Wonder Lust
A poem in abab quatrains65 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
Awww, how sad. I don't think it's really about birds, tho. I read it over twice and I'm still not sure I get it. Did you lose the right words and just can't get them back?
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Awww, how sad. I don't think it's really about birds, tho. I read it over twice and I'm still not sure I get it. Did you lose the right words and just can't get them back?
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Cindy. I appreciate your review and comments. My intention was to show how difficult it is to capture one's flights of imagination and turn them into words. So often they die in the process. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from J.R. Preston
I really appreciated this poem. It was well written with vivid imagery that helped me to enter into the serene and beautiful scene. Thank you for sharing it!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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I really appreciated this poem. It was well written with vivid imagery that helped me to enter into the serene and beautiful scene. Thank you for sharing it!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review, J.R. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Wonderful; just wonderful! I don't know how better to describe this, but, this is just wonderful. Your wordings flowed so well. Again, you've got a very nice mix of wordings.
The message in this line: "I heard them sing from trees, their trills a waterfall," isn't very clear. You may want to review.
Overall, this is a very wonderful piece. Cheers!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Wonderful; just wonderful! I don't know how better to describe this, but, this is just wonderful. Your wordings flowed so well. Again, you've got a very nice mix of wordings.
The message in this line: "I heard them sing from trees, their trills a waterfall," isn't very clear. You may want to review.
Overall, this is a very wonderful piece. Cheers!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review and suggestion, Precious. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Wonder Lust, presented in ABAB-rhymed quatrains, is a mesmerizing tale of creation and the sometimes uncharted lives which evolve from what the creator saw as beauty. I see there is so much here that covers the personal, which I must interpret from the general observations. Our works turn into something other than what we had in mind initially. Of course, this might be a story about love birds.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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This poem, Wonder Lust, presented in ABAB-rhymed quatrains, is a mesmerizing tale of creation and the sometimes uncharted lives which evolve from what the creator saw as beauty. I see there is so much here that covers the personal, which I must interpret from the general observations. Our works turn into something other than what we had in mind initially. Of course, this might be a story about love birds.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review and interesting comments, Bill. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Lance S. Loria
An interesting work of poetry. I'm still thinking about some of the symbolisms you unleashed. I enjoyed the flow and rhyme. No edits or adjustments are necessary.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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An interesting work of poetry. I'm still thinking about some of the symbolisms you unleashed. I enjoyed the flow and rhyme. No edits or adjustments are necessary.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review and comments, Lance. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from karenina
What a powerful poem! How true that what we intend may not at all be the end result... Even beauty of poetry can turn beauty to darkness--and chaining what must be free will never cultivate luminescent work! --Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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What a powerful poem! How true that what we intend may not at all be the end result... Even beauty of poetry can turn beauty to darkness--and chaining what must be free will never cultivate luminescent work! --Karenina
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Karenina. I appreciate your review and kind comments. I'm delighted that you thought my poem worth a sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome. It was surely a six star poem in my estimation!--Karenina
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
WOW, amazing write
write my friend, I did
have to read it twice
after
the second time i sought
the beauty in the poem.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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WOW, amazing write
write my friend, I did
have to read it twice
after
the second time i sought
the beauty in the poem.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Abby. I appreciate your review and kind comments. I'm delighted that you thought my poem worth a sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
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your very welcome and i hold out on my sixes for the the worthy writes
Comment from susand3022
Hi Tony, I liked your poem in rhyming quatrains. The progression of the story went very smoothly and the rhyme scheme held. I like that the free birds flourish and the caged birds don't... something to remember, especially today. Well done :)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hi Tony, I liked your poem in rhyming quatrains. The progression of the story went very smoothly and the rhyme scheme held. I like that the free birds flourish and the caged birds don't... something to remember, especially today. Well done :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Susan. I appreciate your review and kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Janet Foor
Wow! Wonder Lust is a lovely, thoughtful poem filled with powerful imagery. Your descriptions and exceptional word choice as the poet lusts after those illusive words was pure poetry and a joy to read.
Blessings and stay well Tony
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Wow! Wonder Lust is a lovely, thoughtful poem filled with powerful imagery. Your descriptions and exceptional word choice as the poet lusts after those illusive words was pure poetry and a joy to read.
Blessings and stay well Tony
Janet
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Janet. I appreciate your review and kind comments. I'm delighted that you thought my poem worth a sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Bichon
This was truly an interesting poem. You have greatly described the life-cycle of your word birds in a unique fashion. The idea is very original, as is the great flowing story aspect. Really liked this one.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This was truly an interesting poem. You have greatly described the life-cycle of your word birds in a unique fashion. The idea is very original, as is the great flowing story aspect. Really liked this one.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Bichon. I appreciate your review and kind comments. I'm delighted that you thought my poem worth a sixth star. Best wishes, Tony