Damaged Goods
A Poem72 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
OH my, this is a powerful, intense and shocking poem. It is also masterfully crafted with fine fresh rhyming (hull/invisible---clever rhyme), fine internal rhyme and other poetic devices.
Brilliant write. Disturbing and sad as well.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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OH my, this is a powerful, intense and shocking poem. It is also masterfully crafted with fine fresh rhyming (hull/invisible---clever rhyme), fine internal rhyme and other poetic devices.
Brilliant write. Disturbing and sad as well.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you rama,
I truly appreciate your thoughts on this piece my friend.
Curt
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
God forbid - that such wicked
things happen to young innocents...
it makes me cringe just thinking
about it -- such a sad, tragic story
you tell, Curt.
The content, flow to the words, rhythm
and rhyme, all cleverly crafted by your
talented pen - deserving of a six.
Welcome back, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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God forbid - that such wicked
things happen to young innocents...
it makes me cringe just thinking
about it -- such a sad, tragic story
you tell, Curt.
The content, flow to the words, rhythm
and rhyme, all cleverly crafted by your
talented pen - deserving of a six.
Welcome back, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Hi Margaret,
Thank you for the welcome, I feel as if I have been out of circulation for months. I know that tragedies happen every day, and I could write of more horrific things than this, but I seem to lose my audience in the terrors of what I write when I do. Maybe in the future I will post one just to see how it goes. For now, I am trying to get some less potent pieces to post and get a little humor back into the mix.
Thank you for the thoughts my dear friend,
Curt
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Curt,
How true, nothing broken can ever be made fully whole again, the scars always remain. Good rhythm, graphic message and adamning indictment of the abusers "games" and lies.
Patrick
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Hi Curt,
How true, nothing broken can ever be made fully whole again, the scars always remain. Good rhythm, graphic message and adamning indictment of the abusers "games" and lies.
Patrick
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thanks Patrick,
I try very hard to make do with what I have. It amy not be what I would have had, but its all I have now, and that is what I need to deal with.
I really appreciate your cvandid thoughts my friend.
Curt
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Well, from where I sit, you're doing pretty well, my friend.
Patrick
Comment from NadineM
Wow... Curt. You know how I feel about reviewing such heartfelt writing; that I'd rather write to the fractured spirit than critique the writing.
Captivating and horrifying, your writing shares the excruciating pain of an abused child. The imagery is so vivid, I could almost feel the pelt against my skin and smell the stale beer and cigarettes. I definitely could feel the fear, pain and disgust.
You describe the circumstances of lies and deceit and pain and torture so well. It's your story so of course it's heartfelt. How awful it must be to relive these memories every day.
To the child within, God loves you and gave you those songs to soothe your soul. I believe he's also given you the words you share with others, and your writing today may help another in their own healing. God bless you.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Wow... Curt. You know how I feel about reviewing such heartfelt writing; that I'd rather write to the fractured spirit than critique the writing.
Captivating and horrifying, your writing shares the excruciating pain of an abused child. The imagery is so vivid, I could almost feel the pelt against my skin and smell the stale beer and cigarettes. I definitely could feel the fear, pain and disgust.
You describe the circumstances of lies and deceit and pain and torture so well. It's your story so of course it's heartfelt. How awful it must be to relive these memories every day.
To the child within, God loves you and gave you those songs to soothe your soul. I believe he's also given you the words you share with others, and your writing today may help another in their own healing. God bless you.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you NAdine,
I truly appreciate the sentiments. Actually, I don't think aboput it every day, but when it comes out in my writing, I have days and even weeks of turbulent emotions that give me a high/low ride from hell. Makes me want to start doing drugs again, if you know what I mean. Don't worry, I haven't used in over twenty years.
Thank you again for your sincere thoughts Nadine, I truly appreciate them.
Curt
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yes, I do know what you mean. That desire to reach for what numbed the pain in the past.... Glad you're able to resist and rely on other methods for coping. Thank-you for being brave enough to write about these issues, if not for yourself, for others still too scared to admit their own pain.
