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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from marcellawachtel
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OK,you have me really worried about Cassie now. This chapter is really exciting, well written and a cliff hanger. Your characters are well drawn, and you deepen them with each chapter; in this one, of course we see a more intense Joe Barnes, who won't quit.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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My - Cassie's missing -
what an anxious time for
her poor mother...
a great chapter, Barbara.

shielded his eyes.I wonder - space needed after period

Margaret

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    I have taken care of that spacing error. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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first of all let me say, i am so glad your biopsy didn't show any cancer in your uterus and i'm praying that no more cancer shows up in your other tissue. you are still on our prayer list at church. that being said, this is an excellent chapter to your book, it sets up the scene very well and i don't know if its a predator or a drug cartel that has cassie, though i'm sure it's a predator

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Tellis
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Oh man it's lucky that Joe was there if it's an internet predator. He'll kick some bad guy butt I hope and get Cassie back. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter.

Tellis

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Joe does kick some butt. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Realist101
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Well!! I am as thrilled, and more so with author notes than this good and excellent chapter Barbara!! I like the suspense here, in your story, but not with your health, this is wonderful news!!! I am so happy!! So very happy! Keep it up! ") LOVE< and a hug too!! Susan

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your review and friendship.
Comment from jmdg1954
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Great chapter Barbara, for me it certainly took an avenue I did not see. I like how you are keeping the suspense and how Joe, is after all humen (sheez I don't have Sara's number and I love her). Keep up the fine work and keep the intrigue building. John

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
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Barbara,

This is an excellent, taut chapter. I couldn't find anything to criticize. About the internet predator: Maybe Sara would've taught Cassie to be more cautious about e-friends - that anybody can tell lies on line. But then, Sara might not know much about the internet. We'll see how this works out - it does keep Joe in town a while longer.

Dave

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Sara and Cassie are very small town, especially when it comes to some dangers. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from R. K. Alan
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Very nicely written. I knew something was going to happen to Cassie, but you ruled out my number one suspect. Nice tension in this chapter with Cassie in jeopardy. Thanks. Ray aka krylon

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his eyes.[space]I wonder - the editor strikes again

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    I have taken care of that spacing issue. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bowls
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I'm so glad to hear your good news. I guess it gets crowded in that doctor's office when all of us walk in with you!
I love what you're doing with the story. I'm terrified for Cassie, but think you're doing a wonderful job of building suspense. It was a nice touch - having Joe not know Sara's number. You're showing he's not a superman, but a human being. There are a few little typos you might want to look at."What's your parent's number" should be PARENTS' and "I'm afraid one the cartels" should be ONE OF THE.
Good luck tomorrow!

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    I have fixed those errors. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dom G Robles
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This looks like a crime story still to be proven. A missing boy named Casie who never made it to a destination-- the Burger Palace. One of investigator, Col. Joe Barnes was on a hot pursuit -- trying to tract down the places where he might have been earlier--the time he could have been seen by anyone. This is subject to further investigation. And the story is to be continued. Nice story. Dom

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. This is still mainly a romance with a subplot.
reply by Dom G Robles on 22-Sep-2010
    Thank you for the info.