Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Chapter 7; part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Rama Rao
Barbara, It was nice to read your notes and note all is well. God is in heaven and all is well with your world hope, He keeps it that way. I was so glad to see your post.
The chapter under review is, of course, as good as any other chapter of yours and made engrossing reading. I see drug cartel and Task Force coming in full strength in this novel too.
Wishing you the best of luck with your health.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Barbara, It was nice to read your notes and note all is well. God is in heaven and all is well with your world hope, He keeps it that way. I was so glad to see your post.
The chapter under review is, of course, as good as any other chapter of yours and made engrossing reading. I see drug cartel and Task Force coming in full strength in this novel too.
Wishing you the best of luck with your health.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Great chapter Barbara, I don't see how I missed it. I'm still not getting notices when you post. Oh well, I'll just check more closely. I hope Cassie is all right and it's not an internet predator. Joe's digging in deep with this relationship.
Also, glad to read your notes. It's going to be all right, God is good!
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Great chapter Barbara, I don't see how I missed it. I'm still not getting notices when you post. Oh well, I'll just check more closely. I hope Cassie is all right and it's not an internet predator. Joe's digging in deep with this relationship.
Also, glad to read your notes. It's going to be all right, God is good!
Connie
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
Nice work on this chapter. Now you've got some good drama going.
Great scene with the teens on the patio.
I didn't spot any obvious SPAG, but I may have missed it.
Ted
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Hi Barbara :)
Nice work on this chapter. Now you've got some good drama going.
Great scene with the teens on the patio.
I didn't spot any obvious SPAG, but I may have missed it.
Ted
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I think the following chapters will offer some drama.
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Looking forward to them :)
Comment from LadyWave
Great job of keeping the action moving and keeping us in suspense again at the end! There's something about Joe that's kind of bugging me now, though... something in the way he speaks so forcefully all the time... maybe I just haven't been around military guys to know their personalities. You've got more experience than me!
Glad to hear your great health news from Tuesday - keeping you in my prayers!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Great job of keeping the action moving and keeping us in suspense again at the end! There's something about Joe that's kind of bugging me now, though... something in the way he speaks so forcefully all the time... maybe I just haven't been around military guys to know their personalities. You've got more experience than me!
Glad to hear your great health news from Tuesday - keeping you in my prayers!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Most military men with his rank are frank and too the point. It will get worse before it gets better. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
Great chapter and your story is heading off in a new direction. I think that you are thinking very clearly and It is a great thing with what you have going on. I saw no editing needed.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Great chapter and your story is heading off in a new direction. I think that you are thinking very clearly and It is a great thing with what you have going on. I saw no editing needed.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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thank you for your kind review. The story is complete. I just edit.
Comment from GoodieMama
Great chapter insert. It terrifies me to think about what might be happening to Cassie and hope that everything will be alright. I can only imagine the terror that Sara must be feeling right now.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Great chapter insert. It terrifies me to think about what might be happening to Cassie and hope that everything will be alright. I can only imagine the terror that Sara must be feeling right now.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Fireshadow
Barbara, this is an excellent narrative and engaging storyline. Very well penned with strong characterization and dialogue. Found no spag errors. I look forward to how the plot develops, hoping that Cassie is OK. Very well done, my friend.
Amarillys
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Barbara, this is an excellent narrative and engaging storyline. Very well penned with strong characterization and dialogue. Found no spag errors. I look forward to how the plot develops, hoping that Cassie is OK. Very well done, my friend.
Amarillys
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from jclark
Wow! Great cliffhanger here. Way to up end this nice, sweet romantic story. I especially like the way you keep the story moving. You provide enough information to hold the reader's interest and provide pertinent details but at the same time, you keep the storyline rolling along. Great chapter.
I am so happy that you got some good news and I have a feeling there will be more to come. Yay!!!
Take care. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Judy
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Wow! Great cliffhanger here. Way to up end this nice, sweet romantic story. I especially like the way you keep the story moving. You provide enough information to hold the reader's interest and provide pertinent details but at the same time, you keep the storyline rolling along. Great chapter.
