What could go wrong?
A young man invests in a new business.40 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent, it read like non-fiction, too. I love the way you brought us through the expenses, then the fears and worries of if it would be a success or not, and all those pregnancies. Lol. At least by the end of the story, we see a man who managed to work through those fears, is rich, confident and well able to do the job and teach others. Very well done. A very enjoyable story. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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That was excellent, it read like non-fiction, too. I love the way you brought us through the expenses, then the fears and worries of if it would be a success or not, and all those pregnancies. Lol. At least by the end of the story, we see a man who managed to work through those fears, is rich, confident and well able to do the job and teach others. Very well done. A very enjoyable story. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Sandra, I will cherish this review. Thank you. Terry.
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You are most welcome, Terry. I really did enjoy it. xx
Comment from Zue65
I agree, sometimes fear will move mountains and motivate one to scale new adventures with zest and bravado, This I believe is what Jimmy achieved in this fiction. The question what could go wrong becomes the thread that connected all the events happening in this piece. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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I agree, sometimes fear will move mountains and motivate one to scale new adventures with zest and bravado, This I believe is what Jimmy achieved in this fiction. The question what could go wrong becomes the thread that connected all the events happening in this piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Zue65, thank you for reading my story, and providing an insightful review. Terry.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done. Well written.
I had a skylight (tinted) in a house I had built in Arkansas. I had to cover it because of the magnified sunlight. The carpet beneath would burn your feet. And the A/C couldn't keep up.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Well done. Well written.
I had a skylight (tinted) in a house I had built in Arkansas. I had to cover it because of the magnified sunlight. The carpet beneath would burn your feet. And the A/C couldn't keep up.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Wayne, thank you for reading, I guess you needed that double pane, high heat skylight. Terry.
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It was double pane and tinted. I think maybe the convex was backwards, making the room paper under a microscope. lol
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This was absolutely terrific! I totally enjoyed the way you set this up. And the "what could go wrong"s along the way were a perfect touch. Jim showed us himself, with his list, all that could go wrong...and yet he powered through. (My husband and I like to call that "being a bulldozer." We say that to our kids often ''"Be a bulldozer."-- and they're old enough now to admit it helps.)
Also, though, the Jewish Mommie in me thinks his Worry List contributed to Jim's success. The saying that ascribes to that is: A day without Worry means you simply did not try hard enough.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This was absolutely terrific! I totally enjoyed the way you set this up. And the "what could go wrong"s along the way were a perfect touch. Jim showed us himself, with his list, all that could go wrong...and yet he powered through. (My husband and I like to call that "being a bulldozer." We say that to our kids often ''"Be a bulldozer."-- and they're old enough now to admit it helps.)
Also, though, the Jewish Mommie in me thinks his Worry List contributed to Jim's success. The saying that ascribes to that is: A day without Worry means you simply did not try hard enough.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Rachelle, thank you for the six stars. I really like the bulldozer and a day without worry, another interesting review from you. Terry.
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Thanks. If we're not having fun, whatever in the world is the point?!!
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Right you are!
Comment from Wendy G
A fine story. Some people do become so obsessed with potential problems that they never succeed at anything, as fear holds them back. Good on him for making it work, overcoming the potential pitfalls, and a delightful twist at the end. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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A fine story. Some people do become so obsessed with potential problems that they never succeed at anything, as fear holds them back. Good on him for making it work, overcoming the potential pitfalls, and a delightful twist at the end. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Wendy, thank you for reading. Terry.
Comment from Sanku
A great story to read on a Sunday. I was reading with trepidation and was ready to face an unexpected hitch ,especially with Jim's drinking and chicken eating ..But lo a pleasant surprise ! A new addition to the family..
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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A great story to read on a Sunday. I was reading with trepidation and was ready to face an unexpected hitch ,especially with Jim's drinking and chicken eating ..But lo a pleasant surprise ! A new addition to the family..
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Sanku, thank you for reading, he kept having those surprises. Terry.
Comment from Ricky1024
This story was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed Sabbath Sunday.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This story was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed Sabbath Sunday.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Ricky, thank you for reading. Terry.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Terry, I swear you put out your best on a Saturday Night / early Sunday Morning.
I bet you never ask yourself, what could go wrong. Lol! I was starting to become the type of person that I try so hard not to be; a pessimist. With Jimmy thinking in his head over and over, "what could go wrong" and putting down that much bourbon, I was afraid he was going to (as my husband would say) wake up dead.
