Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Crazy Critters"A collection of my children's poems
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Comment from animatqua
This is a darling poem--up to the last quatrain. This last section is an adult twist and would scare kids.
The target age range for this kind of poem is still young enough to be frightened about going down the bathtub drain. The poem actually doesn't need that last section for completion. In my opinion, you do more harm than good with it.
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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This is a darling poem--up to the last quatrain. This last section is an adult twist and would scare kids.
The target age range for this kind of poem is still young enough to be frightened about going down the bathtub drain. The poem actually doesn't need that last section for completion. In my opinion, you do more harm than good with it.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thanks for the kind review - I believe kids love a bit of scary stuff in the right context.
Comment from adewpearl
I love the opening - kids will right away be attracted to something they have to keep secret from their parents. LOL
I love the fun names of your imaginary characters and the great use of alliteration in describing them.
Your lines bounce along and the rhyming couplets enhance the humor - what a fun children's poem this is! Brooke :-)
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I love the opening - kids will right away be attracted to something they have to keep secret from their parents. LOL
I love the fun names of your imaginary characters and the great use of alliteration in describing them.
Your lines bounce along and the rhyming couplets enhance the humor - what a fun children's poem this is! Brooke :-)
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
Are you catching these little children in the cage at the end, Author? lol. Such a wonderful and well thought out poem.:) I had great visuals of all these little critters all over the place. Just think what an adventure this would be for a kiddie.
Well done. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
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Are you catching these little children in the cage at the end, Author? lol. Such a wonderful and well thought out poem.:) I had great visuals of all these little critters all over the place. Just think what an adventure this would be for a kiddie.
Well done. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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A KiddirBoppa in a cage
Puts all of Heaven in a rage
But adults, parents, teachers too
Will breathe a sigh and shout 'Yahoo!'
Comment from Alan K Pease
You has given me a parcel of laughs which I probably have had in my household at times. Good poetics - rhythm, rhyme, imagery and a wonderful and easy read. Good for you.
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You has given me a parcel of laughs which I probably have had in my household at times. Good poetics - rhythm, rhyme, imagery and a wonderful and easy read. Good for you.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thanks, Alan - Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Patti R.
This is so fun! Children would love this! Imagine it with just the right illustrations...Wow. I would change only one word, and that's Jitterbugs. Simply because all the other critters' names in your poem are original, or at least it's the first time i've heard these delightful names. But Jitterbugs is not new, it didn't fit. Can your colorful imagination come up with something similar but new?
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This is so fun! Children would love this! Imagine it with just the right illustrations...Wow. I would change only one word, and that's Jitterbugs. Simply because all the other critters' names in your poem are original, or at least it's the first time i've heard these delightful names. But Jitterbugs is not new, it didn't fit. Can your colorful imagination come up with something similar but new?
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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You are right, and I could - but Jitterbuhs is such a perfect word anyway...
Comment from chita
You have good rhythm and rhyme all through your poem and you are descriptive about the critters that abide-I like how you did not kill any of the critters and the children were the last to be caged--I like where you write(You think that's all? You think I'm done?-There's lots more critters having fun.) a delightful read and a well penned poem-great job.
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You have good rhythm and rhyme all through your poem and you are descriptive about the critters that abide-I like how you did not kill any of the critters and the children were the last to be caged--I like where you write(You think that's all? You think I'm done?-There's lots more critters having fun.) a delightful read and a well penned poem-great job.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thanks for the kind review - Yes, I believe kids love a bit of scary...
Comment from Matoshka
I just loved how this bounced along. Loved the descriptions of all the little critters. This was just so wonderful and I enjoyed it very much. Glad no Kiddie-Boppers were harmed. LOL
Blessings and good luck in the contest.
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I just loved how this bounced along. Loved the descriptions of all the little critters. This was just so wonderful and I enjoyed it very much. Glad no Kiddie-Boppers were harmed. LOL
Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thank you so much for the enthusiastic review and the six stars - glad you enjoyed this bit of fun.
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You are so welcome, it was so much fun to read. Blessings
Comment from TammyGail
What a great poem this was . I loved it every line even your humor in the end "No Critters were harmed in the composition of this poem (not even the sweet Kiddie-Boppers"
Very nice I enjoyed reading it very much
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What a great poem this was . I loved it every line even your humor in the end "No Critters were harmed in the composition of this poem (not even the sweet Kiddie-Boppers"
Very nice I enjoyed reading it very much
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Janie King
This is cute. You have a very good command of word usage. Your choice of words makes it easy for your reader to visualize what you are saying. The only thing I think that would make it stand out more is adding a picture that is fitting. Good job. God bless.
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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This is cute. You have a very good command of word usage. Your choice of words makes it easy for your reader to visualize what you are saying. The only thing I think that would make it stand out more is adding a picture that is fitting. Good job. God bless.
Comment Written 10-May-2011
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Haven't had time to find a picture yet - maybe today.
Thanks for the positive review.
Comment from l.raven
This is very well written.Has a great flow to it,and a great rhythm and rhyme.Loved the way you described the different critters.Very good childrens poem
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This is very well written.Has a great flow to it,and a great rhythm and rhyme.Loved the way you described the different critters.Very good childrens poem
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 10-May-2011
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Thanks for the positive review.