Comment from tbacha58

Excellent

HI, If I had 10 stars i would have given them to you. I usually am scared of horror pictures and stories, (although old I am)but this formation, made it to the top, loved it enjoyed reading it, and I give the ok to write more.The poem sounded great to me. Good luck, I will listen to the music. Hugs Terry

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013

Thanks for the very positive feedback on this 'pictapoem', Terry. I appreciate it!

Comment from Cookie333

Excellent

I enjoyed the piece Dean but my eyes had a very hard time finding the words over the picture (sorry since I know you worked hard) perhaps younger eyes might work better...
Thanks for takin us on a trip in your imagination
K

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013

Thanks for the feedback, Cookie333. That was the most difficult part of constructing the whole thing, making it "readable" I am sorry you had trouble with it. My eyes are horrible, & I can read it. I assumed since that were so, no one would have problems with it. I apologize...

Comment from david bell

Excellent

Isn't having a great imagination something? I love the places where my imagination takes me. I don't travel to spooky places like you do.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013

Ah-h-h, but you should go there, at least once in a while, David. You have to have darkness before you can ever begin to see the stars...

Thanks for the positive feedback-

reply by david bell on 20-Aug-2013

If I go there, I may become lost in my minds

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Loved the last part which is the essence of all poets...their imagination.
Your rhyme scheme was magnificient and it flowed so nicely.
I would expect nothing less

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013

Thanks so very much for the positive feedback, Barb. As always, your reviews are an inspiration to me...

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

Sounds to me like there is evil technology involved in this poem. LOL. I can hardly use the advanced editor on this site. I will read and enjoy your work, but it's a safe bet I won't be doing it. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

Hah, well, you could give it a go, Gretchen, it is quite a challenge.
I do appreciate the fact that you enjoyed it!

Thank you very much.

Comment from Lulube

Excellent

I got a sudden chill even at the description - I'll take you there. brother where's he going with this? Nice music background. Eery mysterious sounds.; I would say this is a rhyming couplet. You might check it out on clicking on info, then click on types of poetry


lulube

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

Thanks, Lulube, and you're absolutely right, it is a rhyming couplet. I appreciate you checking it out for me and giving me your view point. I needed feedback on this one!

reply by Lulube on 23-Aug-2013

welcome

lulube

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Dean,

I love the layout. Quite frankly, I don't think I'd enjoy taking a ride in your imagination - it would scare the bejeepers out of me, lol. Your idea of mystic wonderment cracks me up. I think I'd prefer angels with blue crystal wings to flying dragons.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

Ah, you'd be all right there, Lou. You just have to be able to run, really, REALLY fast, LOL!

Thanks for that great review, my friend!

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

The effort you took to create the overall aesthetic of this piece is quite apparent, even without the authors notes. In terms of just the work itself, I enjoyed the rhyming couplets that made great use of assonance like with blue you and hiss kiss. Everything is working copastetically; the music, illustration and poem all play well off eachother. Great work overall, thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing it for me, elchupakabra. I sincerely appreciate it!

Comment from gaangel62

Excellent

Excellent poem....you are a true "teller of stories" as my grandmother used to say....you remind me of my uncle who always had a story to scare all the kids....Hugs....Angie

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

Hah, you have me pegged, Angie. I scare the crap out of all of my nieces and nephews, and anyone else who I can get close enough to, LOL...

Thanks for the wonderful review!

Comment from headingley

Excellent

Dean

As ever, I love all your work (and have missed reading it whilst on holiday) Kudos for your efforts to try to come out of your comfort zone for this one. Did I like it? Yes. Do I like your previous style more?. Honestly, Yes. However one again you completely mastered the creepy feel to it with the images and audio choices. Top notch as usual. I think it's just because i am not used to reading this style as much as you are writing in it. What did you think of it after you had written it?

All the best

Lyndon

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

I was very happy with it when I finally had it tweaked right where I wanted it. Think of it as a series of graphic novels, only in poetic formula. That's the basic idea of a 'pictapoem'. To tell a story, or poem, in pictures and prose...

I appreciate the feedback on this "style", headingly. If it's not well accepted, I'll stop doing it all together.