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My Mother

a remembrance

70 total reviews 
Comment from jasmh
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Nicely written. A touching telling of a difficult memory or realistic rendering of fiction. Whichever, you've done a good job!

I am puzzled by the Category of supernatural poetry though.

Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
    It's all true. Thanks for a good review. The supernatural category comes from the fact I knew exactly when my mother was going to die-the date and time.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written with good form, good meter, good flow, a wonderful tribute to your mother. i am sorry you had that problem with your family. i hope you are closer now. i wish you well in the contest

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
    No, we have drifted apart. I think one of my sisters is in New Zealand. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from findingmyroom
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It sounds like not only a very hard memory to relive but a difficult one to transpose on paper. I have no suggestions for improvement; it reads like a story, and the centering acts to show an ebb and swell, much like I feel the emotions are, coming from your piece. Well done.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
    Thanks for a superb review.
Comment from LegendaryAngel
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Overall, good. I didn't find anything that warrented attention to change.
Was this a personal experience if I may ask? Even if it wasn't, there was a strong emotional attachement to this peice. A suggestion, make a short story of this becuase the emotion and feeling is there. That was my thought after reading your poem.
Wonderful.
LA

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
    Yes, this is all true. It's too painful to go into more detail. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from knowledge
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I don't think that this is written in poetic prose format. It is more like a short story. I enjoyed it anyway.

Thank You My Friend,

Knowledge

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
    I think of it as more a prose poem with poetic qualities, such as rhythm. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from rama devi
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Hi Alvin. Sorry for your loss and the painful family scene. Thanks for sharing your story in this free verse prose-like poem. I found it a touching story, though might have preferred a prose account rather than a poetic one. That's just my taste.


I found this easy to read and well phrased, though id id wish there were some line breaks for breath and pause effect. No spags or nits otherwise.


Blessings,
rd


 Comment Written 08-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
    I think of it as more a prose poem with poetic qualities, such as rhythm. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from Alexander E Poet
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First and sorry for your lost, I'm glad as eight years away and yet had time to heal hopefully, I'm sure it was a unique experience, I had my mother she passed away in a hospital, so I can relate to what you're saying. I thought this was insightful, and very realistically told.
Well done no errors of mistakes Alexander

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
    Thanks for a superb review.
Comment from Vladilynn
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This is an awesome free verse! The repetition of some words added perfectly with the lines. Emotions captured my heart and the content makes my heart float.

All together, I loved it!
Take care, Alvin and Good luck!

Love much,
Lynn:0)

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
    Thanks for the exceptional review; I truly appreciate it. I am glad you understood the repetition.
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
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Alvin:

A very powerful and imagery laden poem, full of emotion drawn deep from the wells of the soul. Hope you are doing well.

~ Steven

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Thanks for a great review. Except for a touch of influenza, I am doing fine.
Comment from Bryana
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What a sad story you tell in this beautiful poetic way.
For a mother it doesn't matter what a son does or is, she would love him anyway. just like your mother did.
I'm so very sorry your mother passed away. If she was suffering, she's fine now with God.

I'm so sorry my friend

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 03-Mar-2010
    Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it. My mother and I always didn't get along, but we did love each other.