God bless you..Nadine
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Once again, my heart goes out to that little boy so cruelly abused, and I am outraged by the evil of his abuser. May the man you have become (this gifted man!) be cleansed and freed and relieved of the terrible effects of the sins of that monster. My best to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Once again, my heart goes out to that little boy so cruelly abused, and I am outraged by the evil of his abuser. May the man you have become (this gifted man!) be cleansed and freed and relieved of the terrible effects of the sins of that monster. My best to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you Jeanie,
I am touched by your commments. You have given me a smile today, and that is a really good feeling.
Curt
Comment from Ash Madox
This is gut wrenching honesty, handled with masterful expression and poetic finesse. I feel for you and hope this purges you of that damaging, vile human being at least to some degree. Staggering, superb and sincere. All the best. Ash.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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This is gut wrenching honesty, handled with masterful expression and poetic finesse. I feel for you and hope this purges you of that damaging, vile human being at least to some degree. Staggering, superb and sincere. All the best. Ash.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you Ash,
I really appreciate your thoughts and comments on this piece. The purging contiinues, as it has for most of my life. But you should have seen me twenty years ago! :-}
Curt
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Slow but sure. Good on you.
Comment from Sharesy
This was an extremely well written, graphic discussion about the rape of innocence. this is biographical. Was the boy you, or a relative? Either way, what happened is a horror that should never happen to anybody. I'd like to express my empathy with the victim of this awful ordeal.
Sharesy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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This was an extremely well written, graphic discussion about the rape of innocence. this is biographical. Was the boy you, or a relative? Either way, what happened is a horror that should never happen to anybody. I'd like to express my empathy with the victim of this awful ordeal.
Sharesy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you Sharesy,
I agrgee 110% that this type of abuse should never happen to anyone, and that if it happened for a reason, what possible reason could there be? I haven't found the answer to this day, and doubt if I ever will.
Thank you again my friend,
Curt
Comment from closetpoetjester
This is so brave! I commend your writing so highly and I think that maybe as much as this hurt you, that you somehow found a way to mute the pain as you sang your silent song! That f*****g low life!
If writing helps keep going. This is abhorrent, yet so compelling. So much depth, so many layers, so much hurt. If I could give all my sixes for the week to numb your pain I would. Such a brave soul you are to expose such pain and shame that you probably felt for the longest time
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Written with sheer brilliance as always Curt. I have great empathy for your situation and can only hope you are healing in little steps as this is far too huge to wipe away in a matter of months or years. This one will probably take a lifetime.
Thanks so much for sharing such a thought provoking story and I hope that bastard hangs in hell for what he has done!
Sincerely sorry and thinking of you, yet I sense you somehow don't want sympathy...just maybe understanding without judgement. You have that from me my friend.
Please take care... you are a wonderful inspiration Curt.
Remember that when you are at your darkest.
Closet xoxoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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This is so brave! I commend your writing so highly and I think that maybe as much as this hurt you, that you somehow found a way to mute the pain as you sang your silent song! That f*****g low life!
If writing helps keep going. This is abhorrent, yet so compelling. So much depth, so many layers, so much hurt. If I could give all my sixes for the week to numb your pain I would. Such a brave soul you are to expose such pain and shame that you probably felt for the longest time
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Written with sheer brilliance as always Curt. I have great empathy for your situation and can only hope you are healing in little steps as this is far too huge to wipe away in a matter of months or years. This one will probably take a lifetime.
Thanks so much for sharing such a thought provoking story and I hope that bastard hangs in hell for what he has done!
Sincerely sorry and thinking of you, yet I sense you somehow don't want sympathy...just maybe understanding without judgement. You have that from me my friend.
Please take care... you are a wonderful inspiration Curt.
Remember that when you are at your darkest.
Closet xoxoxoxoxo
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you my friend,
You are right about the understanding. I never wanted sympathy or pity, just a reason why. I may never have that, but I know that I am not alone, and that is a tremendous help.
To know that I am an inspiration for others gives me a real sense of hope, and if all I have to offer this world is my writing, then I want to use it to try to help others as much as I can.