You had me all prepared for the letdown, reeled me in and at the last minute, catch and release. Dang, I love that kind of story. Especially with her just telling that she was pregnant! This was fun, lots of fun to read. I enjoyed the beginning, as I remember those days that we lived with the high interest rates. I think we were paying 13% on our house payments, so living with Mr Practical. I worked nights, he worked days and we went without a lot to pay off as much on our principal every month that we could. We did it in five years and burned the mortgage for ever. Anyway... our kids have no clue what could hit them someday. I have a feeling that they are thinking, what could go wrong? Loved this story, loved that you got that school of hard knocks in there, and loved that it all worked out....
And I do know that it is fiction, but you write so darn well that I keep forgetting that.
So thank you once again for this superb story with an amazing ending.
I absolutely loved it. Thanks my dear friend. It was Awesome!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Terry, I swear you put out your best on a Saturday Night / early Sunday Morning.
I bet you never ask yourself, what could go wrong. Lol! I was starting to become the type of person that I try so hard not to be; a pessimist. With Jimmy thinking in his head over and over, "what could go wrong" and putting down that much bourbon, I was afraid he was going to (as my husband would say) wake up dead.
You had me all prepared for the letdown, reeled me in and at the last minute, catch and release. Dang, I love that kind of story. Especially with her just telling that she was pregnant! This was fun, lots of fun to read. I enjoyed the beginning, as I remember those days that we lived with the high interest rates. I think we were paying 13% on our house payments, so living with Mr Practical. I worked nights, he worked days and we went without a lot to pay off as much on our principal every month that we could. We did it in five years and burned the mortgage for ever. Anyway... our kids have no clue what could hit them someday. I have a feeling that they are thinking, what could go wrong? Loved this story, loved that you got that school of hard knocks in there, and loved that it all worked out....
And I do know that it is fiction, but you write so darn well that I keep forgetting that.
So thank you once again for this superb story with an amazing ending.
I absolutely loved it. Thanks my dear friend. It was Awesome!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Debi, thank you for the six stars. I must say that is one of finest most thoughtful reviews I have ever received. Thank you. Terry.
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Terry, your profile picture that is up right now is the one you used when you wrote your sweet story of Zoey, named something like, I married Doris Day. I loved that story..... I thank you for one of nicest thank you's I have had in a long time! You are so kind.
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Debi, right you are. This coming Sunday I will post my Christmas Newsletter, that makes a reference to my current state. I wanted to show in the picture, the former curley-haired red head. LOL
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I love it. I love your red hair. Did you happen to see my granddaughters posts a couple weeks ago? If not, please look and see my oldest one Kenzie, who does much of my art is a redhead and a beauty too.
Can't wait to see your newsletter! Maybe I will wait till Sunday for mine too.
I apologize that I spelled Zoe's name wrong. I looked just a bit ago to see what the name of your Doris Day story was. And that is when I realized that and also that you were married about 2 months after we were. I won't forget now as you were married in 74 for 44 years. Gosh I hope I don't make it worse by talking about her, but I know how I hate it when people avoid talking about the loved ones I lost.
I love when I get to talk about them. I love that you talk about her so much tho, because I truly almost feel like I knew her.
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Debi, I talk about her and to her all the time...LOL, not a problem. You were just a kid when you got married. You do have a good looking family.
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Your sweet
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Ooops, you're sweet!
Comment from karenina
A feel good story which reminds us of the huge difference between paralyzing fear and motivational fear.
With all of life's ventures we face nagging concerns about "What could go wrong?"
Buckling under the gravity of what it's is a one way ticket to failure.
It is not a weakness to acknowledge and even determinedly envision those "What ifs."
Relateable metaphor between new birth and "pregnant possibilities" in Jimmy's business endeavor and his burgeoning family!
As ever, a joy to read your work...
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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A feel good story which reminds us of the huge difference between paralyzing fear and motivational fear.
With all of life's ventures we face nagging concerns about "What could go wrong?"
Buckling under the gravity of what it's is a one way ticket to failure.
It is not a weakness to acknowledge and even determinedly envision those "What ifs."
Relateable metaphor between new birth and "pregnant possibilities" in Jimmy's business endeavor and his burgeoning family!
As ever, a joy to read your work...
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Karenina, thank you for the six stars! Your insightful review makes me sound like a better writer than I am. Thank you. Terry.
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No... You really are that good!
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Comment from lyenochka
Great motivational story and I liked your refrain of "what could go wrong?" It's important to consider all the possible pitfalls but not be afraid of them. But yet another child on the way means life still gives new challenges and motivations! Guess he did have time with Carolyn.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Great motivational story and I liked your refrain of "what could go wrong?" It's important to consider all the possible pitfalls but not be afraid of them. But yet another child on the way means life still gives new challenges and motivations! Guess he did have time with Carolyn.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Helen, thank you for the six stars! I guess he did have a few minutes with Carolyn...LOL, thank you. Terry.