A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Deceit"Assorted poems of love
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Comment from Bill O'Bier
Glad you're back-- As always, clever and rich. A wonderful poem my friend. Thanks for sharing this fine piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
Glad you're back-- As always, clever and rich. A wonderful poem my friend. Thanks for sharing this fine piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill~
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Hello again, Bill. :)
I am delighted to be back. Your review is a welcome sight. Thank you :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We are mislead by friends of how good this little pill will make you feel. Before you know you are addicted and need more and more to get the good feeling.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
A very well-written poem. We are mislead by friends of how good this little pill will make you feel. Before you know you are addicted and need more and more to get the good feeling.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016
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Agreed, Sandra. It can destroy families.
Thank you for this lovely review :)
Missy
Comment from William Ross
A wonderful write on deceit and loss, reads and flows very well Addiction of any kind can cause lies and deceit. Nicely done. Thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
A wonderful write on deceit and loss, reads and flows very well Addiction of any kind can cause lies and deceit. Nicely done. Thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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Hello again, William. Thank you so much for the R&R.
Always,
Missy
Comment from barleygirl
I like that you put a twist at the end of your poem, addressing "Addiction" as the "Love that Kills" (didn't see that coming) . . . but I am not clear on whether the narrator is addicted or the narrator's beloved is the one who's addicted!?!?!! . . . I love this part: "bruises to my soul becoming harder to hide" becuz it's reminiscent of battered woman syndrome. All in all, your message is stated in original terms, which I love to see, rather than a cliché approach.
I don't understand this line: "so brown as to make the color die of envy" . . . what do you think of this . . . "so brown as to make green die of envy" . . . ??? (Just an idea).
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
I like that you put a twist at the end of your poem, addressing "Addiction" as the "Love that Kills" (didn't see that coming) . . . but I am not clear on whether the narrator is addicted or the narrator's beloved is the one who's addicted!?!?!! . . . I love this part: "bruises to my soul becoming harder to hide" becuz it's reminiscent of battered woman syndrome. All in all, your message is stated in original terms, which I love to see, rather than a cliché approach.
I don't understand this line: "so brown as to make the color die of envy" . . . what do you think of this . . . "so brown as to make green die of envy" . . . ??? (Just an idea).
Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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I am delighted by your review, I will read again and look at other reviews should I get them and see if others share your idea. I thought a lot on this line as you can imagine. Changed it several times, so I am not adverse to changing it again :)
Thank you so much barleygirl,
Always,
Missy
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You are a rare gem of a writer, to welcome such a review. I'm used to getting harsh responses becuz I don't write only glowing stuff! *smile*
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, well, I haven't seen that name pop up in awhile. Glad to see another of your fine poems posted. I hope all is well with you and it's nice to read your work again. Great job. :-)
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
Well, well, I haven't seen that name pop up in awhile. Glad to see another of your fine poems posted. I hope all is well with you and it's nice to read your work again. Great job. :-)
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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Hi Sug, I have missed you and your slightly flirtatious reviews...lol.
Hugs,
Always,
Missy
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, Missy.
This is pretty powerful poetry.
I can only hope that the scenes expressed as having unfolded here in the narrative of your poignant, melancholy musing is merely speculative, and not based upon current events.
Bravo, dear poet...
~Dean
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
Wow, Missy.
This is pretty powerful poetry.
I can only hope that the scenes expressed as having unfolded here in the narrative of your poignant, melancholy musing is merely speculative, and not based upon current events.
Bravo, dear poet...
~Dean
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016
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Hello, my dashing good friend. I am delighted to see your name as first review. It is laced with reality but not as lover. Addiction, has many faces. Lover is just one.
Thank you so much for being steadfast in my review list.
Missy
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It's always a pleasure, Missy.
I was happy to be able to read more of your delightful poetic renderings for a change.
Enjoy your weekend.
~Dean :}