I am so happy that you got some good news and I have a feeling there will be more to come. Yay!!!
Take care. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Judy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Chapter sixteen of your book 'Another Pretty Face' is extremely written and an enjoyable read. Your story paints a vivid picture in the readers head . Natural dialogue, outstanding narrative, excellent characterization and very descriptive writing. You managed to established a setting and conflict in this chapter. I think Joe is right about it being an internet predator because Cassie was on the internet before she told her mom she was going to meet her friend, Angela at The Burger Palace. Angela seemed nonchalant to me. I'm glad Joe called Matt and asked for him to bring Dani. Angel avoiding eye contact with Joe is suspicious, I know she knows who Cassie met with. Joe realized Marcus was a creep but sensed the jerk had nothing to do with Cassie's disappearance. I'm glad Joe called the police. I'm like him I feel it's the guy the waitress at the hamburger joint noticed with a computer. I definitely look forward to reading the next chapter. I loved this turn your book has taken. I'm awarding you my last six stars. Both you and Lady-Wave are my favorite writers who do books. I'm glad the biopsy of your uterus showed not cancer. My sister-in-law's friend I wrote an eulogy for dies of uterus cancer and she was just 32 years old. I pray for you on the breast cancer front. Keep up the fight and I'll keep up mine. I was having issues with breathing yesterday evening after my mother put me up. My allergies and sinus are messing with my Primary Pulmonary Hypertension (PPH) and after I puked up yellow-green crap I began breathing at 98%, but I went down to 88% before that happened. . .Melissa!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Barbara,
Chapter sixteen of your book 'Another Pretty Face' is extremely written and an enjoyable read. Your story paints a vivid picture in the readers head . Natural dialogue, outstanding narrative, excellent characterization and very descriptive writing. You managed to established a setting and conflict in this chapter. I think Joe is right about it being an internet predator because Cassie was on the internet before she told her mom she was going to meet her friend, Angela at The Burger Palace. Angela seemed nonchalant to me. I'm glad Joe called Matt and asked for him to bring Dani. Angel avoiding eye contact with Joe is suspicious, I know she knows who Cassie met with. Joe realized Marcus was a creep but sensed the jerk had nothing to do with Cassie's disappearance. I'm glad Joe called the police. I'm like him I feel it's the guy the waitress at the hamburger joint noticed with a computer. I definitely look forward to reading the next chapter. I loved this turn your book has taken. I'm awarding you my last six stars. Both you and Lady-Wave are my favorite writers who do books. I'm glad the biopsy of your uterus showed not cancer. My sister-in-law's friend I wrote an eulogy for dies of uterus cancer and she was just 32 years old. I pray for you on the breast cancer front. Keep up the fight and I'll keep up mine. I was having issues with breathing yesterday evening after my mother put me up. My allergies and sinus are messing with my Primary Pulmonary Hypertension (PPH) and after I puked up yellow-green crap I began breathing at 98%, but I went down to 88% before that happened. . .Melissa!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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My prayers are with you. You are a constant on my prayer list. Thank you for the kind review.
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Back at you, dear Barbara. Check out the story tited 'One Fine Summer Evening' I recomment this story. It's a great mystery story someone wrote for a contest. Love & kisses. . .Melissa!
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, well this has certainly taken on a new apect. What's with the cartel and why would Joe wonder about them. And, of course, is Cassie now with them or the pervert from the internet. Intriguing and definitely leaving us wanting to know more.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Barbara, well this has certainly taken on a new apect. What's with the cartel and why would Joe wonder about them. And, of course, is Cassie now with them or the pervert from the internet. Intriguing and definitely leaving us wanting to know more.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Joe works for Task Force 385. There job is to stop the drug cartels. That was mentioned at the beginning. Thank you for the kind review.
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I guess I forgot about what he did and who was involved. Thanks for the reminder.