Babysitting Legacies
They're never quite what we remember... are they?34 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I rather enjoyed this piece. It's enchanting and very like a lot of the stories I read to me daughter. It develops nicely in a playful way. yeah, very nice. I hope it does well.
Jerrod appeared to duck his head / "Jarrod?" Might as well go - change in name spelling.
And di-," Faye began, - need opening speech marks here and I don't think you need the comma after the dash.
on the bottom bunk so Jerrod could climb in.
"Don't you worry yourselves." She kissed Jerrod'- spelling of name changes again here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Hi there,
I rather enjoyed this piece. It's enchanting and very like a lot of the stories I read to me daughter. It develops nicely in a playful way. yeah, very nice. I hope it does well.
Jerrod appeared to duck his head / "Jarrod?" Might as well go - change in name spelling.
And di-," Faye began, - need opening speech marks here and I don't think you need the comma after the dash.
on the bottom bunk so Jerrod could climb in.
"Don't you worry yourselves." She kissed Jerrod'- spelling of name changes again here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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LOL! Soooo, apparently name changes are what you get when you write part of it at work (between classes) and finish it when you get home! ;) Thanx so much for the catches, G, always so appreciated!! ;) :) Take care over there and have a wonderful year ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from Joan E.
Faye was certainly very professional in her protracted interrogation. I was fascinated by her name having been derived from Fairy and of course by Dru! Cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Faye was certainly very professional in her protracted interrogation. I was fascinated by her name having been derived from Fairy and of course by Dru! Cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Joan -- this is me getting my pen out of mothballs and letting my imagination start up after the holidays! ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful year ahead! ;) Yvette
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May your pen keep flowing freely in this new year! Smiles- Joan
Comment from susand3022
Hi Lady Y! I babysat for decades! I met one of my first really serious boyfriends babysitting. (I was always a little happy that Tracey Huckins had a Christmas party to go to that night.) Babysitting was my jam... I did it from the time I didn't want to go to Sunday school and I stayed in the nursery and helped with the babies instead. I was probably about 6. LOL
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Hi Lady Y! I babysat for decades! I met one of my first really serious boyfriends babysitting. (I was always a little happy that Tracey Huckins had a Christmas party to go to that night.) Babysitting was my jam... I did it from the time I didn't want to go to Sunday school and I stayed in the nursery and helped with the babies instead. I was probably about 6. LOL
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Hooray for babysitting! Yeah, I used to babysit as soon as I could for money and worked the church nursery like forever! ;) Glad you enjoyed this one -- twas fun to get my pen going again! ;) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting mixture of babysitting lore and fairy story with a huge troll that's allergic to cats but quite sensitive and caring!
Would "We heard a noise." be okay? The contest said, "We heard something." Just FYI as I don't want your post to be disqualified!
Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Interesting mixture of babysitting lore and fairy story with a huge troll that's allergic to cats but quite sensitive and caring!
Would "We heard a noise." be okay? The contest said, "We heard something." Just FYI as I don't want your post to be disqualified!
Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you, THANK YOU! I started this at work and just wrote from what I thought it was... completely forgot to go back and look at the exact words! Thnx for having my six, Professor! Going to bed now.... Goodnight, sweet friend! ;) Yvette