Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from JW
This is a well written chapter. No spags found.
No doubt, Darcy is a real trip. Nothing like complaining about everything, then tricking the Father into paying for the luncheon. JW
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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This is a well written chapter. No spags found.
No doubt, Darcy is a real trip. Nothing like complaining about everything, then tricking the Father into paying for the luncheon. JW
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thank so much, Jonathon. I really appreciate the support. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from God's Writer
A riveting story Bev. I didn't know at any time how or which way it was going tom turn next. And on top of it the way you ended it with the setup and her thoughts of self recognition. Thank you for this mind bending tale.
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A riveting story Bev. I didn't know at any time how or which way it was going tom turn next. And on top of it the way you ended it with the setup and her thoughts of self recognition. Thank you for this mind bending tale.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Hi, Erick. Thanks so much, my friend. I'm glad the chapter kept your interest all the way through. Thanks, too, for the generous review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Neil A Morrow
Hi Writingfundimension, this is a well written piece of work. I love the way your descriptions work along with the dialogue and action. This is such a pleasure to read and creates a comfortable flow for the reader. A very well done from me and hopefully I will get some time to read more of your work in the near future.
neil
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Hi Writingfundimension, this is a well written piece of work. I love the way your descriptions work along with the dialogue and action. This is such a pleasure to read and creates a comfortable flow for the reader. A very well done from me and hopefully I will get some time to read more of your work in the near future.
neil
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thank you so much, Neil, for this gracious and encouraging review. I apppreciate your thoughts and insights very much. Thanks for stopping in. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from robina1978
Reading this, I could not help wondering if Darcy was the killer perhaps. I don't know why. But she is certainly one weird female. Not easy for the pastor.
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Reading this, I could not help wondering if Darcy was the killer perhaps. I don't know why. But she is certainly one weird female. Not easy for the pastor.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Hi, Ine. I've known a couple of folks exactly like Darcy, if you can believe it. Regular folks on the surface, but hard as nails underneath. Thanks so much for your generous review! Warm regards, Bev
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welcome Bev. Hugs, Ine
Comment from Norbanus
An Excellent bit of character exposure. I always wanted to write a character like Darcy Shaw, but I could never paint the picture as well as you have here. Nicely done.
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An Excellent bit of character exposure. I always wanted to write a character like Darcy Shaw, but I could never paint the picture as well as you have here. Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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What a lovely compliment, N. I really appreciate your gracious review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from alexgeorge
This is very well written and grabs our attention straight off.
I'm glad I came across it. I like the way the father and the Darcy girl cross 'swors' during the dialogue and the sly methods she uses to get her way,
Alex.
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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This is very well written and grabs our attention straight off.
I'm glad I came across it. I like the way the father and the Darcy girl cross 'swors' during the dialogue and the sly methods she uses to get her way,
Alex.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Hi, Alex. I'm very appreciative of your gracious review. Thanks for taking time to read and share your insights! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh no she didn't! What a royal bit-h!!! Oh Bev, this was such a super chapter. It was so warm and sweet, the priest missing Debra as he did, the dog's behavior. At then, like a bucket of cold water dumped on our heads, enter (or rather, sprawl - LOL) the witch.
Exceptional. But what else is new? :)
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Oh no she didn't! What a royal bit-h!!! Oh Bev, this was such a super chapter. It was so warm and sweet, the priest missing Debra as he did, the dog's behavior. At then, like a bucket of cold water dumped on our heads, enter (or rather, sprawl - LOL) the witch.
Exceptional. But what else is new? :)
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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It was a fun chapter to write. I know some women like Darcy and this is my little bit of 'revenge'. Glad you liked the chapter, my friend. Especially since you write 'baddies' so well! And thanks for the six stars. Always an honor coming from such a talanted writer. Hugs, Bev
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How can I say you are welcome at the same time as I say thank you? LOL
You are most welcome, my friend - most deserved. :)
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:0) xxx
Comment from conroy11
A very well-written chapter and an excellent character sketch of Darcy. I hate her already. You are so artful the way you bring her in the door falling at Father Brian's feet (probably the only time she'll ever be on her knees) Her complaints about the door, the dog, her aunt, religion,the cold creepy place Father Brian calls home, and of course she just had to have her hazelnut coffee! I can't stand her.
I also learned a new word "cremains," a very clever combination. And lastly, Darcy manipulates Father Brian into picking up the tab for the luncheon. Did I mention that I hate her? Very artfully done, you should be proud.
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A very well-written chapter and an excellent character sketch of Darcy. I hate her already. You are so artful the way you bring her in the door falling at Father Brian's feet (probably the only time she'll ever be on her knees) Her complaints about the door, the dog, her aunt, religion,the cold creepy place Father Brian calls home, and of course she just had to have her hazelnut coffee! I can't stand her.
I also learned a new word "cremains," a very clever combination. And lastly, Darcy manipulates Father Brian into picking up the tab for the luncheon. Did I mention that I hate her? Very artfully done, you should be proud.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Hi, conroy. I laughed the first time I heard them referred to as cremains. I agree - rather clever. Thanks so much for your super generous rating and words of encouragement. I'm honored and humbled. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh my, Ms Darcy is not the type of relative I want around when I depart. Since I'm the youngest now, I do wonder at times who will be. I may end up with my niece after all. Maybe I better do some planning ahead. =} This as always is very well written, I see no errors and look forward to your next chapter. Well done friend, Rox
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Oh my, Ms Darcy is not the type of relative I want around when I depart. Since I'm the youngest now, I do wonder at times who will be. I may end up with my niece after all. Maybe I better do some planning ahead. =} This as always is very well written, I see no errors and look forward to your next chapter. Well done friend, Rox
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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You know, Rox, I was thinking the same thing. I'm making sure I have a very good relationship with my nieces as I have no sons or daughters. Of course, everything Darcy is doing now has no effect on Debra and just shows she has no class LOL. Thanks, my friend, for your gracious review. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
Charming relative! I'm glad she'll get the mass. So sad to think of leaving this world with nobody to care. I had forgotten about Debra so it's nice to get reacquainted with her story. You're still using "unto". Lol - I'll have to get used to it I guess. Another great chapter, Bev!
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Charming relative! I'm glad she'll get the mass. So sad to think of leaving this world with nobody to care. I had forgotten about Debra so it's nice to get reacquainted with her story. You're still using "unto". Lol - I'll have to get used to it I guess. Another great chapter, Bev!
Comment Written 13-May-2013
reply by the author on 13-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Joy. I appreciate your gracious and supportive review. Bev