When I am gone, this is all that will be left of me. I want the world to know I never gave up.
Thank you again my friend,
Curt
Comment from closetpoetjester
This is so brave! I commend your writing so highly and I think that maybe as much as this hurt you, that you somehow found a way to mute the pain as you sang your silent song! That f*****g low life!
If writing helps keep going. This is abhorrent, yet so compelling. So much depth, so many layers, so much hurt. If I could give all my sixes for the week to numb your pain I would. Such a brave soul you are to expose such pain and shame that you probably felt for the longest time
.
Written with sheer brilliance as always Curt. I have great empathy for your situation and can only hope you are healing in little steps as this is far too huge to wipe away in a matter of months or years. This one will probably take a lifetime.
Thanks so much for sharing such a thought provoking story and I hope that bastard hangs in hell for what he has done!
Sincerely sorry and thinking of you, yet I sense you somehow don't want sympathy...just maybe understanding without judgement. You have that from me my friend.
Please take care... you are a wonderful inspiration Curt.
Remember that when you are at your darkest.
Closet xoxoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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This is so brave! I commend your writing so highly and I think that maybe as much as this hurt you, that you somehow found a way to mute the pain as you sang your silent song! That f*****g low life!
If writing helps keep going. This is abhorrent, yet so compelling. So much depth, so many layers, so much hurt. If I could give all my sixes for the week to numb your pain I would. Such a brave soul you are to expose such pain and shame that you probably felt for the longest time
.
Written with sheer brilliance as always Curt. I have great empathy for your situation and can only hope you are healing in little steps as this is far too huge to wipe away in a matter of months or years. This one will probably take a lifetime.
Thanks so much for sharing such a thought provoking story and I hope that bastard hangs in hell for what he has done!
Sincerely sorry and thinking of you, yet I sense you somehow don't want sympathy...just maybe understanding without judgement. You have that from me my friend.
Please take care... you are a wonderful inspiration Curt.
Remember that when you are at your darkest.
Closet xoxoxoxoxo
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you my friend,
You are right about the understanding. I never wanted sympathy or pity, just a reason why. I may never have that, but I know that I am not alone, and that is a tremendous help.
To know that I am an inspiration for others gives me a real sense of hope, and if all I have to offer this world is my writing, then I want to use it to try to help others as much as I can.
When I am gone, this is all that will be left of me. I want the world to know I never gave up.
Thank you again my friend,
Curt
Comment from Hitcher
They say that evil fuels evil and an evil act can be the catalyst for one to unleash a fury so dark and destructive that it could actually destroy the fragile fabric of ones mind and send them to hurtling to hell.
It is an awesome[written], terrifyingly graphic, scary as hell story in poem friend, I can't say I enjoyed reading it because I know the truths that birthed it.
I would do a Brad Pitt in the movie 'Seven' the fury would be unleashed, and I'd be burning in hell, and where is the justice in that? Hitch
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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They say that evil fuels evil and an evil act can be the catalyst for one to unleash a fury so dark and destructive that it could actually destroy the fragile fabric of ones mind and send them to hurtling to hell.
It is an awesome[written], terrifyingly graphic, scary as hell story in poem friend, I can't say I enjoyed reading it because I know the truths that birthed it.
I would do a Brad Pitt in the movie 'Seven' the fury would be unleashed, and I'd be burning in hell, and where is the justice in that? Hitch
Comment Written 19-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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If God can forgive the abuser for what he did, then He can forgive the abused for exacting revenge.
And if not, at least I'll be warm with all my friends in front of the fire! :-}
Thanks Hitch, I look forward to our next project with Luna.
Curt
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I'm not exactly sure what is going on with Luna's prodject Mate, I thought we were all taking turns to write a stanza, now we are just writing individul poems in a multi author book???
It is my Birthday today so Moana is taking me to see Day breakers[Vampire movie].
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Happy Birthday buddy!
Enjoy yourself, and don't worry about the poem stuff, I'm sure we will figure out these wacky women someday! :-}
Take care mate,
Curt