The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 73 "Snow-bound reverie (5-7-5)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Gungalo
Snow-bound reverie
crystal dreams of warm white sand
nocturnal head trip
Wonderful Carolyn, a 5/7/5 that made you think of me. LOL nice down here right now.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Snow-bound reverie
crystal dreams of warm white sand
nocturnal head trip
Wonderful Carolyn, a 5/7/5 that made you think of me. LOL nice down here right now.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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You got it. I bet it is lovely. I can only dream, we are heading for Phoenix on the 18th to end of year. Desert, dry and warm, but not St Thomas. Thank for the great review. :-) Carolyn
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Oh at least you are getting away. Have a ball girl.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi Carolyn
I can see you do not like the snow. And you dream of the sand and the warm..
Have a trip to Cuba, very near you. I was there about a year ago. I had a fantastic time.
Take care.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Hi Carolyn
I can see you do not like the snow. And you dream of the sand and the warm..
Have a trip to Cuba, very near you. I was there about a year ago. I had a fantastic time.
Take care.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Hi there, I actually do like the snow, but I can tire of it pretty fast. A few good fires in the fireplace, pots of soups, writing, reviewing and painting days, and I am ready to go outside again. (It made for a good 5-7-5 subject) Cuba sounds nice. You take care too Benny, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Sylvia Page
You are most welcome to spend your snowed in days with me in sunny Lanka! It's nice to see picturesque snow covered scenery but it's another thing to experience the inconveniences and the biting cold.
You have here a beautifully crafted 5-7-5 poem Carolyn. Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
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You are most welcome to spend your snowed in days with me in sunny Lanka! It's nice to see picturesque snow covered scenery but it's another thing to experience the inconveniences and the biting cold.
You have here a beautifully crafted 5-7-5 poem Carolyn. Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thanks so much Sylvia, I pray your health is improving. I was watching the Cardinals feeding yesterday against the white background, they were beautiful. But I would enjoy a few days in the tropics. I appreciate the good wishes also. :-O Love, Carolyn
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a stunning 5-7-5 as the imagery conveyed is so serenely tangible to the reader. The syllable count is spot on and the word selection perfection. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This is a stunning 5-7-5 as the imagery conveyed is so serenely tangible to the reader. The syllable count is spot on and the word selection perfection. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
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I am happy you liked it, and thanks for the good wishes and wonderful rating. I appreciate you, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good tanka with correct syllable count throughout. I like your choice of words and I also like the picture. Lovely to look at but the experience we soon grow tired of. I hope you do well in the tanka contest. Regards Dorothy
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A good tanka with correct syllable count throughout. I like your choice of words and I also like the picture. Lovely to look at but the experience we soon grow tired of. I hope you do well in the tanka contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thanks Dorothy, for the wonderful review and the good wishes. It is pretty to look out on, driving to worship this morning was a bit of a challenge. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Cajungirl
Your 5/75 poem has the correct line and syllable count per line. Simple looking at your picture from your porch has given me chills. Here in Louisiana we are cold, but to you I guess 40 degrees would be an improvement. Thanks for sharing. Best of luck in the contest and stay warm.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Your 5/75 poem has the correct line and syllable count per line. Simple looking at your picture from your porch has given me chills. Here in Louisiana we are cold, but to you I guess 40 degrees would be an improvement. Thanks for sharing. Best of luck in the contest and stay warm.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
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And we are only in Missouri, Miz Kat is in Minnesota at -29... Brrrrrrrrrrrrrr... 40 degrees sounds like a heat-wave right now. Eat a bowl of jambalaya for me, a little extra Louisiana hot sauce please, :-) Carolyn
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Are you spying on me? I had chicken, pork and sausage jambalaya for lunch today. Chicken and Okra gumbo for supper. Don't worry I ate enough for a couple of people. LOL
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Dodododo do do do do....I see you! my kind of food, even though I am in Missouri I make a mean Gumbo. LOL.
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Beautiful scenery created through your words. The phrse crystal dreams of warm white sand is a very good find. Also nice alliteration used in this line.
Very well done
Kind regards
Sarah
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Beautiful scenery created through your words. The phrse crystal dreams of warm white sand is a very good find. Also nice alliteration used in this line.
Very well done
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
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Thanks Sarah, I appreciate your wonderful review, comments and rating. :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
Taking their picture is daring because of the cold of that scene and two beautiful shot in complements the poem very much and vice a versa. This 5/7/5 syllabic format is written very well and sends shivers down my body. Very nicely written and easy to read and understand. May the sun always shine on your shoulders and keep you warm.
AK
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Taking their picture is daring because of the cold of that scene and two beautiful shot in complements the poem very much and vice a versa. This 5/7/5 syllabic format is written very well and sends shivers down my body. Very nicely written and easy to read and understand. May the sun always shine on your shoulders and keep you warm.
AK
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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When we see the sun again, I will go stand in it a few minutes just for you AK. The red Cardinals look like Christmas ornaments in the snowy trees. Thank you so much for the great review.
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You are so welcome Carolyn.
May I ask you a private question it's about robina1978. Ritchie a.k.a. 9999 pool and myself are taking a survey by asking people to say yes in giving her a Fan Story trophy to fulfill her last wish before she passes into heaven. May I count on you and I sure thing that I will. Thank you so much Carolyn and God bless.
AK a.k.a. Alex
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AK, You certainly have my yessssssssss vote for Robina1978.. That is a sweet and wonderful gesture for her. God bless you all for it. Love, Carolyn
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Thank you so much Carolyn I will forward your response to Ritchie a.k.a. 9999 pool.
You have a good one and God bless
AK a.k.a. Alex
Comment from mfowler
This little gem has great shape and lovely imagery. I like the alternative scenes you paint. Your choice of words to describe the snow as 'crystal dreams of Snow White sand' is just great. And your final rejoinder of 'nocturnal head trip' had the contrast explained and it had me dreaming.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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This little gem has great shape and lovely imagery. I like the alternative scenes you paint. Your choice of words to describe the snow as 'crystal dreams of Snow White sand' is just great. And your final rejoinder of 'nocturnal head trip' had the contrast explained and it had me dreaming.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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Thank you for this great review, I enjoyed reading it. :-) I have been dreaming of a white Christmas but sand instead of snow. Have a great week, Carolyn
Comment from AnnieGale
I loved this...when is so cold and snowy we do tend to think of sandy beaches...I liked the photo, it brought it all together and the ******* was a cute idea, reminded me of snowflakes, maybe your intent....
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I loved this...when is so cold and snowy we do tend to think of sandy beaches...I liked the photo, it brought it all together and the ******* was a cute idea, reminded me of snowflakes, maybe your intent....
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013
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The ********* snowflakes were intentional. Glad you noticed.:-) Thanks for the review, I enjoyed reading it. Take care, Carolyn