Water Spirit
1779, Finger Lakes Region of New York31 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
And you succeed in putting me in the fog and sitting on a log listening to Big Head and Turtle. I always forget how the Indian nations also took sides and fought in the war. It's another good history fiction story, hw.
A few things to look over to see if these need fixing...
like pups (fight)fights to take a teat,
My father, some evil spirit, (I??)suppose.
The (M)mother lasted in exile for only three more winters. So I, the monster was alone,(Using the word monster for both the father and the narrator made this line confusing at first)
third morning in (a)row I've make this voyage
(space betweemn ' and ve needs tightened up)
A real army in is marching hard (?)
"For,Turtle, notwith.(space needed?)
The fist of the point (is)was clearly visible
Smiles,
karyn :>)
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reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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And you succeed in putting me in the fog and sitting on a log listening to Big Head and Turtle. I always forget how the Indian nations also took sides and fought in the war. It's another good history fiction story, hw.
A few things to look over to see if these need fixing...
like pups (fight)fights to take a teat,
My father, some evil spirit, (I??)suppose.
The (M)mother lasted in exile for only three more winters. So I, the monster was alone,(Using the word monster for both the father and the narrator made this line confusing at first)
third morning in (a)row I've make this voyage
(space betweemn ' and ve needs tightened up)
A real army in is marching hard (?)
"For,Turtle, notwith.(space needed?)
The fist of the point (is)was clearly visible
Smiles,
karyn :>)
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Comment Written 16-May-2012
reply by the author on 17-May-2012
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Thank you so much, Indy. You saved me much embarrassment. I'm glad you liked this story. A little off the beaten track, but a girl from Buffalo ought to feel close enough to this history.
Thanks for all the help. Peace, Lee
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Very welcome hw. I've been to the lakes. I sent a reader over to you last night : )
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Yes, I told Rob I'd thank you. Thank you. L