Comment from Belinda

Excellent

The story is perfectly written. Frankly, I thought the plot is one I might have thought about for myself ... :) As for corrections, I only find a planed with one n, and two words that stick together (parentsfinally) in the para beginning with: Over the next three hours ...

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010

Thanks for catching the spags. I am pleased you liked this one.

Comment from rivki1111

Excellent

Hello, this is sad...but well written. I liked this chapter and your characters are very easy to visualize.

You write with a good grasp of English and I noticed no errors as I read through.

The letter and its subsequent revelation would come as such a shock, wouldn't it?

Very realistic, and I have no suggestions for improvement. Thanks for sharing your story, it is one I would recommend, cheers, Rivki.

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 Comment Written 17-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010

Thanks so much. I wasn't sure if his one worked or not. Glad you liked it.

Comment from RKagan

Excellent

This was an awesome story. The twists were wonderful. When I read the letter that that she was a stolen child my mouth was hanging open. This was riviting and extrememly well written.

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 Comment Written 17-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010

Thanks so much. I am thrilled you liked this one. I wasn't sure it would work.