Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

As always another great chapter. They are always extremely well written, professional and interesting, leaving you wanting to know more. Great job friend. =} Rox

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013

Thank you so much, Rox. Your encouragement and generosity are very much appreciate, my friend. Hugs, Bev

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Another really fabulous write, dear Bev. The tension builds as one wonders "whodunit"?

Can't wait to find out!!


cancer cells bullying their way through a healthy organism... another one of your brilliant one liners!


wrapping up - no hyphen

a compassionate shepherd to other (not for)

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013

Thank you so much, Sonali. I appreciate the stars and the wonderful encouragement. Thanks also for the suggestions. Hugs, Bev

Comment from God's Writer

Excellent

This is a beautiful story my friend. I wrote 2 religious poems. I really would appreciate you thoughts and review. I am going to have neck surgery tomorrow. I need prayers. I am very scared. Thank you for your story.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013

Thanks so much, Erick. I will keep you in my thoughts and can understand your concern, especially involving the neck. I'll be glad to take a look at your poems. God speed, Bev

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

Are they narrowing down who the murderer is or not? For a moment there, they were wondering if Father Brian DeShano might have been the murderer, Bev. This is a difficult mystery. Well done. I'm anxious to find out who the murderer is.

April

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013

Thank you for your generous review, April. I appreciate you hanging in there with me. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Well they've found the body and now what? Seems as if there are too many possibilities here for something not to go wrong.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013

Yes, too much can go wrong for sure! Thanks for the fine review, G. I appreciate it. Bev

reply by Gungalo on 25-Mar-2013

Smile Bev.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Interesting insights into Sheriff Oleson's thinking about law enforcement, the park, and the police role in keeping the public safe. Jana plays a big part of this portion, explaining her theories about Father Brian. I like the notion of some supernatural force influencing a human to do these terrible deeds. Things couldn't be worse when Jana and Oleson learn that Fritz Buell's body has been found by her Uncle Tony. Oleson worries about the impact of that because Fritz'a son and his PI as well as FBI and Reservation Law Enforcement will get involved. Great work in making the law enforcement details seem authentic. judi

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 Comment Written 25-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013

Thanks so much, Judi. I feel so bad because you got hardly anything for this review. I pushed post when I meant to push save LOL. I'll have to make it up to you another way.

Thanks for the great review. I really appreciate the support.

Warmest regards, Bev

reply by judiverse on 25-Mar-2013

You're so welcome. For a while I was awash in contest member dollar winnings. but I quickly squandered them. No problem on the review. judi

reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013

Well, I'm embarrassed, so thanks for understanding. XoX Bev

reply by judiverse on 26-Mar-2013

Hi, Bev. I'd read your chapters regardless of points. judi

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013

That's so sweet, judi. Thank you, friend!

:0)

reply by judiverse on 26-Mar-2013

You're so welcome. judi