Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Chapter 5, part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from fairy77
That was a great story.I'm sorry to hear about the cancer and I wish you the best.The character build between Joe and Sara was great.Very romantic at parts.The relationship she had with her daughter was so genuine and real.You are an amazing story teller.Your one of my favourites so I think I'll become a fan.Thanks Beth.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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That was a great story.I'm sorry to hear about the cancer and I wish you the best.The character build between Joe and Sara was great.Very romantic at parts.The relationship she had with her daughter was so genuine and real.You are an amazing story teller.Your one of my favourites so I think I'll become a fan.Thanks Beth.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your concern about my illness. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Sara sounds very comfortable around the kitchen. She supports Cassie by baking cookies. She is also unsure of herself. She might not think Joe is going to stay, but she got jealous when he talked to Ms. Moore. She might deny her feelings about Joe, but both Joe and Cassie know she likes Joe.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Sara sounds very comfortable around the kitchen. She supports Cassie by baking cookies. She is also unsure of herself. She might not think Joe is going to stay, but she got jealous when he talked to Ms. Moore. She might deny her feelings about Joe, but both Joe and Cassie know she likes Joe.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from animatqua
I am watching your characters develop as I continue to follow the story. I understand the time you are taking to do this, and I'm looking forward to the further involvement with Sara and Joe.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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I am watching your characters develop as I continue to follow the story. I understand the time you are taking to do this, and I'm looking forward to the further involvement with Sara and Joe.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from skychild27
its perfect and I'm excited to read more. I wish you all the best with your surgery and chemo. I'll be praying for you. thank you for this story, the characters are so warm and loving. Its hard to imagine a man who acts like joe all the time, I bet he's been married for years now. :) Thanks again and all the best. :)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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its perfect and I'm excited to read more. I wish you all the best with your surgery and chemo. I'll be praying for you. thank you for this story, the characters are so warm and loving. Its hard to imagine a man who acts like joe all the time, I bet he's been married for years now. :) Thanks again and all the best. :)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Freyja
Smoothly written story! Good dialog...believable.
"She's a great kid, but I don't think I'll ever understand her." => This struck me as out of the blue, but I hadn't read prior chapters. I read back to Chapter 3 part 1 and got the impression that Joe has had very little interaction with Cassie so it still seemed odd. Also, she seems like a regular kid.
"Have I ever told you how cute you are when you're frustrated and jealous?" => To me, this implied a much longer relationship than they've had so far.
That's about all I have. I didn't even notice any typos!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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Smoothly written story! Good dialog...believable.
"She's a great kid, but I don't think I'll ever understand her." => This struck me as out of the blue, but I hadn't read prior chapters. I read back to Chapter 3 part 1 and got the impression that Joe has had very little interaction with Cassie so it still seemed odd. Also, she seems like a regular kid.
"Have I ever told you how cute you are when you're frustrated and jealous?" => To me, this implied a much longer relationship than they've had so far.
That's about all I have. I didn't even notice any typos!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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I will recheck those areas. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from CKLA
I enjoyed reading this chapter. I could picture the scene at the ball park. The whole scene and dialogued seemed very natural. Take care.
Collette
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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I enjoyed reading this chapter. I could picture the scene at the ball park. The whole scene and dialogued seemed very natural. Take care.
Collette
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Heidixoxo
Way to go Barbara!! This is a great story and was actually fun to read. You have captured so much within your words and done it well. I liked your characters and see no errors at all. Job well done and thanks so much for sharing. Good luck to you as always.........xoxo
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Way to go Barbara!! This is a great story and was actually fun to read. You have captured so much within your words and done it well. I liked your characters and see no errors at all. Job well done and thanks so much for sharing. Good luck to you as always.........xoxo
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Connie P
Great chapter Barbara. I'll be waiting for the continuation when you have the time and energy to post it. You continue to be in my thoughts and prayers.
Connie
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Great chapter Barbara. I'll be waiting for the continuation when you have the time and energy to post it. You continue to be in my thoughts and prayers.
Connie
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from thebyers21
I love the plot you have going on here. All of your characters have a true pull to the reader. I didn't see any mistakes and I love the way you pulled it all together. Now I just need to read the rest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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I love the plot you have going on here. All of your characters have a true pull to the reader. I didn't see any mistakes and I love the way you pulled it all together. Now I just need to read the rest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
I think that this chapter is great as well. You have a good way of putting drama and humor together in a good way. I saw no editing needed. Good job.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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I think that this chapter is great as well. You have a good way of putting drama and humor together in a good way. I saw no editing needed. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.