Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Crazy Critters"A collection of my children's poems
69 total reviews
Comment from Terry wrote
This is delightful - filled with alliteration that will charm the children and an unexpected ending that will invite giggles and gasps. Good luck in the contest!
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This is delightful - filled with alliteration that will charm the children and an unexpected ending that will invite giggles and gasps. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Giggles and gasps would be nice. Thank you very much.
Comment from Amicus
What a clever and well constructed kiddie write this one is! So many amusing critters created to delight the reader and a fun twist at the end too. I like it for its originality as well as for the smooth flow and satisfying rhythm and rhymes.
Good luck in the competition.
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What a clever and well constructed kiddie write this one is! So many amusing critters created to delight the reader and a fun twist at the end too. I like it for its originality as well as for the smooth flow and satisfying rhythm and rhymes.
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thank you for the good, positive review - the ending was a slight risk, but I believe kids will like it.
Comment from MS Writer
The rhyme scheme is perfect for children. Interesting names for all your critter. Imaginative that's for sure. I enjoyed:
Slithers a silvery Slipperhead,
-super alliteration
Best of luck in the contest. This is a worthy entry.
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The rhyme scheme is perfect for children. Interesting names for all your critter. Imaginative that's for sure. I enjoyed:
Slithers a silvery Slipperhead,
-super alliteration
Best of luck in the contest. This is a worthy entry.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thank you - I had fun with the alliteration - always good in kids' stuff.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, i really enjoyed reading this little children's poem, about the hidden critters that can be found on cleanup day, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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this is very well written, mystery writer, i really enjoyed reading this little children's poem, about the hidden critters that can be found on cleanup day, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thank you - I'm sure there are lots of things hiding in the dust behind my doors!
Comment from heyjude
mystery author, I'm glad you said none of the critters
were harmed including the sweet kiddie-Boppers. What a fun
poem. I think you'd have kids looking under their beds and
everywhere to find the critters. Good luck in the contest.
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mystery author, I'm glad you said none of the critters
were harmed including the sweet kiddie-Boppers. What a fun
poem. I think you'd have kids looking under their beds and
everywhere to find the critters. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly responded to the prompt in a wonderfully imaginative way! I enjoyed your inventive "Critter Zoo" and all the fantastical names. I particularly liked your use of alliteration in these rhyming quatrains and your 'twisted,' final stanza. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
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You certainly responded to the prompt in a wonderfully imaginative way! I enjoyed your inventive "Critter Zoo" and all the fantastical names. I particularly liked your use of alliteration in these rhyming quatrains and your 'twisted,' final stanza. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you - the final mstanza t.was a bit of a risk perhaps - I hope kids will enjoy it
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Kids are very sophisticated these days--I'm sure they like the playfulness. -Joan
Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, that's so cute. It rhymes to perfection, with great rhythm and stays on subject all the way. Great flow. Can't find a thing wrong with this. Maybe Dr. Seuss has a successor. Good luck in the contest.
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Ah, that's so cute. It rhymes to perfection, with great rhythm and stays on subject all the way. Great flow. Can't find a thing wrong with this. Maybe Dr. Seuss has a successor. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Wow - the new Dr Seuss - what a compliment.
Thanks for the sixer, too.
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a really terrific poem. It has all the elements in place for a little older child to truly love and really great rhyming. What fun! This is a superb entry into the contest. Best wishes, Bev
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This is a really terrific poem. It has all the elements in place for a little older child to truly love and really great rhyming. What fun! This is a superb entry into the contest. Best wishes, Bev
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thanks, Bev. I am glad you enjoyed this bit of fun.
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I sure did!!
Comment from markk
What a great and sweet poem. I definitely enjoyed this - it clearly shows your great sense of humour. Thanks for sharing the fun! - Best, Mark
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What a great and sweet poem. I definitely enjoyed this - it clearly shows your great sense of humour. Thanks for sharing the fun! - Best, Mark
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you, Mark - indeed it was fun and locking up the KiddieBoppers was the most fun of all!
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi the author,
An amusing romp through the house, it put me in mind of the Pratchett story "Carpet People." I'll leave the captive Kiddie-Boppers to you.
Patrick
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Hi the author,
An amusing romp through the house, it put me in mind of the Pratchett story "Carpet People." I'll leave the captive Kiddie-Boppers to you.
Patrick
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thanks, Patrick. Maybe all KiddieBoppers should be rounded up and caged...