couplets that are placed over the picture image - the Pictapoem. I love the idea, but don't know how you got the FS editor to do it. Did you use the alternate editor or something? I'd certainly like to try, if I knew how.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much, Mr. 'T'. Your beautifully rendered poetry is in no need of such artistic accompaniment. It is an artform all it's own. Always exceptionally penned and wonderfully presented.
Thanks for that great review, my friend!
Comment from write hand blue
And what an imagination you have Dean.
I wonder what you use for inspiration? Cheese before bedtime? LOL.
I'm giving a six for this. Why, because I don't believe that this can be bettered in it's genre on this site. The visual presentation, sound and poem content are of commercial quality. Do you publish? I would.
:) mel.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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And what an imagination you have Dean.
I wonder what you use for inspiration? Cheese before bedtime? LOL.
I'm giving a six for this. Why, because I don't believe that this can be bettered in it's genre on this site. The visual presentation, sound and poem content are of commercial quality. Do you publish? I would.
:) mel.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thanks for that wonderful compliment, Mel. I sincerely appreciate that!
I just had a poem published in a magazine (they notified me last week), and I posted the link for that on my profile page. But, I don't have any books or anything out there...yet. I am working on it, though, very, very diligently! (LOL)
Thanks, again...
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I shall look it up...
Comment from watergirl
It works well with the picture right there. It adds dimension to it. Enriches the images the reader has.
I liked your poem about all these imaginings.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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It works well with the picture right there. It adds dimension to it. Enriches the images the reader has.
I liked your poem about all these imaginings.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much, watergirl. I appreciate it!
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Pictapoem ehh? Meester fancy pants and his big wurdds, check out my haiku...
Diarrhea now
Colonic blast of doom here
Excrement is nigh
Ohh..umm. Sorry Dean, Mitch took over for a minute there. Great poem. Why is my nose bleeding?
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Pictapoem ehh? Meester fancy pants and his big wurdds, check out my haiku...
Diarrhea now
Colonic blast of doom here
Excrement is nigh
Ohh..umm. Sorry Dean, Mitch took over for a minute there. Great poem. Why is my nose bleeding?
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Hah! You never fail to slay me down, 'Sak...or Christof...or Mitch---Oh, whoever the hell's reviewing this, you're funny, okay!??
Seriously, I called it a 'pictapoem' for that little added air of originality. You know, that 'thinking outside the box' type of thingy? I read a lot of poems here on FS, and I don't ever recall seeing one done like a graphic novel style. So, I said, WTF, why not! I appreciate you checking this one out for me, 'Sak...
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I did not mean to offend, I think your pictapoem is kick ass. It is nice to see something different.
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Me? Offended? I really thought it was funny! I was just yankin' yer' noodle, my friend...seriously.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Visually this is amazing and the poetry is quite clever as well.
I enjoyed both.
I'm sure all the horror /thriller poetry lovers out there will embrace this style. It's like an extra bang for your buck.
Check line 3- Perhaps it may flow better if you reverse "along come" and instead write 'come along"
That's just my opinion and probably a personal choice thing.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Visually this is amazing and the poetry is quite clever as well.
I enjoyed both.
I'm sure all the horror /thriller poetry lovers out there will embrace this style. It's like an extra bang for your buck.
Check line 3- Perhaps it may flow better if you reverse "along come" and instead write 'come along"
That's just my opinion and probably a personal choice thing.
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thanks very much, Seken58. You are right, I need to change those two words around, so I'll need to do a quick flip-flop. I appreciate you catching that! Hell, I read it and re-edited it probably 50 times before I posted it. I don't see how I missed it, but I did.
Thanks again!
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Hey! It happens to all of us.lol.
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Yeah, but it happens to me a lot! (LOL!)
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an excellent piece of writing from the author. If I didn't know you better, the way it started I would have been dreaming of sandy beaches and turquoise waters. But then, I have read your work before, so I had an idea what was in store. The frightful apparitions that you describe were excellent and then to cap it all, you describe that the place is your imagination. I will vouch that your imagination is second to none. This is fantastic writing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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This is an excellent piece of writing from the author. If I didn't know you better, the way it started I would have been dreaming of sandy beaches and turquoise waters. But then, I have read your work before, so I had an idea what was in store. The frightful apparitions that you describe were excellent and then to cap it all, you describe that the place is your imagination. I will vouch that your imagination is second to none. This is fantastic writing.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much, Tomes, that makes me breathe a little sigh of relief. I did a response to Gungalo about one of her poems, and used this same method for the reply. Then I began thinking (Uh oh!), why couldn't I do a poem in the exact same way? It was hard, very hard , much harder than I thought it was going to be. I am glad that you enjoyed it, my friend.
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Yes, I enjoyed this a lot. Keep up the good work.
Tom.