Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Riding to forget,"A book of Poetry & Writing
121 total reviews
Comment from mushroom
My first thought was that this would be a very nice cowboy poem, how wrong was I, I like that this covers real life problems, a very clever and mindfully written piece
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
My first thought was that this would be a very nice cowboy poem, how wrong was I, I like that this covers real life problems, a very clever and mindfully written piece
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you for the comments mushroom
Comment from Amina Ahmed
beautiful piece of art i must say. very well written. keep up the good work. i love the expression and the story told. keep writing and take care
bye
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
beautiful piece of art i must say. very well written. keep up the good work. i love the expression and the story told. keep writing and take care
bye
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you
Comment from fairydancer
Good meter and rhymes in this piece, Gary.
Just one possible spag, in this line:
'Only stopping to repair the section(s) that was down'
Great poem about how some women do not fit in to the life of a cowboys wife.
Good one - Cally :)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
Good meter and rhymes in this piece, Gary.
Just one possible spag, in this line:
'Only stopping to repair the section(s) that was down'
Great poem about how some women do not fit in to the life of a cowboys wife.
Good one - Cally :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review fairy
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture, i love to see a cowboy on a horse, i enjoyed reading your poem about the loneliness of a cowboy
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture, i love to see a cowboy on a horse, i enjoyed reading your poem about the loneliness of a cowboy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you sweet
Comment from smileycloud
hey
good strong and powerful images of the broken man the characters are very much alive here and the profound messages through the ride have not been lost it is nice that she has not been bagged and that the writing actually understood her plight
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
hey
good strong and powerful images of the broken man the characters are very much alive here and the profound messages through the ride have not been lost it is nice that she has not been bagged and that the writing actually understood her plight
have a smiley day
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you smiley
Comment from Dan103085
A sad story, but I can see it applying to many professions, not only being a cowboy. The line between financial stability and doing what one loves and our personal relationships is sometimes blurred. A good read
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
A sad story, but I can see it applying to many professions, not only being a cowboy. The line between financial stability and doing what one loves and our personal relationships is sometimes blurred. A good read
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review dan
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Oh, this is wonderful! She just couldn't accept the 'cowboy's' way of life and is leaving. He rides the range, busying himself to get his mind off of his problems. I can well see this happening. Great writing! Betty
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
Oh, this is wonderful! She just couldn't accept the 'cowboy's' way of life and is leaving. He rides the range, busying himself to get his mind off of his problems. I can well see this happening. Great writing! Betty
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review see
Comment from Judian James
Hi there Deepwater. Another good piece from your pen. A few issues: "This cowboys heart was broken as he rides out in the storm,He feed's the steers " "cowboy's" should have an apostrophe and "feeds" should not. "Lifes story is unfolding" "Life's" should have an apostrophe.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
Hi there Deepwater. Another good piece from your pen. A few issues: "This cowboys heart was broken as he rides out in the storm,He feed's the steers " "cowboy's" should have an apostrophe and "feeds" should not. "Lifes story is unfolding" "Life's" should have an apostrophe.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review Judian
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I love the typo alerts one gets when another pair of eyes comes along. I know you'd do the same for me in a review of my work, right?
Comment from vandawalker
This has a sad story line, but there's still hope coming from the freedom and happiness found in the land and cattle. It is a hard life (my dad was a cattleman in the Midwest), but one that gives a lot of satisfaction in what you can build up. The different emotions in this poem bring out a good message. I enjoyed this writing.
leave [that] (the) very
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
This has a sad story line, but there's still hope coming from the freedom and happiness found in the land and cattle. It is a hard life (my dad was a cattleman in the Midwest), but one that gives a lot of satisfaction in what you can build up. The different emotions in this poem bring out a good message. I enjoyed this writing.
leave [that] (the) very
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thanks for the comments and review vandawalker
Comment from Amicus
I like your poem, Gary, and think your taciturn clueless broken hearted cowboy is a wonderful voice to write in...The poem flows well and is poignant but you need to address the SPAG problems in this poem that numerous reviewers have pointed out to you and to learn the grammatical rules that you consistently break which reviewers also, I see, generously point out to you for the consistent lack of polish in your work detracts from the overall effectiveness.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
I like your poem, Gary, and think your taciturn clueless broken hearted cowboy is a wonderful voice to write in...The poem flows well and is poignant but you need to address the SPAG problems in this poem that numerous reviewers have pointed out to you and to learn the grammatical rules that you consistently break which reviewers also, I see, generously point out to you for the consistent lack of polish in your work detracts from the overall effectiveness.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
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thanks