Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Hayley_Loubear
Came in through the middle of the novel, but got the jist pretty quickly! Fantastic work, great read! A lot of description - which makes it easier for the reader to visualise, great work
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Came in through the middle of the novel, but got the jist pretty quickly! Fantastic work, great read! A lot of description - which makes it easier for the reader to visualise, great work
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Girlfriend, a very nice and clean chapter. I didn't spy any gremlins. The emotional talk between the girls was special.
Well done. luv jada
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Hi Girlfriend, a very nice and clean chapter. I didn't spy any gremlins. The emotional talk between the girls was special.
Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I hope you had a great Christmas and New Year.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Another well written chapter, the characters are consistent and well developed. The storyline moves along nicely and the dialogue remains natural and flows well.
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Another well written chapter, the characters are consistent and well developed. The storyline moves along nicely and the dialogue remains natural and flows well.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from JW
And the story continues. Will Sara open her heart? Will she be able to trust another enough to accept their love? Good question. The feelings and actions within this chapter is very realist considering the total scenerio.
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And the story continues. Will Sara open her heart? Will she be able to trust another enough to accept their love? Good question. The feelings and actions within this chapter is very realist considering the total scenerio.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Jonez08
Thank God for committed friends. Often they can see what we can't and vice versa. Hopefully, this will be a changing point for Sarah. Dialog flowed well.
"I haven't spoken with him since last night(.) (W)hy?"
"After Joe and I argued, George thought it'd be best to take her to my parents'."
--since this isn't exactly how it happened, how about: George thought it'd be best to take her to my parents'until me and Joe sorted things out. It doesn't have to be exactly like this, but something along these lines. Right now,it is sounds like they argued and George rushed her to Sarah's parents
Dani (gulped).
--this seems out of place
Cassandra
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Thank God for committed friends. Often they can see what we can't and vice versa. Hopefully, this will be a changing point for Sarah. Dialog flowed well.
"I haven't spoken with him since last night(.) (W)hy?"
"After Joe and I argued, George thought it'd be best to take her to my parents'."
--since this isn't exactly how it happened, how about: George thought it'd be best to take her to my parents'until me and Joe sorted things out. It doesn't have to be exactly like this, but something along these lines. Right now,it is sounds like they argued and George rushed her to Sarah's parents
Dani (gulped).
--this seems out of place
Cassandra
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I will check out those areas. Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate it.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is so well written -
I was there with Dani and
Sarah, during their conversation,
which was natural and believeable
.... and a most enjoyable read....
deserving of six, my friend.
Margaret.
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This is so well written -
I was there with Dani and
Sarah, during their conversation,
which was natural and believeable
.... and a most enjoyable read....
deserving of six, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from sweetsilversong
Barbara, such a smooth, well written chapter.
You have such great ability with the way your story flows.
Very enjoyable.
Best wishes.
SSS
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Barbara, such a smooth, well written chapter.
You have such great ability with the way your story flows.
Very enjoyable.
Best wishes.
SSS
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from ejebb1951
So many of us make the mistake of letting past hurts hinder us from finding or accepting true love when it comes along. We fear hurt like the plague. I just love this story Barbara. I'm so in it.
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So many of us make the mistake of letting past hurts hinder us from finding or accepting true love when it comes along. We fear hurt like the plague. I just love this story Barbara. I'm so in it.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from marcellawachtel
This is another great chapter. You handle this very complex dialog so well; it is so believable, and so smooth, and I think Sarah is so right not to jump at the chance to marry Joe when it's been such a short time, albeit an intense one.
Illustration is gorgeous.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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This is another great chapter. You handle this very complex dialog so well; it is so believable, and so smooth, and I think Sarah is so right not to jump at the chance to marry Joe when it's been such a short time, albeit an intense one.
Illustration is gorgeous.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Off to a good start for the new year. You certainly finished well in the last round. Nicely put together dialogue here between Dani and Sara - who really does need to sort out her thinking!
Patrick
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi Barbara,
Off to a good start for the new year. You certainly finished well in the last round. Nicely put together dialogue here between Dani and Sara - who really does need to sort out her thinking!
Patrick
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support. I appreciate both.