~His All-He Gave~.
He died and was resurrected, for you & me...101 total reviews
Comment from Jade Lawson
This is a very good spiritual poem, and the background song leads the erader to feel more your words. You describe the story of Jesus so well, guiding the reader into being introspective, to feel the sacrifice, His pain. You also lead the erader to think about his actions. Indeed, your friend is right, I think God every day for this gift, using it to speak about God and His son is a beautiful thing to do.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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This is a very good spiritual poem, and the background song leads the erader to feel more your words. You describe the story of Jesus so well, guiding the reader into being introspective, to feel the sacrifice, His pain. You also lead the erader to think about his actions. Indeed, your friend is right, I think God every day for this gift, using it to speak about God and His son is a beautiful thing to do.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much for those words of kindness, Angel. I really appreciate that my dear friend!
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welcome
Comment from GracieAnn
Dean, I thank you so for bearing your true heart and for being obedient to both your pastor and to God. Yes, the rhyme is convincing and powerful using a-a-a-a quatrains. Very effective. It would be rockin' even without one pic or symbol, because the words are self contained. Please do more of these. Horror writes are "fun", but this counts for eternity, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Dean, I thank you so for bearing your true heart and for being obedient to both your pastor and to God. Yes, the rhyme is convincing and powerful using a-a-a-a quatrains. Very effective. It would be rockin' even without one pic or symbol, because the words are self contained. Please do more of these. Horror writes are "fun", but this counts for eternity, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you, GracieAnn, for those wonderful, kind comments!
Comment from L316
Simply amazing!
I love the way all the words flowed together.
Just by reading this I can tell you have a great relationship with God.
The best line for me, " realizing his gift for what it's worth."
This passage really spoke to me, thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Simply amazing!
I love the way all the words flowed together.
Just by reading this I can tell you have a great relationship with God.
The best line for me, " realizing his gift for what it's worth."
This passage really spoke to me, thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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I am very glad that it spoke to you, L316. I appreciate your kind and thoughtful review...
Comment from DanielEkine
Great art work and definitely a unique image presentation.
Poem is beautifully designed and arrange. A well thought out poem. Definitely of great standard.
my best part.
"Ground split asunder, quaking the earth;
our eternal Salvation, given birth.
Centurians no longer danced with mirth,
realizing His gift for what it's worth."
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Great art work and definitely a unique image presentation.
Poem is beautifully designed and arrange. A well thought out poem. Definitely of great standard.
my best part.
"Ground split asunder, quaking the earth;
our eternal Salvation, given birth.
Centurians no longer danced with mirth,
realizing His gift for what it's worth."
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind and thoughtful comments, Daniel. That stanza is my favorite as well...
Comment from scarhands
Dean, I liked the author notes on this one, everyone loves to hear the inspiration behind the work. I think it is important to diversify one's portfolio in all walks of life, and as a writer, I commend you for treading some new ground. It is a great way to challenge yourself, and in doing so, learn about yourself and the world. The poem itself was fantastically written!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Dean, I liked the author notes on this one, everyone loves to hear the inspiration behind the work. I think it is important to diversify one's portfolio in all walks of life, and as a writer, I commend you for treading some new ground. It is a great way to challenge yourself, and in doing so, learn about yourself and the world. The poem itself was fantastically written!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much, scarhands, and I could not agree with you more. I don't feel that I am ever past learning something new, I do so each day!
Thanks for the great review, my friend!
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Just don't forget to follow this up with a story with ridiculous monsters eating people!
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:) Oh, you don't have to worry about that, my friend, heh-heh...
Comment from jmdg1954
This deserves a ten my friend. The entire package is something that I have not seen on this site. The poetry is something that can uplift a person on a daily basis.
Remarkable and so glad to have been a part of this...
John
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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This deserves a ten my friend. The entire package is something that I have not seen on this site. The poetry is something that can uplift a person on a daily basis.
Remarkable and so glad to have been a part of this...
John
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind words, John. It is a style that I created here, on FS. I call it '3-D Virtual'. I designed it to pull the reader into the poem or story, and for the most part, it seems to be doing what it was intended to do. I have several poems as well as short stories where I utilize this format.
As for this one, I appreciate your wonderful review, my friend. Thanks!
Comment from Cookie333
If only I had higher to give it would be yours my friend, my words cannot convey how badly your message was needed at this moment, right now
So very thankful to have found this and your words reminded me
He is the one who guides my hand
Thank you Dean
K
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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If only I had higher to give it would be yours my friend, my words cannot convey how badly your message was needed at this moment, right now
So very thankful to have found this and your words reminded me
He is the one who guides my hand
Thank you Dean
K
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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You are more than welcome, Cookie333. I thank you for taking the time to read and review it for me, my friend!
Comment from Taffspride
Dean, I really wish I had a six to award you for this incredible writing.
I had to read, then re-read it aloud several times, so moving is it.
Only a writer with talent could compose something of this worth
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Dean, I really wish I had a six to award you for this incredible writing.
I had to read, then re-read it aloud several times, so moving is it.
Only a writer with talent could compose something of this worth
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Thank you Taffspride, that's very kind of you. But, I am only a humble servant, as we all are. I appreciate the wonderful review...
Comment from headingley
Well.
Dean Kuch with the midas touch, as I now have dubbed you. Once again those words to describe such an occasion have dripped from your tongue like honey.
The images, once again, fantastic. The words sublime. Fr Kieran (our priest will definitely need to hear about this one!!
Well done mate. You are my Lionel Messi of poetry
Regards
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Well.
Dean Kuch with the midas touch, as I now have dubbed you. Once again those words to describe such an occasion have dripped from your tongue like honey.
The images, once again, fantastic. The words sublime. Fr Kieran (our priest will definitely need to hear about this one!!
Well done mate. You are my Lionel Messi of poetry
Regards
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Thanks for such a wonderful compliment, headingley! Lionel Messi is one heck of a footballer, I watch him all the time on the Soccer Channel here in the states. I do sincerely thank you for the kind words...
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning
I will not touch this entry
there is nothing to critique
as there is nothing I could add
the presentation is exquisite
the reader sees the attention to detail
your words are powerful and speak
excellent work in all areas
thank you for sharing your talent and artistry
ann marie
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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good morning
I will not touch this entry
there is nothing to critique
as there is nothing I could add
the presentation is exquisite
the reader sees the attention to detail
your words are powerful and speak
excellent work in all areas
thank you for sharing your talent and artistry
ann marie
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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I thank you for such a wonderful review, Ann Marie. I appreciate it...