Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Cuckoo and the Eldritch Kiss"An extended story in poem form
36 total reviews
Comment from CaptainKurt
Very enjoyable and easy to follow, in fact, I want to follow it. The descriptions paint a dark world in my mind and make the character's desolation palpable. Really good work, thanks for putting it out there.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Very enjoyable and easy to follow, in fact, I want to follow it. The descriptions paint a dark world in my mind and make the character's desolation palpable. Really good work, thanks for putting it out there.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Kurt :-). I wanted to open these chronicles with a strong sense of despair and hopelessness, leading (hopefully) to some lighter times for my lead character. I'm glad it came across as such!
Mike
Comment from Valkarie
I like this because...I find your wandering man a thought provoking piece which is mysterious and mystic. There is a chilling air about this writing that is both visual and powerful and draws the reader into the piece. A chilling piece keep the suspense going.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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I like this because...I find your wandering man a thought provoking piece which is mysterious and mystic. There is a chilling air about this writing that is both visual and powerful and draws the reader into the piece. A chilling piece keep the suspense going.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Cheers, Valkarie :-). I got a bit paranoid that, after the opening chapter, this one wasn;t up to scratch, but I guess you just have to run with it before you end up sitting on it amidst a maelstrom of fear and lack of confidence. All of which is a highly roundabout way of saying thanks for the review, and I'm glad you enjoyed the read!
Mike
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Looking forward to the next part Mike.
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Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is a very interesting story even though it is different from others. It is mysterious and mystic. It is a very well written story poem with a wonderful flow. I enjoyed reading it very much. Excellent read! God bless you.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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This is a very interesting story even though it is different from others. It is mysterious and mystic. It is a very well written story poem with a wonderful flow. I enjoyed reading it very much. Excellent read! God bless you.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you, HAB :-). I do like to be different! So glad you enjoyed my continuing saga.
Mike
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You are very welcome. I will be looking for the next one. I hope you have a blessed night. Marilyn :)
Comment from patmedium
Does this look as if your tale is a wonderful step away from the boring norm?
Does this look as if I am 'seeing' your writing?
Does this look as if I can't wait for the next episode?
Does this look as if I am THOROUGHLY enjoying this?
You could slowly but surely take this man ANYWHERE!
You have got my last six. In awe. Pat.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Does this look as if your tale is a wonderful step away from the boring norm?
Does this look as if I am 'seeing' your writing?
Does this look as if I can't wait for the next episode?
Does this look as if I am THOROUGHLY enjoying this?
You could slowly but surely take this man ANYWHERE!
You have got my last six. In awe. Pat.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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This looks like ...
An awesome review that's made me feel all gooey inside and humbly grateful for your confidence-enhancing comments :-)))))
Mike
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Read my P.M... let me know if you can 'see' it as I can? Pat.
Comment from yellowrosebud
This is my first poem of the asventures of the wandering man.This is a great poem of aman that seems lost in dreams I thought is was thought provoking and powerful.Looking forward to his next wanderings. Yours "Rosebud"
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This is my first poem of the asventures of the wandering man.This is a great poem of aman that seems lost in dreams I thought is was thought provoking and powerful.Looking forward to his next wanderings. Yours "Rosebud"
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Rosebud :-). I have many adventures planned for the Wandering Man!
Mike
Comment from Runnin
Hi Fleedleflump, I'm really enjoying your poem. It reads well aloud. The rhymes aren't forced and are not predictable. Same goes for the meter.
I also like the images that use the 5 senses. You keep the poem in material world, as much as possible, and it helps the reader keep his footing.
As for the story, I read The Road by Cormac MaCarthy last year. That was pretty bleak too, and a similar idea.
Good luck with the story.
Cheers, Runnin
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Hi Fleedleflump, I'm really enjoying your poem. It reads well aloud. The rhymes aren't forced and are not predictable. Same goes for the meter.
I also like the images that use the 5 senses. You keep the poem in material world, as much as possible, and it helps the reader keep his footing.
As for the story, I read The Road by Cormac MaCarthy last year. That was pretty bleak too, and a similar idea.
Good luck with the story.
Cheers, Runnin
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Runnin; what a great review :-). That's the second comparison to "The Road" that somebody's made, and a few friends have told me what a good book it is. I shall have to look it out!
Thanks again for taking the time to share your thoughts with me :-)
Mike