Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a romantic sould he
is - she needs to hang onto
him.
"Come in." Sara smiled, opened the door (wider), and stepped aside.
Probably from the lifting[,] she does - comma not needed
Most enjoyable, Barbara
Margaret.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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What a romantic sould he
is - she needs to hang onto
him.
"Come in." Sara smiled, opened the door (wider), and stepped aside.
Probably from the lifting[,] she does - comma not needed
Most enjoyable, Barbara
Margaret.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I have tried to take that comma out, but for some reason my computer keeps adding it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from CKLA
Barbara,
This is another great chapter. You use dialogue well to build your characters and move the story along.
Collette
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Barbara,
This is another great chapter. You use dialogue well to build your characters and move the story along.
Collette
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Another good chapter moving the story on. Wonderful descriptions as always and realistic conversation. I have a couple of wee suggestions this time :-)
["I should've brought them myself.] = this line threw me at first, i thought but, he did buy them. then i realised he meant delivered.
[He reached his hand out. "Hand me that remover] - hand is a bit repetitive here.
I'm all caught up now and waiting for the next instalment x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Another good chapter moving the story on. Wonderful descriptions as always and realistic conversation. I have a couple of wee suggestions this time :-)
["I should've brought them myself.] = this line threw me at first, i thought but, he did buy them. then i realised he meant delivered.
[He reached his hand out. "Hand me that remover] - hand is a bit repetitive here.
I'm all caught up now and waiting for the next instalment x
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I took care of the extra 'hand" Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
One thing that has always amazed me about your writing is its simplicity and maneuverability of speech tag free dialogue to move the story alone. You have definitely earned the sixer. Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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One thing that has always amazed me about your writing is its simplicity and maneuverability of speech tag free dialogue to move the story alone. You have definitely earned the sixer. Good job.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for the kind words and the stars. I appreciate both and your continued support.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Girlfriend, another superb and romantic chapter in this romance. I liked the interaction between these two. Their actions are so natural but controlled. Joe is the perfect gentleman. When is he coming my way so I can corrupt him. LOL. Thanks for a great read. luv jada
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Hi Girlfriend, another superb and romantic chapter in this romance. I liked the interaction between these two. Their actions are so natural but controlled. Joe is the perfect gentleman. When is he coming my way so I can corrupt him. LOL. Thanks for a great read. luv jada
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from patmedium
Excellent. You have hinted at this wonderful man having a problem or two ... I still wait, imagining all sorts ... when are you going to 'come clean' Barbara? At the moment, he's so perfect it's unbelievable! LOL.
Beautifully written, well paced. Pat. xx
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Excellent. You have hinted at this wonderful man having a problem or two ... I still wait, imagining all sorts ... when are you going to 'come clean' Barbara? At the moment, he's so perfect it's unbelievable! LOL.
Beautifully written, well paced. Pat. xx
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Very soon we will discover Joe is not perfect, but human. Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Kaladore
Another good chapter. The story progresses well and the dialogue seems natural enough. The character development is moving along smoothly. Can't wait for the action to begin.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Another good chapter. The story progresses well and the dialogue seems natural enough. The character development is moving along smoothly. Can't wait for the action to begin.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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There is plenty of action ahead, maybe in about 4 posts, but still building up. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Your characters seem so natural.
"Come in." Sara smiled, opened the door, and stepped aside. --
Do you mean for her to smile before she opens the door when he can't see it, or after she opens rhe door.
fourteen[-]year[-]old daughter.
Roberta
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Your characters seem so natural.
"Come in." Sara smiled, opened the door, and stepped aside. --
Do you mean for her to smile before she opens the door when he can't see it, or after she opens rhe door.
fourteen[-]year[-]old daughter.
Roberta
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I have made those corrections. I hope you are having a good day.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Great chapter, Barbara. I've never done the finger nail polish thing for a woman either. And I don't I'd enjoy it. Lol! Joe's a good character you've created. I found no errors. Well done.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Great chapter, Barbara. I've never done the finger nail polish thing for a woman either. And I don't I'd enjoy it. Lol! Joe's a good character you've created. I found no errors. Well done.
Isaiah
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I am not sure Joe enjoyed it either, but he tolerated it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from menachem
Well, I really appreciate how you divided the story, without giving it all at once, but sometimes that makes it just as hard. BTW, I forget, who's Ginger?
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Well, I really appreciate how you divided the story, without giving it all at once, but sometimes that makes it just as hard. BTW, I forget, who's Ginger?
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Ginger is the woman who insulted Sara in the first post about not going to the reunion that caused Joe to invite Sara. Thank you for your kind review.
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Thanks for the reminder.
You're welcome!